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Finished the 5th Red Rising book. The best one but also the soapiest one.

If it's not hosted on scribble hub, just post on my RR thread. I can generally tell off the bat. Rarely I'll catch my mind wandering and then double back to discover why, but that's only like 10% of the time. RATING: Would not Keep Reading I made it a full page but was generally confused...

I've read 500 pages in two weeks. Let's gooo

Just went into business for myself while on vacation due to overwhelming demand of my clients who prefer me to the firm I take cases from.

RATING: Would not Keep Reading THE GOOD There is this self aware quality which helps a lot. Instead of being corny, it's just this character you're writing. I have this very clear voice in my head. I also saw one good joke in there: the talking with the fists. That was adequately set up and...

Critiques caught up. Royal Road. . . away

RATING: Back to Basics The first three sentences had egrigious mistakes: As dawn quickly approaches, a roaster rooster calls out, Beckoning why cap? all who hear its call to start their day. But at a nearby farmstead, a family of six has already started their day and is seated at the kitchen...

RATING: Would not Keep Reading THE GOOD/GREAT I kind of love the core idea you have going on here and I've never seen it before in my life. He died, got isekaid, died again and came back to earth in the 16th century. And his second life being kind of crappy but learning extra eartlhy poweres...

RATING: Would not Keep Reading THE GOOD The saving grace here is this forward drie. While it's about her father's death (or her pulling herself together or xyz section by section) you have this background element of 'something is happening, we have work to do'. It accomplishes a lot. And the...

Okay, explain the thought that went into those choices: 1) Why does he not know what his teacher teaches? 2) Why deoes he not know his relationship to his one family memeber? 3) What is his teacher's relationships with his "episodes"? Seen it before/ completely new. And then how does the text...

Hour 2 of 60 for train ride. Starting to think trains aren't as super special awesome as you see in the movies.

RATING: Would not keep reading. THE GOOD Strong opening. It has elements that make me feel like I was about to read a really cliche opening but the veer into mental health and what Il assumed was going to be a cliche being schizophrenic voices was awesome. Plus (heads up to all you cliche...

I am on tren

Going on a 60 hour train ride tomorrow. Wooooo

RATING: Would not Keep Reading GENERALLY I really want to analyze the opening paragraph, so I'll just comment on things generally. It's very long and over written. Several pages in, I wasn't sure what the point of anything was. There is little to no characterization of the two characters or...