Authors ~ Review your own work?

[RepresentingWrath]

Okay, serious reply. Move it to another subforum(this does not belong to artist general), and I will write a proper review.

 

[2wordsperminute]

Wait this is in artist general? lmao

 

[TheEldritchGod]

After reading this story, my whites are whiter. My brights are brighter, and my bowel movements are both firm and as regular as a German train schedule. It allowed me to transcend physical form and become a being of pure thought made of the scent of rose petals and blow jobs. If you do not read this book, you will die alone, unwept, unloved, and unsung.

4/5 stars.

 

[Lysander_Works]

Jesus fucking Christ.

Yeah, I low-key feel that bud.

My books is perfect

*Sigh,* what have I just done?

Naturally, if you rate yourself 5/5 you're deliberately or accidentally overlooking the flaws in your own work and don't mind being perceived as arrogant, boastful and self-aggrandizing, which probably means that you are. That's fine I guess.

Well, no book is perfect; ever, so anyone claiming to have a perfect book is either trolling or its as you say.
Maybe it's a better approach not to even rate any of our own work, but instead to be proud to have made it in the first place... except for the illegal content. Need I say more?

Okay, serious reply. Move it to another subforum(this does not belong to artist general), and I will write a proper review.

I could have sworn I placed this in Author General and not Artist General. Must have developed dyslexia for a few seconds.

 

[RepresentingWrath]

I could have sworn I placed this in Author General and not Artist General. Must have developed dyslexia for a few seconds.

It happens. I'll do the self-review tomorrow.

 

[Assurbanipal_II]

An interesting idea ~ hear me out.

It would take a long time and a lot of critical self reflection for anyone to be able to review their own work properly, and even then, there would of course be a bit of bias left over; it sure isn't for just everyone, but I want to see if anyone is up for the idea. We can't make our own review on our main SH, so here is a forum thread devoted to just that. Preferred only if you've already had some level of feedback from others first.

The rule is: write a short review of your own book/story. Try to be as self-mindful and critical as possible; highlighting any positives and negatives, as if you were in the mind of a different reader. Some spoilers are expected. I'll go first.

Story: Overlap
Link: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/814457/overlap/

Immediate Rating: 4/5 Stars [POV from reading all chapters]
Review: "Overlap is a fairly immersive experience that depicts a slice-of-life style of a human who on most occasions is talking to an Altiri alien from a distant world using telepathy, a power that was given to him by this special Lumina. Their conversations are usually incredible, but the very of existence for Lumina is often called into question of plausibility by the main character. While not prevalent in every chapter, there are some key moments of this long story that give off a magical moment of heavy emotion, through reflections made between experiences and entertaining questions poised directly to the readers."

"However, this cannot be said for every individual chapter. The moments are fairly split up. Specifically after part 2 (beginning on Chapter 27-A), this split is just balanced enough to provide a certain break from the more serious moments of Overlap. That said, the weakest point of Overlap is unfortunately its very beginning; part 1 (Chapters 1-26). Simply stated, the exposition, character building, and plot building all to the main point takes a bit too long. In Part 1, Reed is a character mostly by himself; a loner of his own environment. Despite the interest of the strangeness happening around him, the style of how Overlap plays out has such a strong difference in all subsequent chapters that come after part 2 starts. This means that part 1 of this story is going to feel like its own separate segment, and because Lumina for the most part is not part of this segment where she is in the rest of the continued story, all of Part 1 is more of a prelude than anything else. Given that comparison, Chapters 1-26, standing alone, are simply not as fun as the rest of the book. Though it does get better and more interesting, it apparently has to take 26 chapters to do so. Many would call this a pacing mistake, and I would agree with that analysis."

"I'd say it is worth the read, but one would have to set aside a lot of time, especially to get over that initial hurtle, or just risk skipping to Chapter 20 in the first place. Some won't want to wait, and that's perfectly understandable. For all of these reasons, 4/5 stars."

My work is obviously perfect. Flawless. Immaculate. Every critic was sent to Siberia.

 

[Bartun]

Me self-reviewing:

 

[ElijahRyne]

An interesting idea ~ hear me out.

It would take a long time and a lot of critical self reflection for anyone to be able to review their own work properly, and even then, there would of course be a bit of bias left over; it sure isn't for just everyone, but I want to see if anyone is up for the idea. We can't make our own review on our main SH, so here is a forum thread devoted to just that. Preferred only if you've already had some level of feedback from others first.

