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Hello kind people. I've been writing in my free time for a few months, but I'm fairly bad at taking a step back and putting off the glasses of the author while editing. Accordingly, it really isn't that easy for me to judge how well this opening would work, if published. Note that this is not...

Greetings, comrades. I'm currently training my writing skills, specifically focusing on first chapters and hooks. I would love to get some feedback on the opening of this story. All feedback is welcome, but I'm especially interested in whether the emotional tension between the siblings lands...

Hellow people. My first chapter is 3.3k words long, and I'm concerned it doesn't work because the "hook" is pretty much at the end. What rules of thumb do you follow for opening chapters?

Hello, fellow writing enthusiasts! I would really appreciate some feedback on the beginning of my novel. Every type of feedback is appreciated. Thank you in advance. As I haven't created a novel yet, I'll just drop it right here.

Hey! I’d love some honest feedback on this opening scene. I’m mostly trying to improve immersion and pacing. Does it hook you, do the characters feel real, and is anything confusing or awkward? Feel free to be blunt. ---- Levin faced his sister, who stood in front of him. He bit his lower lip...

Hi everyone! I’m currently working on improving my writing, especially immersion and “show vs. tell." I’ve been told my prose can feel a bit too “told” and not immersive enough, so I’d love feedback with that focus in mind. Any notes on what pulls you in (or breaks immersion) would be really...

Chapter 1: Don't Blink The kicks that had been raining down on Levin only moments ago began to lose their weight. The men’s screams grew duller, until they faded out completely. When he opened his eyes, there was only darkness. His hand twitched as he tried to push himself up—but that...

This is the beginning of my novel, I just wanna know if it's readable at all. The kicks that had been raining down on him just moments ago began to fade. The screams of the men grew muffled, but their faces burned themselves into Levin’s eyes. When he opened his eyes again, he saw nothing...