Search results

Ugh... This cold is really kicking my ass. Still feeling like shit, but haven't tested positive for covid yet. (I have been exposed, so this could very well still be the early stages of covid... again). All of my writing is on hold for the time being, until I can concentrate for more than a...

Was there anything specific you wanted feedback on? Or are you just looking for general critique?

I'm glad you did. And it's fine if you're a little biased, as long as you're acknowledging it. Also yes, that actually makes perfect sense. It's likely a result of the structure I went with, and that will also feel like the character in question is sharing a monologue directly with the reader...

Well said. Also yes. Starcraft, Command & Conquer (Especially RA2; there is no C&C4)

Right now... "Liar Liar (Wasteland Monarchy)" by Kamelot Though it'll be over soon. Next up is "Here's to the Fall" by Kamelot. Off the same album.

Fire Emblem. In just one game in the series (Awakening), I racked up over 350 hours in a single save (obsessively pursued everything possible, and grinded out everyone's supports). Across the full series... proportionally more time was spent on multiple replays.

I am (and always will be) all for resisting tyranny wherever it rears its head. That isn't the concern. The concern is for "HOW" one goes about doing so. If we resort to the same methods they are using to bully others, that makes us no better than the bullies we are fighting against, and even if...

There are plenty of talented authors, and artists, here. Personally, I'd be against taking part in such activities as "review swaps" and other things of that nature. It's dishonest, and I won't sacrifice either my own personal, professional, or creative integrity, or that of my writing, to...

I wouldn't object to any feedback or comments on my work, but do need to give advance notice on a few things. The story begins on the Prelude, which in this series functions similarly to a prologue, but is presented through a different lens than the rest of the narrative. Chapter 1 was also...

I'll generally use a short phrase or sometimes just a single word, that is symbolic of the chapter's heart and tonally fitting to the story in question. For example: Aestelle Nocte has sci-fi elements, and the following chapter titles: Chapter 1: Starfall Chapter 2: Welcome to Earth The Elarian...

Alright. Time to get to work on my writing sprints. 40/10 for those who're curious. - Write for 40 minutes, take a 10 minute break, rinse and repeat. The goal today is ~2,000 words. If I can manage that, great. If I can manage more, even better. [3000 / 5000]

Mistakes are a part of being human. We all make them, and I'm not judging you (or the feedback that holds merit) for yours. The input and your opinion are valid all the same, and the use of shorter and sharper sentences is meritorious feedback. Tolkien himself also frequently used shorter...

This could be fun. Favorite (tonally): Unbeknownst I just like the way the word adds weight to the sentence, especially in the phrase: "Unbeknownst to..." It sets up perfectly for Dramatic Irony, which is a personal favorite foreshadowing tool to create tension and dread. Favorite (in...

The best (in terms of positive feedback) would be a tie between: and The former comment was back in ~2008-2010 on the sample here (it's old, dated, and I've since improved). The latter was on the early drafts of The Elarian Chronicles from one of my beta-readers. This project was scrapped and...

I appreciate the shout-out, Juia, and the compliment, El, and I do hope the feedback helps as well, Myth. [I'm sorry it took so long to get everything posted for you.] And yes, I am still planning to finish going through your story Juia. I've just got a LOT on my plate right now that I'm...

As long as the feedback helps, that's all that matters. You're free to take what helps, and ignore what doesn't. It's your creative work, and you're the only one who truly knows what the story is intended to be. In that case, it certainly worked to achieve exactly that, and is also functioning...

I read the prologue so far, and had to put reading the next few chapters on hold for now (to focus on my own writing tonight). That said, there are a few things I'd suggest, and would like to address with the prologue [under the perspective of it being written for print]. 1) It is exceptionally...

I'll take a look at the story later, so for now here's just some generalized advice with regard to the technical side of world-building and integration into the narrative. Slow and Steady - Don't drop everything all at once. And most of all, don't do so with bland exposition. If you try to fill...

Honestly, it seems like you've already got a pretty good idea for what you want to do, so I'd say do it. You're gonna end up pissing someone off no matter what you decide to do, so the best advice I can offer is to not waste time worrying about it, and do what you think works for the story you...