The rule is: write a short review of your own book/story. Try to be as self-mindful and critical as possible; highlighting any positives and negatives, as if you were in the mind of a different reader. Some spoilers are expected. I'll go first.

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Story: Overlap
Link: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/814457/overlap/

Immediate Rating: 4/5 Stars [POV from reading all chapters]
Review: "Overlap is a fairly immersive experience that depicts a slice-of-life style of a human who on most occasions is talking to an Altiri alien from a distant world using telepathy, a power that was given to him by this special Lumina. Their conversations are usually incredible, but the very of existence for Lumina is often called into question of plausibility by the main character. While not prevalent in every chapter, there are some key moments of this long story that give off a magical moment of heavy emotion, through reflections made between experiences and entertaining questions poised directly to the readers."

"However, this cannot be said for every individual chapter. The moments are fairly split up. Specifically after part 2 (beginning on Chapter 27-A), this split is just balanced enough to provide a certain break from the more serious moments of Overlap. That said, the weakest point of Overlap is unfortunately its very beginning; part 1 (Chapters 1-26). Simply stated, the exposition, character building, and plot building all to the main point takes a bit too long. In Part 1, Reed is a character mostly by himself; a loner of his own environment. Despite the interest of the strangeness happening around him, the style of how Overlap plays out has such a strong difference in all subsequent chapters that come after part 2 starts. This means that part 1 of this story is going to feel like its own separate segment, and because Lumina for the most part is not part of this segment where she is in the rest of the continued story, all of Part 1 is more of a prelude than anything else. Given that comparison, Chapters 1-26, standing alone, are simply not as fun as the rest of the book. Though it does get better and more interesting, it apparently has to take 26 chapters to do so. Many would call this a pacing mistake, and I would agree with that analysis."

"I'd say it is worth the read, but one would have to set aside a lot of time, especially to get over that initial hurtle, or just risk skipping to Chapter 20 in the first place. Some won't want to wait, and that's perfectly understandable. For all of these reasons, 4/5 stars."

The Thread Tree (Interactive Story)

An archive of the events surrounding the before, during, and after of the Thread Tree incident of 1547. You are part of the Detective department. You are looking into the Thread Tree incident of 1547. You can send memos to the archive department, the exorcist department, the monastic...

www.scribblehub.com

6.8/10
Negatives:
The story is a bit cliche and most of the mysteries, so far at least, given can already be solved. I have difficulty with grammar and am slightly repetitive. The chapters are short, partially because if I want to respond to more than one of the detectives, I would rather do so in 400 words, but the other reason is because it is a bit difficult for me to do more than 700 words a week without quickly burning out. The story is also an interactive one, that currently has only readers and no active detectives, so it might take a while before things start ramping up.

The Good:
I have a type of story that is rarely told on this site, detective horror, and, if you pair that with how I am writing it, I believe that it is currently one of the more unique stories being told here. How so? Well it is an interactive detective horror that is told similar to how Dracula was. I believe the story is, at least slightly, interesting and consistent. Most of the mysteries already introduced are solvable with the info provided. I also have some prior experience writing an interactive story, so I know how to make it seem more fun.

Why did I write this?
Well, I had a story idea that I believe was interesting and I wanted to get used to consistently posting for future projects. I also wanted to test some of the limits of telling a story here on ScribbleHub and believe that interactive stories are a fun way of doing so. I also want active readers to some extent.

 

[PancakesWitch]

0.5/5
This fucking piece of shit of an Author won't stop writing shit stories that are only fun inside her head instead of trying to appeal to the great masses, therefore its utter garbage for anybody but herself, autistic even.
I wish my favorite author of "generic litrpg apocalypse royal road top seller" would write as much as this nasty neet bitch, because she writes way too much but its all garbage so nobody reads it anyways and she's not earning one hundred thousand bucks from selling her soul to amazon every month, therefore garbage.

 

[ManwX]

I rate myself 666/5...

 

[Lysander_Works]

Me self-reviewing:

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Sometimes, I just feel like a Tyrannosaurus, period.
I'm good for now, I've had my morning lunch today.

