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  1. OokamiKasumi

    Mixed tenses in Japanese novels

    You are missing 3rd Person Close POV. -- Where the reader is viewing the story from inside the head of the POV character. Example:
  2. OokamiKasumi

    Writing [Tutorial] When & How to Smut

    Yes. ROFLMAO! What makes this so damned funny is that this is not only True, this is commonly seen in daytime soap operas! Ah! You're a PLOTTER...! ? -- Only plotters bullet-list scenes like this. (It just makes it so much easier to see it when you've missed something.) Yes, yes it does...
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    Writing [Tutorial] When & How to Smut

    Hmm... I am seriously contemplating posting my plug & play how to write a smut scene tutorial, just to see what sort of crazy examples you guys will come up with when you try it out. This actually happens in real life, but large amounts in alcohol are usually involved. Wait... Isn't that...
  4. OokamiKasumi

    Mixed tenses in Japanese novels

    NO. If you have a wall of dialogue, internal or external, break all that text up with Actions and Descriptions, or even just body language. Example:
  5. OokamiKasumi

    Writing [Tutorial] When & How to Smut

    Stalling and Angst. The emotional content tends to be (needs to be...?) off the charts. Have you ever noticed that (published) romance novels are generally set in other Genres? -- Historical Romance: Historical Adventures + Romance -- Romantic Suspense: Mystery and/or Crime Drama + Romance...
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    Writing [Tutorial] When & How to Smut

    LOL! I didn't think you were making accusations, I was just pouting. -- It's kind of hard to answer questions on a thread if that thread is locked. I don't mind heated discussions at all, as long as we stay on topic.
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    Writing [Tutorial] When & How to Smut

    I hope not... I'm trying to help people here.
  8. OokamiKasumi

    Mixed tenses in Japanese novels

    If this is in a published book...? -- This is likely caused by two major problems. -- Problem One: The English translator is trying to keep the translation as close to the original wording as possible, and Japanese sentence structure and grammar conventions do not mesh well with English...
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    Writing [Tutorial] When & How to Smut

    I'm going to have to agree 100%. ☕ This happens when there is too much sexual tension and not enough Action and/or Emotional Content (angst/affection/hate) to balance that sexual tension out. Horror novels and movies, believe it or not, run into a similar problem. Fear --like sexual tension--...
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    Writing [Tutorial] When & How to Smut

    Smut can be very humorous when one is not a participant. People do the strangest things when chasing orgasms. Screw other people! You should write what makes you happy! Sure, you'll probably have a small reading audience for that sort of story, but I guarantee that some people will read it --...
  11. OokamiKasumi

    Writing [Tutorial] When & How to Smut

    I'm glad you liked it -- I wrote it specifically for you. ✨ Hmm... Fetish fiction is tricky to write properly because fetishes profoundly affect their adherents emotionally and psychologically. I hope you've done your research. Kink fiction is much, much easier to write. LOL! Just give up on...
  12. OokamiKasumi

    Writing [Tutorial] When & How to Smut

    I'm glad you liked it! Exactly. Smut writing encompasses so much territory; from genre specialties, to character interaction roles, to the technique for writing the smut action... One tiny little tutorial absolutely cannot do more than a basic introduction, so yes, I generalized quite a bit...
  13. OokamiKasumi

    Writing [Tutorial] When & How to Smut

    Okay! -- So are there any other questions about writing smut or fiction in general that I can assist with?
  14. OokamiKasumi

    Writing [Tutorial] When & How to Smut

    Oh dear... It appears I struck a nerve. -- I know a bit more about the marketing and creation of adult games than you might expect. I makes games myself, visual novels specifically, though only as a hobby. If you're interested in my game list click here. It's not surprising at all -- especially...
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    Writing [Tutorial] When & How to Smut

    Which is exactly how you should write. -- However, knowing what sort of readers like your style of work doesn't hurt. ?
  16. OokamiKasumi

    Writing [Tutorial] When & How to Smut

    If your descriptions tend to focus on the emotions in your smut scenes, then Yes, the reader base for those stories are probably females who enjoy Romance stories.
  17. OokamiKasumi

    Writing [Tutorial] When & How to Smut

    Men as a rule don't like rape, not actual rape. They don't like even the idea of hurting a female. However, it is a common stroke fantasy. I asked at a coffee shop close to a college in NC. You would not believe how many guys openly admitted to that sort of fantasy -- but the idea of actually...
  18. OokamiKasumi

    Writing [Tutorial] When & How to Smut

    It's not that your scenes were "female-oriented," merely that longer scenes tend to appeal to the female reading audience. The real question is; what are you describing in those scenes? Look closely at what you detail in your scenes. Is it the characters appearances? Their specific actions...
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    Writing [Tutorial] When & How to Smut

    There's no such thing as too much imagination, and not everyone is comfortable writing smut. -- Writers in particular shouldn't push themselves into work they are not comfortable writing. That discomfort shows all too easily in their stories.
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