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I went for a partially blind protagonist in my novel, where vampires can see perfectly fine at night but are mostly blind in sunlight. Since my vampire protagonist prefers to blend in with people, there are plenty of daytime scenes where she has to compensate by other senses. Even at night...

I feel bad about abandoning this thread, so quickly popping in again for some fast feedback. I am however, seeing a lot of the same flaws being repeated, so a bit of general advice first: A good synopsis will tell potential readers why they should invest time in your story. That means it will...

Yeah, you misunderstood. I am not making any big statements about the strict ordering of headers, or the font sized that should be used in headers. All I am pointing out is that there is appears to be a solid principle behind the spacing between headers and paragraphs, and that changing it...

Was just going to vote, but this example made me comment. Apologies in advance for making a mockery of this example you posted. I'm not trying to ridicule, just genuinely adding an extra aspect to the discussing There's a bit of a false dichotomy in the question of the poll, and thus in the...

Actually, my impression is the exact opposite. Scribblehub has some rather solid vertical rhythm, at least compared to certain other sites (looking at you RR). Default font size is 15px, which is nice and comfortable Line height is a spacious 24px, only a hair more than optimal 1.5 times the...

Yes, the poor old rate synopsis thread that I've invested so much in is kind of dead. To be honest, writing my own novel has left me with little time for the crits I used to give out. Buuuut... let me try anyway. The first three parts, up to and including 'world creation' are fine, if a bit...

Creativity, depth, originality, carefully thought out plots, narratives, and character arcs do exist on this site. You will need to dig a little deeper for them though. Popularity, by definition, is acquired most easily when you cater to the lowest common denominator. As a result, the most...

There are several ways I write conversation. My most basic of conversations are with simple dialog tags: I only use the above format when the reader is already intimately familiar with the characters, or when there is a lot of information to convey. When the reader doesn't yet know the...

To me, it feels like your problem here is in the setup, or the lack thereof. You can not have a heavy-hitting payoff without setup. It all goes wrong in your first sentence: slowly came? Really? What is this, a fight scene or a smut scene? Inched, crept, wormed, ... there are dozens of...

I'd say the thing I'm writing right now fits this rather well. MC is maybe not entirely human, yet trying to fit in with humans, by doing all kinds of things that can be classified as not entirely healthy. https://www.scribblehub.com/series/313328/vale-is-not-a-vampire/

It's a bit of a broad and open-ended question you've got here. Where there any particular elements in this idea that you're uncertain about? Anything specific that made you doubt this is good enough? Anything in particular that prompted you to ask this question? Might make it easier for us to...

An unreliable narrator means you can't take all of the written words at face value. In other words, the narrator "lies" to the reader. The lies will often be about relatively small, but important details in the narrative. The deviations from the truth aren't always malicious. Generally, the...

Aaaah, I get to take a stab at an Ai-chan synopsis! I am not worthy. :blob_shock: I can't spot a lot of major things wrong here, but it does have some spots that can be polished a bit. Most of this is just nitpicking. (post review note: just a couple minor things, I said. And then I wrote a...

Man, seeing my own posts here on mobile sure makes me aware of how long-winded I am. It's like, who is this dude that just keeps on spitting out words as if he's the center of the universe. And then comes the realization that the pompous, long-winded ass is me. :blob_hmm: Embarrassing. Might...

Ah, another wiki user. I'm curious, what wiki program do you use? For my process, I tend to start out with a rough outline in a word document. That outline will get split into acts, and then into an outline of all major events as I write. Lately, for larger works, I tend to gravitate towards a...

Sure, post the edited version. I'll take another look. And um, here's my own synopsis, in case someone wants to take a look. It's for a story I'm wrapping the final chapters up for now. Hoping to get this in postable shape within another month or so. Title: Vale... is not a vampire Synopsis...

Might drop my own here a little later. Have some feedback first. "Join the protagonist" is redundant. These words add no extra information, and only cut into already limited space you have to hook readers. Make your first sentence more active. Maybe something like this: "Kuro dives into a new...

If you're looking for personal opinions: please don't. Every time I see original English writing overuse these I die a little inside. That aside here's a couple of things to consider: Think about your target audience. If you target full-on-weebs, go for it. If you want to branch out to a more...

I sort of randomly felt like sucking all of the fun out of this, so um... sorry, not sorry, I'm making this boring now. Each blob is represented by a code, a little piece of text with a fixed number of characters. On the main site the shortest blob is this one, coming in at 9 characters...

The classic big hitters: cave dragons, drakes, wyverns, hydras, manticores, etc. DnD monster manuals are always a good fallback as well, but I'm going to go beyond that for a minute and broaden the scope. power is not just a matter of what hits hardest or can take the most hits. It's about...