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I really like that you can link your stories together and show their relationship to each other. It's really cool for world building projects.

There was a horrid smell in the classroom, eyes began to search, you forgot to wipe.

The way I see it, the story can't really happen if the MC dies to the mundane. It's what makes the story worth telling in the first place right? there's limits to how far that stretches obviously but it honestly never has really bothered me too much. If it starts to feel like a elementary...

She would love that sort of job. again thanks for all the feedback guys, I appreciate it. Gonna try to figure it out some more.

So I've taken some time to think about it, and try to come up with some new and better, I've also looked at other blurbs including Sir contro's example. I have this character in the book, she likes to rhyme, so I thought it might be neat if the story blurb might be from her perspective? Anyway I...

These are really good tips, thank you. Everyone here has been really helpful. Basically I've been calling the spells Binds, the magic sort of works on a forced perception sort of gimmick or another way I thought of it was what if the observer effect was more prevalent in the macro every day...

I do use AI to help with punctuation, but I'm sure this will draw ire of some. I also sometimes ask it how the pacing is but I'm not sure how well it can judge that.

Might be too much to use magic system lingo in the blurb then eh?

Never been good at selling myself or stories. I was wondering what blurb you think might be more interesting? This is a smaller one, more focused on the main characters: Brothers Callahan and Rowan wield beastly binds to save their dying mom—one fragile, one fearless. In Onoria’s empire, they...

Sometimes I can go for hours just typing like crazy and then other times I get stuck every paragraph. when that happens I usually pace around my apartment or take a shower till I can figure out how to get to the next part of a scene. I'd really love to know why being able to think better in the...

Hungering beasts? Do they come from a swampy area maybe Bog Beast if you like alliteration? Bloated or Bloating Beasts maybe if they're fat or gross and filled with pustules. I always like that imagery personally when I'm creating a monster.

That's a really good point and one I need to remember when I try to incorporate certain creatures or words into the story. I always have this weird hang up where I second guess myself and think, "hold on, wait a minute, why would it be called a Gorilla in this universe" honestly this is a good...

These usually end up being my top three when a character is really trying to get his point across lol.

Sometimes there really is no better way to express how a character feels in the moment than an Fbomb, but maybe that's due to my poor vocabulary, still I do try to use them sparingly or try to come up with world appropriate ones... but those usually sound cheesy to me when I'm the one writing...

Definitely healing powers, curing debilitation such as blindness and other disease, and to keep him balanced his resurrections of other people should be kept to a minimum, maybe only the grieving and extremely faithful can rouse the effect out of him. Water walking is a must, a passive ability...

You really made my day today man and I really appreciate the feedback! I didn't even think about how long the chapters were but you are right. Especially for the platform. 12 and 6 definitely are a little long. I think that's an issue with me sometimes having trouble knowing when to move on from...

I think the Desert Punk dub is really good. Space Dandy too. They already feel like very western stories.

Life is a battle, everyday we fight to go another day, and this man, he rode his wife into that battle, until his own hubris had him betray her. Now wifeless and mount less he is forced to continue, to fight and live alone.

It's incredibly short but tells a very poignant story.

So, I think my story has reached a decent point where the characters are developed beyond just an introduction, the plot has swept the main trio into the grander events, and there are breadcrumbs in the earlier chapters that get answered later to help establish the flow of what's to come. But I...