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odd weapon? :blob_hmm_two::blob_hmm_two: a drill? whip? or.. stone?

Depend on your intention or context, but i felt like losing the plot at chapter 2.

I think this is my own personal taste, but i feel like the story plot breaking at chapter 2. Chapter 1 about arena, using short paragraph might be work, but chapter 2 should be more narrative based, since the pace of the story slower here.

It looks like my teacher back then at elementary school, hahahahaha

Whoa, you really guess it completely spot on regarding first and third image! Thank you, that means my message delivered. For second image, you literally guess the general idea! it is about the man using the girl for his own pleasure to distract him from heartbroken. Then, he made the girl...

Thank you, for your input! I already try create some more minimalist style art for past few days, and using some photoshop edit for the chapter's title. Also, thank you for Feudyn idea about create more "detailed" one for the pivot point. Here's some of the samples i create for past few days.

Oh this is actually lit! I'm using the current image that already been shared, but this one is actually far better.

Yeah, that'll be more ideal. I crop it so the reflection light become center. And match the font effect with the reflection light.

Oh, i post it above

I think placing the Title on there quite.. not right. This is just my idea regarding title placement.

ouch, sorry friend. I just thought your art ideas almost vibing with mine. My bad.

To be honest, the image of her on crystal ball ruin it.

Oh wow, thank you so much! I think i get it now after read your example. It's like my thought talking to me. like this part : It feels like the tip of my finger’s about to fall off. It’s throbbing with pain, and at this point, it’s almost like my entire arm’s on fire. So I spit on it and rub it...

For me, Art is about how much soul you pour it into your craft. The writing might not work as an art if you're forced to make it. So, if you enjoy create gay character for your writing just do it.

It is actually refreshing idea. The plot about personality detachment, resentment between reality and the expectation, and you finish it with twisted ending, it's very good idea in my opinion. I think you should expand the story to deliver the feeling better, because those 4 chapters was like a...

yeah, as Eldoria said, it's about the immersion. And for me it's still very hard to apply it, HAHAHA

Deep POV is a writing style that immerses readers directly into a character's experience by removing all narrative distance between them. So, instead i told you "I'm angry", i will use "My jaw clenched, all my muscle become tense". Something like that, i'm still new too. And i create the cover...

Ah thank you, good point regarding "I". I didn't think about substitute it, I'll try different approach about it. And for the chapter 14, Being harder here because of disturbing? or confusing? Because it's about Psychosis.

Not necessary, The context is about : The MC is typical Delusional-Narcistic-Self Absorbed Young man. He's living together with his crush. The irony is the girl didn't tell the MC that she actually have a boyfriend.

So, i tried to improve my writing by improving my Deep POV approach. Since my story already reaching the main Psychological Thriller (Dark-side arc). There's 2 chapters that using Deep POV. Please give me your critique and suggestion about my writing. Little context about what happen so far ...