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    I would like feedback on my first series (plus 2 chapters)

    WAAA! Dont let him be a loot goblin! Protect the ancient words of glory!
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    Action Feedback (I don't know how to write it)

    Hello, so I am currently making a story called Urban Valor, and I need help with how to write Action. I would like to say I am proficient at imagery and emotions, but I don't have a clue for the combat scenes, my brain teh and the words just don't match at all. I am reaching out to ask for...
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    Writing What have you learned about writing so far in 2026?

    I was certainly bedazzled by that sentence. You seriously don't want that smell. The imagery is *shivver* not helpful :sick:
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    I would like feedback on my first series (plus 2 chapters)

    I’m currently getting around 40k word I currently have half or 10 chapters published it’s called Urban Valor so help you Thank you for the comments and for the cover look. It is currently a temp, and I have an artist with an official cover on the way. For the weaknesses, I completely understand...
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    I would like feedback on my first series (plus 2 chapters)

    for the first 3 chapters its omniscient 3rd POV but will switch to limited 3rd afterwards
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    I just posted my first series!

    Thank you!
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    I just posted my first series!

    Hi everyone, it's a pleasure to meet you. I'm a newbie author, and I'm announcing my first series! its called Urban Valor and currently has 2 chapters and a 3rd on the way, I hope you give it a read! https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2249744/urban-valor/ I would love to hear your thoughts on...
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    I would like feedback on my first series (plus 2 chapters)

    https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2249744/urban-valor/ This is the link to my series that I am writing. I have currently published chapters 1 and 2. The front cover is being drawn, and I have hired an artist. I am looking for feedback from you, the authors, on any major mistakes I may be...
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    1st Chapter feedback request

    So thank you for such a great take on my chapter and all your questions are really good pointers too. That will all be explained in future chapters on why he kidnapped them, why is he not killing them, and if you notice there is no perspective from his side truly? Pacing wise thank you for...
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    Targeted Story Feedback Thread (READ THE NOTE)

    Salutations to the citizens of this world. I require your services... begrudgingly, my services are not well received in my world; thus, I have looked for new outlets to gather views and found you. What I require is very simple. You, the recipient, shall partake in my subinorates creation, in...
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    1st Chapter feedback request

    This is the first chapter of my series, I would like criticism on how major errors I might have made, and your opinion on how well it is built. ( https://coda.grammarly.com/d/Urban-Valor-Chapter-1-rough-draft_ddhpLyQTrFu PDF file here as well ) PLEASE READ Haven't used scribble hub format, so...
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    1st chapter bullet points

    No worries that has been completely redone! No such cliche or boring scene will happen at the beginning that would now be a disservice to my villain Also I have posted a new thread regarding chapter 1 on my introduction as well
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    1st chapter bullet points

    Alright I have completely rewritten it thank you so much for the feedback that helped a lot on my hook and introduction and I’ve made a new thread regarding it if you would like to look
  14. Parade

    Would you read this story?

    I made the first chapter of my story and want to know what you readers think of it. It is currently in production, but I want to share the introduction to see if it would hook you guys. I am open to constructivite criticsm. Chap[ter 1] "Let The Show Begin" [Light City] Sitting on the East...
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    Chapter 1 introduction

    Finished my introduction. This is only the intro, I need to write the combat tomorrow, never done it, so wish me luck. want to get your thoughts on it. (PS NOT heavily edited yet) [Chapter 1] "Let The Show Begin" [Light City] Sitting on the East Coast, the ultimate destination for Business...
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    Crazy mom lore

    Haha we had something like that for a bit can’t explain it though
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    Crazy mom lore

    I was talking with my mother this evening about my story I’m writing and wanting to create a villain title and she told me to use the “Strange Case of Dr Jekyll and Mr Hyde” I never knew she had knowledge like this, she hates horror and everything I have no clue how she came to know this. And...
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    1st chapter bullet points

    Making the first chapter and made bullet points to start from there, and lead into the full text want to get opinions on how it looks so far. Introduction He starts in a dream climbing a hill to see.. something he is chasing someone who calls his name and tries to encourage him, he is...
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    1st chapter bullet points

    lol it can certainly be read that way right now, I was thinking about adding his school day but since this is the intro I wasn’t sure about it. I absolutely need to flesh it out but I’m brainstorming it right now Okay thank you I wasn’t sure where to put it! I appreciate the help!
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