Lysander_Works
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An interesting idea ~ hear me out.
It would take a long time and a lot of critical self reflection for anyone to be able to review their own work properly, and even then, there would of course be a bit of bias left over; it sure isn't for just everyone, but I want to see if anyone is up for the idea. We can't make our own review on our main SH, so here is a forum thread devoted to just that. Preferred only if you've already had some level of feedback from others first.
The rule is: write a short review of your own book/story. Try to be as self-mindful and critical as possible; highlighting any positives and negatives, as if you were in the mind of a different reader. Some spoilers are expected. I'll go first.
Story: Overlap
Link: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/814457/overlap/
Immediate Rating: 4/5 Stars [POV from reading all chapters]
Review: "Overlap is a fairly immersive experience that depicts a slice-of-life style of a human who on most occasions is talking to an Altiri alien from a distant world using telepathy, a power that was given to him by this special Lumina. Their conversations are usually incredible, but the very of existence for Lumina is often called into question of plausibility by the main character. While not prevalent in every chapter, there are some key moments of this long story that give off a magical moment of heavy emotion, through reflections made between experiences and entertaining questions poised directly to the readers."
"However, this cannot be said for every individual chapter. The moments are fairly split up. Specifically after part 2 (beginning on Chapter 27-A), this split is just balanced enough to provide a certain break from the more serious moments of Overlap. That said, the weakest point of Overlap is unfortunately its very beginning; part 1 (Chapters 1-26). Simply stated, the exposition, character building, and plot building all to the main point takes a bit too long. In Part 1, Reed is a character mostly by himself; a loner of his own environment. Despite the interest of the strangeness happening around him, the style of how Overlap plays out has such a strong difference in all subsequent chapters that come after part 2 starts. This means that part 1 of this story is going to feel like its own separate segment, and because Lumina for the most part is not part of this segment where she is in the rest of the continued story, all of Part 1 is more of a prelude than anything else. Given that comparison, Chapters 1-26, standing alone, are simply not as fun as the rest of the book. Though it does get better and more interesting, it apparently has to take 26 chapters to do so. Many would call this a pacing mistake, and I would agree with that analysis."
"I'd say it is worth the read, but one would have to set aside a lot of time, especially to get over that initial hurtle, or just risk skipping to Chapter 20 in the first place. Some won't want to wait, and that's perfectly understandable. For all of these reasons, 4/5 stars."
It would take a long time and a lot of critical self reflection for anyone to be able to review their own work properly, and even then, there would of course be a bit of bias left over; it sure isn't for just everyone, but I want to see if anyone is up for the idea. We can't make our own review on our main SH, so here is a forum thread devoted to just that. Preferred only if you've already had some level of feedback from others first.
The rule is: write a short review of your own book/story. Try to be as self-mindful and critical as possible; highlighting any positives and negatives, as if you were in the mind of a different reader. Some spoilers are expected. I'll go first.
Story: Overlap
Link: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/814457/overlap/
Immediate Rating: 4/5 Stars [POV from reading all chapters]
Review: "Overlap is a fairly immersive experience that depicts a slice-of-life style of a human who on most occasions is talking to an Altiri alien from a distant world using telepathy, a power that was given to him by this special Lumina. Their conversations are usually incredible, but the very of existence for Lumina is often called into question of plausibility by the main character. While not prevalent in every chapter, there are some key moments of this long story that give off a magical moment of heavy emotion, through reflections made between experiences and entertaining questions poised directly to the readers."
"However, this cannot be said for every individual chapter. The moments are fairly split up. Specifically after part 2 (beginning on Chapter 27-A), this split is just balanced enough to provide a certain break from the more serious moments of Overlap. That said, the weakest point of Overlap is unfortunately its very beginning; part 1 (Chapters 1-26). Simply stated, the exposition, character building, and plot building all to the main point takes a bit too long. In Part 1, Reed is a character mostly by himself; a loner of his own environment. Despite the interest of the strangeness happening around him, the style of how Overlap plays out has such a strong difference in all subsequent chapters that come after part 2 starts. This means that part 1 of this story is going to feel like its own separate segment, and because Lumina for the most part is not part of this segment where she is in the rest of the continued story, all of Part 1 is more of a prelude than anything else. Given that comparison, Chapters 1-26, standing alone, are simply not as fun as the rest of the book. Though it does get better and more interesting, it apparently has to take 26 chapters to do so. Many would call this a pacing mistake, and I would agree with that analysis."
"I'd say it is worth the read, but one would have to set aside a lot of time, especially to get over that initial hurtle, or just risk skipping to Chapter 20 in the first place. Some won't want to wait, and that's perfectly understandable. For all of these reasons, 4/5 stars."