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In DND rolling a 20 does not mean whatever the play character desired just magically happens. Rolling a nat 20 means the player character performs their desired action at the absolute limit of their abilities. For example, No player can lift a mountain with a nat 20 (unless they found the...

I've never used or plan to use Ren'Py but if you ever want help with Unity (C#) and/or HTML/CSS/JS feel free to message me. If you ever want to learn a back-end language (Java, Kotlin or C#) then I can also assist. I have experience in all of these things.

Christopher Hitchens / Carl Friedrich Gauss / Leonhard Euler.

You hit the nail on the head. Edit every day. Pick a realistic minimalistic goal to aim for. Maybe you decide to edit only 400 words a day, maybe only a single paragraph. Maybe treat a 15 minute edit session as your writing warm up for another series you're working on. More often than not...

Discipline is something a bit more complicated than just having it or not. Very, very few people are disciplined in every single area of their life. I've only met a single person in my 28 years on this planet who fits that definition and boy she was incredible :) For example I am very...

Reading what you wrote out loud is excellent and everyone should do it. Is this your only issue when it comes to editing or do you have problems with motivation and/or discipline?

Just like writing, editing is a separate skill that should and needs to be developed. There is a synergy between the two skills; as you edit your work you will become a better writer as you internalize your previous mistakes and pitfalls. As you become a better writer your role as an editor...

I can't remember where I was originally taught this but it's been such a great help it is worth repeating here. So you've wrote your masterpiece, maybe you've gone through it once or even twice. Go through it again. This time change the font to a monospace font. There are many out there. I...

I'm sorry! I saw 13/Dogs in your status and assumed! Too give you a more general compliment, your story is certainly above average in terms of quality from what I've seen on SH. Looking forward to seeing what you come up with in the future.

I'm only going to comment on the very first paragraph. You have clearly put some effort and thought into your prose. Let's take a look: The sky was a light, mouldy green as always, with a stale whiff trailing the still, dusty air. The ground was bone dry, with the dirt barely holding onto any...

Too much work in what respect? The work to integrate this already developed plugin is almost certainly less that many of the other features that have already been implemented. At least, from my own experience this is the case. Discord is a thing, but discord is off-site and from a community and...

Have the developers considered adding the feature for users to form public and private groups? There could public groups managed by the moderators and administrators for the various genres; fantasy, isekai etc. Users could form other public and private groups with each other for various...

Everyone has power fantasies but first and foremost I would want my world to have easy access to healing magic and/or potions. I don't want to die of a toothache :)

I went through the first chapter and there's a lot to pick up on. "Callum can you go get some groceries from the local shop please”. Two things to consider here. Firstly this has to be the most tepid introductory sentence to a story I've ever read! You should try and hook the reader in with...

While there is a lot to correct here I will point out the most glaring issue. Do not write conversations between characters as if they were talking in real life. There are many good articles on this subject. Here is one. Notice how their example of bad dialogue flows in a similar manner to...

I will restrict this answer just to Europe. In the late 15th and early 16th century the rate of literacy in Europe varied between 10 and 40%. A sudden RPG system appearing for most of, if not all of the general population would have extensive ramifications to nearly every aspect of society. In...

I glanced at your first chapter and thought I'd point a few things out. These are suggestions and are influenced by my own biases and opinions. From this I understand our protagonist is a hopeless and naïve romantic. You could push this harder with a stronger language. Really highlight the...

I will make my little mountain here, climb on it and say that if your world comes across as flat that is entirely down to your own ability as a writer and not the choice of the number of POVs. That is to say, if you want your worldbuilding to come across as competent the number of POVs is not...

I would like to offer something not yet mentioned in this thread. What drives commoners to revolt against the elite? Hunger. When we look throughout our own history it appears one of the most consistent and motivating factors behind a revolution is the lack of food. In fact you may very well...

Why is this the only way? You are the author. You decide the direction of your story. Does this character *need* to engage in adult relations with the MC? Does it develop their character or the plot? I can assure you, no-one is so creatively bankrupt that they write themselves into a hole...