Ask Stone or Ink for Feedback. (Closeddd)

[StoneInky]

(Temporarily closed cuz I found I am bad with responsibility. Will try...to review the remaining novels but will likely forget. Only throw novel in here if you are ok with possibly getting a review after a month.)

I'm not a professional, just a bored reader doing this for funsies!
This is a reminder that you don't have to follow my suggestions if you dislike them, and you can ask for feedback multiple times if you want.

(P.S. Tempokai, thank you for the idea. I got lazy searching for authors, lmaooo. You guys should come to me instead!)

Please choose from the categories and post a link to your novel.


Requirements
No harem, reverse harem, or stories that are 90% smut. No AI edited stuff. Everything else is okay.
If I don't think I'm the target audience of your novel, I might skip it. It's nothing personal—just worried I won't be much help, lol.


Different Types of Feedback (Choose one!)

Ink (Reader Impressions)
I'll give light, casual feedback. What I like about the novel, what I don't, whether I would quit the novel in the first two chapters, etc. It'll just be a general vibe check.
I'll only read one to five chapters depending on my mood, so don't expect me to fully complete your novel before saying anything.

Stone (Developmental Critique)?
I'll give more focused feedback on your novel. The pacing, structure, character tone, clarity, etc. I'll go into specific paragraphs and dissect the ones I don't like. I've been told I'm a bit... rough(?) so don't ask if you can't handle it.
For this one, tell me if you also want suggestions, or if you just want to know what feels off.
Again, I'll review one to five chapters depending on my mood, so don't expect me to fully complete your novel.

+Bonus? If I end up liking and completing your story, I'll ask if you want the overall feedback too.

 

[Fairemont]

Since you just read mine... what did you think (aside from what you left as comments)?

 

[StoneInky]

Since you just read mine... what did you think (aside from what you left as comments)?

Comments as a reader are completely different from comments as a beta-reader... are you sure you want a review?

 

[Fairemont]

Comments as a reader are completely different from comments as a beta-reader... are you sure you want a review?

You make it sound scary!

But sure, I don't get to hear from people often so it will be beneficial.

 

[LuoirM]

Two questions...

I post this one story on WN, can I send link or will I be slapped across the face

If for the first 100 chapters there's no harem can I still qualify dad

 

[ReiHayashi]

Me, me! Please stone my story (mostly because I'm still waiting for the god Tempokai to roast me)

 

[Representing_Tromba]

I'm not a professional, just a bored reader doing this for funsies!
This is a reminder that you don't have to follow my suggestions if you dislike them, and you can ask for feedback multiple times if you want.

(P.S. Tempokai, thank you for the idea. I got lazy searching for authors, lmaooo. You guys should come to me instead!)

Please choose from the categories and post a link to your novel.


Requirements
No harem, reverse harem, or stories that are 90% smut. No AI edited stuff. Everything else is okay.
If I don't think I'm the target audience of your novel, I might skip it. It's nothing personal—just worried I won't be much help, lol.


Different Types of Feedback (Choose one!)

Ink (Reader Impressions)
I'll give light, casual feedback. What I like about the novel, what I don't, whether I would quit the novel in the first two chapters, etc. It'll just be a general vibe check.
I'll read depending on my mood, so don't expect me to fully complete your novel before saying anything.

Stone (Developmental Critique)?
I'll give more focused feedback on your novel. The pacing, structure, character tone, clarity, etc. I'll go into specific paragraphs and dissect the ones I don't like. I've been told I'm a bit... rough(?) so don't ask if you can't handle it.
For this one, please tell me if you also want suggestions, or if you just want to know what feels off.
I'll only review one to five chapters depending on my mood, so again, don't expect me to fully complete your novel.

+Bonus? If I end up liking and completing your story, I'll ask if you want the overall feedback too.

I would love Inks impression of my work! I fit all the requirements as far as I can tell. Some of the chapters are a bit long so I don't expect you to read a full 5 unless if you really enjoy it. Thank you again for considering it!

The Supernatural Case of an Accidental Time Traveler Volume 1

Ever consider going back in time? Is it on purpose and to a specific time? Well, not this time in The Supernatural Case of an Accidental Time Traveler. This story is the first in a series of time-travel escapades with various supernatural and mythological undertones scattered throughout the...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[StoneInky]

You make it sound scary!

But sure, I don't get to hear from people often so it will be beneficial.

Stone or Ink, then?

Two questions...

I post this one story on WN, can I send link or will I be slapped across the face

If for the first 100 chapters there's no harem can I still qualify dad

1. I don't care where you post it, as long as I don't have to make an account or something to access it.

2. If there's a harem-y atmosphere, I'll probably dislike it and won't be able to offer much help. If you're still ok with that, choose Stone or Ink.

Me, me! Please stone my story (mostly because I'm still waiting for the god Tempokai to roast me)

Sameeeee! Totally understandable, lmaoooo. I'll get to it, then.

 

[Fairemont]

Stone or Ink, then?

Ink will be fine. I don't think I would waste your time with developmental edits.

We can leave that time consuming stuff for the people who will benefit most from it. Im too stubborn!

 

[LuoirM]

2. If there's a harem-y atmosphere, I'll probably dislike it and won't be able to offer much help. If you're still ok with that, choose Stone or Ink.

Gimme that boi Ink, lemme spank em

Romance only happens at chapter 60 and you prolly won't be interested that far so here goes

 

[Erysion]

Can I ask for Ink? And since we are the same person, are you still open for feedback?