The Thread Tree (Interactive Story)

An archive of the events surrounding the before, during, and after of the Thread Tree incident of 1547. You are part of the Detective department. You are looking into the Thread Tree incident of 1547. You can send memos to the archive department, the exorcist department, the monastic...

www.scribblehub.com

6.8/10
Negatives:
The story is a bit cliche and most of the mysteries, so far at least, given can already be solved. I have difficulty with grammar and am slightly repetitive. The chapters are short, partially because if I want to respond to more than one of the detectives, I would rather do so in 400 words, but the other reason is because it is a bit difficult for me to do more than 700 words a week without quickly burning out. The story is also an interactive one, that currently has only readers and no active detectives, so it might take a while before things start ramping up.

The Good:
I have a type of story that is rarely told on this site, detective horror, and, if you pair that with how I am writing it, I believe that it is currently one of the more unique stories being told here. How so? Well it is an interactive detective horror that is told similar to how Dracula was. I believe the story is, at least slightly, interesting and consistent. Most of the mysteries already introduced are solvable with the info provided. I also have some prior experience writing an interactive story, so I know how to make it seem more fun.

Why did I write this?
Well, I had a story idea that I believe was interesting and I wanted to get used to consistently posting for future projects. I also wanted to test some of the limits of telling a story here on ScribbleHub and believe that interactive stories are a fun way of doing so. I also want active readers to some extent.

Still looks like an interesting idea. Interactive stories are very difficult to set up well, and mostly time consuming as heck. Sounds like a good way to get in some practice too.

I rate myself 666/5...

Not 69?

 

[RepresentingWrath]

Here I am, upholding my promise to you. Before I start, I want to ask for forgiveness, since I will try to keep it short, simple, and won't get into the nitty-gritty details. More than that, I can miss some stuff, excuse me for that as well. Lastly, I obviously judge based solely on what was written. I won't judge based on how I envisioned this or that, or judge based on the finished story, even though it's unfinished.

Okay, I think I will start with worldbuilding. It's bad. First of all, transmigration\isekai feel like a cheap tool. There was an attempt to make it matter a bit more, but the author wasn't able to follow through. Second big problem is the actual worldbuilding that is lacking. Although it's a modern world with close to zero differences to our world, these differences aren't shown or brought up enough. The only time author bring those differences up is when it's necessary for the plot. And descriptions are lacking when it comes to surroundings.

Characters. Hard for me to assess my own characters, since it's hard to separate what I wanted to show\convey, and what I got in the end. I would say characters are alright. They are not bad, but not good either. The reason why I can't say they are good is because sometimes author forces his characters to do things. There is a more serious problem, but I will talk about it a bit later.

I guess I can mention a big upside that MC is really weak and unlikeable. Not the Japanese type of weak, or when people call edgy murderhobo unlikeable. He is kinda like Kei Kurono in the beginning of Gantz. It's a rather unusual MC. Needless to say that his transformation is way to drawn out, and mistakes were made when author forced him to do thing, and somewhat lost his grasp on who MC was supposed to be.

Plot. This one is even harder to judge myself. I think the most fair evaluation would be to call it generic. The reason why Plot is generic and I struggle to say more about it, is because of the next big problem. Pacing.

Pacing is a huge problem that affects everything: characters, worldbuilding, and plot. I won't go at length why or where things go awry. I will keep this part short. Author writes stuff that doesn't matter, and does not write stuff that matters to the story. Wastes wordcount. So, even though it is tagged as slow-paced, the pace is way too slow.

The style and grammar. I won't mention typos, since it's hard to notice them on your own, your eyes kinda glaze over them, that's why they appear in the first place. I try to read every chapter and use grammarly AND google edit to look for typos, but I can miss some. As for grammar, it is okay, at least I think so. It can be better, but it's not super bad. Style. There is no style.

Lastly dialogues. I would say they are ok\good. Dialogues are realistic. But I might be biased here.

And that's it. I 100% missed something, but I don't want to spend more time on this, sorry. Now it's time for final rating. 2\5 stars. And before you start saying I degraded myself or try to fish for compliments or something. This is basically an average rating in my feedback threads. Maybe a bit lower than average. But considering how not a single novel has earned more than 4 stars, my own is in the middle.

P.S. On the odd chance someone who got a feedback from me will see this self-review. I rated my own novel based on 80+ chapters. If you think I have more mistakes in my own novel yet rated it the same as yours, keep in mind that I probably skipped talking about plot, world, and characters in your story. And remember that I've only read 1-3 chapters, which means, that by chapter 80 you might as well get 4 stars, or 0.25 stars.

 

[Sagacious_Punk]

Well it was a nice thought experiment. Oh well.

Full disclosure, as a thought experiment, I'd be down for it, just not in a public setting.

