I'm sorry, but you are out. What is this? If it is not written by AI, then I'm sorry, but the undertone is too much. Apart from this, the first three "chapters" are not chapters at all. They are just info dumps.
Example for my accusation:
Kael's eyes snapped open, his heartbeat pounding in his...
Sigh
First of all, tag your story properly. A "bisexual MC" tag is not enough if he is in a relationship with a guy. But yeah, I'm going to give it a go. With BL, I meant those that really focus on it. I'll do it tomorrow, though. I'm going to write the reviews for the others first, and then...
I'm kinda bored, so I'm giving you the chance to get a free feedback/review for your work (grammar not included since I suck at it). Putting grammar aside, I'm a seasoned reader and have quite a bit of experience, meaning I should be able to give you some valuable pointers.
Requirements...
Dear Kittylovely,
I hope this letter finds you in a moment of calm, in the kind of stillness where thoughts can linger like sunlight filtering through late afternoon curtains — slow, warm, and golden.
There are things in life that one feels more than one understands. You know? Certain...
Have you ever read a traditionally published book? If so, the difference in quality is clear. One comes from knowledge, and the other from a mask of false pretense.
Anyway, there are a few aspects that give AI away.
Ehm slash. Yeah, spamming ehm slashes is something AI loves to do. Sure, it...
LOTM, The Perfect Run, Omniscient Reader's Viewpoint, Mother of Learning, My House of Horrors, Chrysalis, A Practical Guide to Evil, Beware of Chicken, A Soldier's Life, Trash of the Counts Family. Just to name a few.
It's not considered the peak of webnovels for nothing. Be it world-building, character development, side characters, or writing, everything is top-notch. The power system also isn't an unlimited xianxia-like slop but has clear, small ranks. And the love interest is not only interesting but...