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ForestDweller
@HansTrondheim I kept getting comments on how my MC is too childish for someone who's reincarnated. That's kinda the point since he's essentially a manchild in his previous world? Doesn't help that one of my frequent commenters say that he prefers the story not being an isekai in the first place.

I don't know. I don't know if I write him wrong.
Freesia.Cutepearl
Freesia.Cutepearl
I feel you on that. I've had comments like that too.
From my one and only review:

If you're curious:
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@ForestDweller my sleepiness went away when I read that. In any case, looks like you got your goal reached, which is good. However, remember that it is YOUR story, and YOUR characters, so reader preference is out...unless your intention is to get popular.
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@ForestDweller as for your MC, did you make him 'grow as a character'? While it's fine to be childish in the first few chapters, it'd be kind of frustrating if there's no character growth as the story progress. Otherwise, it's just reader preference since your tags and synopsis attract a certain demographic type.
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@Freesia.Cutepearl it's like with what happened to Kuro. I keep on getting comments that he is a 'beta cuck MC', 'doormat' and 'spineless'. However, that's the f*cking point since Kuro's character is just a normal HS teacher that was summoned to another world, not some black wearing, double-wielding, edgy boy with an NTRed girlfriend.
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@Freesia.Cutepearl what those commenters don't understand is that, it's my intention to make him appear weak at first then make him grow throughout the story...which is good, according to my target audience. They liked that aspect of my work, and while it's not popular with hot-headed teenagers (and horny men), it's kind of nice for young adults.
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@Freesia.Cutepearl @ForestDweller a lot of readers today feel entitled and 'experts' on a certain genre. Unless you're looking to be popular ASAP and risk losing your stories' 'identity', pandering and listening to the readers should be done sparingly. I mean, some might give you useful feedback, but most are just commenting based on their preferences.
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ForestDweller
@HansTrondheim That's the problem. My story probably is too much of a slowburn. After half a million words, he still hasn't become the badass a lot of readers want him to be.
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ForestDweller
When his parents died protecting him, that's his first showing of weakness. He ran away with his heart covered in guilt. His second showing is at two arcs later, where it turns out he has a trauma from that experience that only resurfaces full force when he has to fight another villain around the same level at his parents' murderer.
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ForestDweller
He lets two people die from it, including a little girl. Only once that happens he grows furious enough that he can overcome his fears and saves the other person (who is a harem member).
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ForestDweller
My plan is on the ending on the next arc is where he finally would overcome that trauma and fear completely. He will get another chance to fight against an impossibly strong enemy. And when that happens, he will stand his ground.
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ForestDweller
The problem is getting there takes so much words, since the story isn't just about his development. It's also about the side characters he meets and developing his harem member as well.
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ForestDweller
I just feel it's not realistic enough to make him easily be able to overcome his flaws.
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ForestDweller
That's why I made him less of a "cool" person like Rudy from Mushoku Tensei (main inspiration for my story), who's always the smartest guy in the room, with his mental breakdowns not leading to anyone dying (not to mention it happens much later on in the story, which is smart since it baits readers who wants a power fantasy isekai),
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@ForestDweller you say that ypur MC isn't the badass your readers wanted him to be. Is that your intention?
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ForestDweller
No. He would never be an overpowered badass MC. I don't really like that kind of character in the first place.

What he would be is a responsible, brave, and dare I say it, heroic, especially when it involves his family.
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ForestDweller
Badass isekai MC is either the edgy types like Shield Hero and Arifureta, or the comedic ones like that isekai where the MC just suplexes everyone including the princess that summons him.
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ForestDweller
You can also go the route where he has all these ladies interested in him but he has no interest in them whatsoever, preferring to do dumb stuff instead. A chad who doesn't need any girls. That's a fantasy for unpopular men. :s_tongue:
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Well, if that isn't your intention then I guess you're doing just fine. The latest isekai stories set a trend (power fantasies, etc), and most readers expect a badass MC coz 'f*ck character growth'.

Unless you wanted to be popular fast, then you're doing just right.
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It's your readers who are not in tune with your work. In that case, consider editing synosis and tags.
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