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the one line prose was fluctuting. I noticed it more in later chapters so im thinking you fixed this in earlier chapterd maybe? this is...

Alhamdulillah, shounen. I'm glad it helped. Note for everyone here: people make mistakes. Treat our feedback and response to your...

read up to: Chapter 11 — Strings Attached this suffers from a severe case of LN syndrome. I noticed a large quantity of structrual...

Thank you for the feedback I really appreciate it. Especially about dialogue that's very helpful. I understand how unclear speakers can...

I have edited and revised chapters 1-10. May I ask for feedback? Edit: I revised again chapter 1-5 , I found repeated words...

I think it's okay to take harsh criticism, I don't think I'll ever stop writing just because of that. Wait... Are you FUTA.?! Its ok...

Read like AI is subjective. It's not a valid criticism. Everyone perceives it differently.

Thanks for the advice guys

Someone will also say the style you like read like AI. You'll have to re-edit it again or ignore them.

ah i forgot to mention. Usually after you think you have the style you like. You'll stop liking it in a month or two and do re-edit...

Cause, I really like make or read the story, if the feedback make me improve at it, why not

Thanks, i will do it

Aight, next. Please sit down and have a water first. Regarding your novel: 1. Title: Its good. Its proper litRPG and instantly piqued...

I haven't fixed anything other than the synopsis after receiving your feedback. But if you still want to read it, please do

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