This is the story:

King of Blue Flames

Rinaldo, of the Luminous Knights, is known far and wide as a brilliant swordsman who can cause injury or death with a glance. Despite being feared as “Evil-Eye Rinaldo”, he is actually a normal person with no special skills or power. To avoid an arranged marriage with his arrogant and...

www.scribblehub.com

It's written before LLM and AI is a thing. So it should be okay.
Unless I'm a time traveler and somehow already had access to them?
There used to be 10 negative reviews but they disappeared.
Tell me how bad it is and if those *1 reviews were justified.

 

[Naash]

Alright. I'll ask for Stone. Because I want to get thrown rocks at but also because I need solid criticism about what I write.
Alright. Here's the novel.

 

[Akkizakura]

1. I don't care where you post it, as long as I don't have to make an account or something to access it.

@Esia @Macha no feedbacks for you Ao3 shills.

It's my turn now.
I will ask for Ink.

 

[Hoshino]

Ink.

(Pick whatever you want-nya)

X

X + 1

X + 2

 

[StoneInky]

You make it sound scary!

But sure, I don't get to hear from people often so it will be beneficial.

Here it is! If you have time, feel free to gimme feedback... on the feedback(?) Lol.

Spoiler: Review on The Wandering Maiden's Travel Guide

First Impressions:

The title of the novel was very nice and sweet. It instantly made me give the novel a read.

The cover, though, made me assume this story was set in modern times, so I was confused for a decent first half of the novel. The cover has a girl walking down a cleanly paved road in the mountains, she has cut hair, a short skirt that goes up to her knees, and it looks like she's wearing modern clothes if you don't observe closely. I only noticed it had the Historical tag later.

The synopsis was very casual. I love the vibe and how it tells you the personality of the narrator before you even open the novel. I like how it mentions she'll travel, too. Awww. The problem was that it felt vague and windy? The later part of the synopsis tells me what the story's about, but I was confused before then. If I were in a bad mood, I might have quit the novel here.



Thoughts on Early Chapters:

I liked the announcement telling me to check the glossary and end of chapter notes, lol. Most writers don't bother to go that far. I think your notes upped the quality of your novel a lot, so I would prefer if you keep them. The people who dislike can choose to skip them.

I was taken aback when I noticed the story started inside the Academy. The speech was fun to read, and it sounded like something a real professor would say. However, I was confused whether I was accidently reading a prologue. When I checked and found it was indeed Chapter 1, I even wondered if I opened the wrong book.

Until I scrolled down and saw the adorable MC and Jingyi. I sank into my chair again, reassured. The dialogue was fun and cute. I immediately liked both of them. Jingyi felt like one of those people you can't help but love irl. The MC felt like the young lady she was, consistent, and I liked how she narrated things.

Chapter Two. I didn't get what was happening at first. Why were they sneaking out? It was long, too, so I got bored for a while. Then Han Zhiran came, and I understood! I almost skipped this chapter without reading, though, so that was a close call.



Bonus! Thoughts on the Overall Story:

Your MC's narration is the biggest strength you have, but you don't use it a lot. The synopsis made me think the novel was going to be one focused on the MC, but you kept talking about something else, so I sadly skimmed past chapters not focused on her.

Then we were introduced to the tournament. It was really fun at the beginning. I like how you wrote it to be realistic, funny, and not just a generic NPC fight. In the middle of it, though, I got impatient. I wondered why it was taking so long for the MC to start her cultivation travel arc! The one mentioned in the synopsis!

I think I started getting more invested at Arc 2? Here we finally got into the plot. I liked all the lessons and what they were about. It wasn't generic, it was stuff with real substance. I also (guilty cough) liked the spa scene? Not for questionable reasons, I swear. I just liked the character interactions.

Speaking of the characters, Arc 1 had lots, but we were introduced to even more in Arc 2. There were adding up to be too many at that point. I was confused who was who and getting characteristics mixed up. Because of this, the interactions were fun but felt surface deep. I couldn't get into some well.

Last chapter, Mastering the Sword, ended on a fun note. Will wait for more updates!

 

[Fairemont]

Not too bad then.

That is good. Good that my cover and synopsis are the worst parts. I never thought the road looked paved, I always thought it looked like compacted dirt.

Your feedback style is good. No worries to be had! It covers the stuff it needed to. Hit some pros and cons. Strengths and weaknesses. Touched on individual things that you, the reader, had trouble with, too.

I appreciate that you took the time to read it! Maybe I'll add another spa scene for you.

 

[SuperMushroom]

I'm always on the lookout for reads!

Ink me!!!

 

[Fairemont]

I suppose I could ask if you have any thoughts on how to improve the synopsis. I always run into trouble trying to condense enough stuff into something presentable yet accurate to the story, so I just went with presentable xD

Ive gone through like six very different versions...

 

[StoneInky]

I suppose I could ask if you have any thoughts on how to improve the synopsis. I always run into trouble trying to condense enough stuff into something presentable yet accurate to the story, so I just went with presentable xD

Ive gone through like six very different versions...

Hm... I suppose it depends on what you want your novel to be about. Not everything in it, just the center core. Then focus only on that.

My suggestion would be taking out everything that isn't directly related to MC's personal arc, as in her journey on becoming a strong cultivator and traveling the world. Take the first five paragraphs, condense them into a single paragraph, and treat them like backstory to that plot. It'll keep things simple and prevent readers from becoming confused.

Unless you have a different center in mind, of course, in which case you can choose that arc instead.

 

[Fairemont]

I think the issue is that there is a lot beyond just the MC, and like you, it throws a lot of people off.