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I reallyyyyy want to give it a go. Are you still available? I only need the first two chapters. https://www.scribblehub.com/read/211234-the-impossible-fate-that-leads-to-a-god-of-a-new-world/chapter/211238/

First off, your summary: Grammar and sentence structure: Phrases like “a war broke down” should be “a war broke out.” Sentences are run-on or missing punctuation. Tense inconsistencies (“Years had been passed” → “Years passed,” etc.) Clarity and flow: The relationships between characters and...

Made some edits during these months, so please read only first 5 chapters.

Rewrote three chapters. If anyone is willing to take a look and roast, will be much appreciated.

Give me one. https://www.scribblehub.com/series/211234/the-impossible-fate-that-leads-to-a-god-of-a-new-world/

It's rare, but it exists. I'm one though.

A second attempt. Only rewrote five chapters, please roast me. https://www.scribblehub.com/read/211234-the-impossible-fate-that-leads-to-a-god-of-a-new-world/chapter/211238/

I had Ankylosing Spondylitis, chicken pox, influenza, allergic conjunctivitis, eczema, at the same time, great, what's next?

Re-edited Synopsis & Chapter 1 as it was... roasted mercilessly, kek. Would appreciate the feedbacks for Chapter 1.

Shameless of me to request, Tempokai-sama. Would you care to give this edited prologue another go? Just one. I've tried. https://www.scribblehub.com/read/211234-the-impossible-fate-that-leads-to-a-god-of-a-new-world/chapter/211238/

Thank you very much Tempokai-sama. :blobtaco: In simpler words, I wasn't able to tell what I was writing in this story. You see words, you see action, you see scenes, you see what the MC is doing, but when adding all up, it's just a bunch of words forcibly glued together to make a story...

Ahhh, I see. That's what I meant by a [???]. Save the scheme for your readers. It was.

Yes, as I mentioned. No offence, man. If I were to use my brain, I were to read a step-by-step hundred pages manual on how to create sticky bombs so I could bomb off that annoying dog next to my house who barks like a recorder. I thought reading is supposed to be a relaxing thing. I don't...

Might suggest you to change to a bolder font without ITALIC so that I wouldn't have to squint my eyes so hard and tilt my head ever so slightly just to read a narrative paragraph. But, I'm not sure whether ITALIC is necessary in a narrative though. Suit yourself. First, I start with the title...

Chapter 1.4 Chapter 5 – The Student Council President, Persia Silverlight Chapter 1.5 Chapter 6 – Enrollment Exam Chapter 1.1 Chapter 2 – The First Person, Lucifer Nightwalker, there's a map in the spoiler right on top. Had been thinking about this ages ago, but, I really have no idea so I...

This novel is 3 years old. You aren't reading the thread, are you? [So... I revised my first chapters of my story] Editing in progress. I got cramps at my fingers from spamming down and delete. Will do.

Will do. I will review in this thread. So one of my arc is like, at least 30k+ words, and every decimal had around 1k words. So how am I supposed to separate them? :unsure:

Thanks a lot. Will be edited. PAINNNNN. I DON'T WANNA EDITTTTT.

More like an arc split into several subchapters, kek. Here's a shortcut if you need it. Prologue

Feedbacks are important. You can't satisfy everyone with your story, but you can get a lot of different opinions from different readers. So... I revised my first chapters of my story, and wanted some feedback or any criticism. Although I did asked for some in some threads, but it takes time for...