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read ch7 and immediately disliked the opening characters. they are condescending and patronizing. it was like seeing men talk about how stupid and useless women are. just overall unpleasent. next scene is 2 of these characters comforting daria. I lost intrest there.

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reason is irrelevant only the premise matters. why is there a game-like system in this world? who cares. why is there a unique and bizarre class that only the mc can have? who gives a shit. why does this world have 80% monster girls population? why wouldnt it

you can find most thing about writing if you have access to google and especially if you use a decent ai like gpt. ive been using it a lot for worldbuilding by asking it about animals, animal behaviour, fauna, history, etc. It will not always be correct but it will put you on the right track...

"Every word I speak is an oat I spill."

youre answering your own questions. bad practices are bad regardless of genre. your critics apply to any book. you've pointed nothing specific about litrpgs. I could replace the word 'litrpg' and remove a few keywords and you wouldn't know what genre this is about. i could point you to a few...

@RepresentingEnvy

just go and hug your mother. it'll get out on its own

congrats and well done

youre doubling down. isnt it super fucking stupid to deter someone from giving feedback by criticizing the grammar of their review? most novels on this site have shit grammar and you're here nitpicking on reviews. i will leave the academic grade english forum comments to you

that is not what i meant. you're telling not showing. for the scene to have an oompf you need to build suspense/pressure. start slowly until you reach the conclusion. do not spell out the answer. here's an example. --- doctor sees the child lying on his back, motionless and the father sitting...

you're being incredibly selfish. you matter not only to yourself but to others around you aswell. withholding something like this is will only make matters worse when they eventually know about it. i dont know how serious your condition is but it'll be much easier to face when you have others to...