Some things require discretion, if only because people are hardwired to jump to (any) conclusions unless they remodel their psyche at a core level.

 

[ReadLight]

Oh boy! Here I am to self advertise reflect:

My current and only book: Genshin Impact X Terraria: The Terarian in Teyvat | Scribble Hub
One of the video game fan-fic of all time.
I wrote it because I've played so much video games, that all my daily power fantasies are in pixilated magical guns.

The story so far follows two MC:
One is your average everyday ordinary nothing special feel free to self-insert vanilla flavored webnovel MC who got reincarnated by truck-kun.
And the other one is a bird person.

To be entirely honest, this story isn't the best there is on this website. Unsurprising considering the author is a hobbyist and not a pro.
But there they are, the characters, powers, items, backgrounds, all from the fandoms that's probably what captured your interest to begin with.

One obvious strength of the book is its positioning: Terraria is a fairly niche fandom on this platform, and using the world of Teyvat as the background makes the story unique. Another potential fun part of this book is to see how would the mash the elements of two completely different games into a single story, and what kind of events, interactions, conflicts, and BS may arise from such amalgamation.
It's like chemistry: what would happen if you mix those two things? Would it go boom-boom?


However, as with all marriages, this book isn't perfect.
One valid critique would be that the author currently can not strike too fine of a balance between explaining the background/setting and moving the plot. This makes the story a slow pace one. While the story isn't stationary, the fact that it won't be until chapter 13 for a proper antagonist relevant to the current Arc may be a bit concerning.

A fine comparison to demonstrate that issue, this book: Fate/The Hunter and His Doll | Scribble Hub is an entirely different story in an entirely different fandom from mine, yet the first few chapters' plots mirror each other quite closely (the similarity is coincidental, but it is striking to me when I first read it):

- MC reincarnate into a video game world.
- MC meets their girl.
- MC encounters desperate people of that world in need of help.
- MC saves those people out of the goodness of his heart and via an epic fight.
- MC moves on to the next part of the plot.

That book did all of those in 2 chapters.
Mine took 5.

In addition, the choice by the author to set the story in the ancient past of the video game's time line is questionable.
It's safe to assume that a reader searching a book in a certain fandom wishes to see their favorite characters from that fandom in the book. By setting the story in the ancient past, a lot of those video game characters aren't even born yet, and won't be until many many chapters later.
The author made that choice to lean heavier towards writing his own stuff and to simply transport the original contents into his work.

The implication of that choice is in the eye of the beholder.

But, with all that said, (The following are basically promotions, will remove if it deviates from the premise of this thread) the author is learning as they write, and is focused more on creating a good, coherent story, rather than trying to up his internet numbers by writing episodic power fever dreams. (Not that any of those are bad)
The author tries to insert humorous moments whenever appropriate, but humor is also subjective.
The author tries to stick closely to the original features of the video games.
The author is just one amongst the many who are inspired to write, and wishes nothing more than for their book to add a little bit more joy into your days.

And if you just kinda, you know, turn off your brains a bit and don't focus too too hard on the logistics, I think it is an enjoyable read.
Follow those characters' journey, learn their motivation, struggles and resolves. Enjoy epic fights where the MC fights gods with rocket launcher that shoots carrots that somehow works. Read as they love, laugh, cry, die, and literally make history.

Overall,
I'd give this book a solid Decent Outta Good.

 

[Premier]

I’ve already rated my story 5/5. It’s perfect and any mistakes spotted and fixed make it more perfect.

 

[TsumiHokiro]

It is obviously meant to be an experiment and not meant for everyone. There are too many points of view, with each chapter focusing on a different character, making it difficult for regular people to sympathise with whoever is in the scene. Also, there's no real consistency between the length of the chapters, some characters being given more "screen time" than others, which just helps people not being able to approach all the characters that are introduced.
Final: 3/5

 

[Pixytokisaki14]

Okay, serious reply. Move it to another subforum(this does not belong to artist general), and I will write a proper review.

3/5. I butchered A LOT of stuff including plot holes, pace and overall story telling, but I did well on the character development

 

[Deleted member 84247]

6/5! This author never misses! 0/5 for not releasing chapter 4.

 

[J_Chemist]

This thread is a conglomerate of everything I expected it to devolve into.

You're all shameless.

 

[ZukoMee]

my bowel movements are both firm and as regular as a German train schedule. It allowed me to transcend physical form and become a being of pure thought made of the scent of rose petals and blow jobs.

Dude.