You learned a lot from @Louhi and @MFontana feedbacks. Now you are skilled enough to give a feedback of your own.
For the OP, read this:
https://scribblehubforum.com/threads/help-me-as-a-reader-how-cinematic-do-you-think-the-fight-scenes-in-this-chapter.26701/
Plenty of helpful tips about...