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While you all pretend // If this is the end // I'll do it again

It seems fitting that the author of /Conspiracy/ Girls will evaluate a conspiracy-themed story as the last evaluation! Since you asked in another thread 'What is missing?' , I will theme this evaluation around that! I think that you stepped on a lot of pitfalls that I tried to avoid while...

Gawr Gura graduates, the 7th trumpet has sounded ;_;

Technically a harem of three is called a foursome! (laugh) Chapter 1 of "A Tamer's Adventure" is more of a 'expectations correction' chapter. It does a lot of needed exposition, though not a great deal of storytelling! I think the story can be improved greatly by giving our main character and...

le 4chins... is le kill? lulz

I read this alongside Reftven's story! My immediate thought is that this is a 'twin-lined story' where two main plotlines intertwine with each other. My opinion is that this story can definitely appeal to a niche crowd, though finding a wider audience is difficult! Rather than change the...

This is a case of Reurent being biased and liking stuff that he likes. (laugh) I think that Resolute Will In A World Of Chaos is good! It just reads a little weird because the author really, really likes sci-fi I think, and it threw me off for a loop! Just tell people up-front this is a sci-fi...

This is quite possibly the strangest piece I have evaluated so far. Because I am also writing a war story, it really made me think back and reflect on my own writing and great war stories in games like Sword of Convallaria. While the grammar is mostly good, the descriptions fall flat at times...

Its quite well-known that I have been leaning to the left due to vertigo for two weeks now! :blob_paint: I'll still do my best to finish all the requests before two weeks is up! I already read the Chronicles-inspired (?) webnovel, its likely I'll write the evaluation after work!

Its actually quite rare that my opinion and Grok's diverge so sharply! AI can process an entire text at once, so it misses on a lot of nuance that the author has put into the work! It really does highlight that works are meant to be 'read' and 'enjoyed' rather than 'processed'! I see that there...

Major security breach if true! I've tested it out myself and ChatGPT is very off today. As a test, I asked it to review two chapters of my unpublished work, "Princess Wars", and it gave me the same 'quoting lines that do not exist' error. This has not happened in almost ever! The way I did it...

Very well! I shall evaluate your story first! I shall take a look at cute little girl Aurora's story! Since I am given the chance, I shall respond to Adonalsium-Will-Remember-Ou's question on how to write with impact! One thing I keep in mind is the question: "How should my words make my reader...

Here is some goblin goodness! Unlike my teacher, D., I actually can evaluate smut! My focus still remains on improving the writing since I haven't been given which specific parts to improve! Looking at your writing, I can see that you are going for an 'isekaied into a game' vibe! While keeping...

Haha! I am back from the dead! Illness and work are a deadly combination! This evaluation was actually written on the 31st! I edited it so that it is more concise and has simpler language! I can see what the author is going for: The main character is a brooding type that has little words, the...

Hurting my head trying to configure Live2D models for my AI vtubers...