I like the detail specifying that the office is posh, but I'm less a fan of the all-glass detail. At this point it's just description, but doesn't reveal much else, so it could be more potent/pithy.
It's kind of weird to have visual descriptors like this accompany "I hear" -- it's not like his...
I was reminded of this just now because I'm watching a video essay about misery memoirs and the presenter makes a good point about how individualism played a huge part in the boom of misery lit because it frames suffering (especially in the context of child abuse) as something that the...
I've been thinking about Toy Story a lot lately, especially about how it manages to create tension during the scene moment in Pizza Planet when Buzz and Woody get caught in the crane machine.
Something that's hard to do when you're adding mystery or creating tension in storytelling is walking...
I skimmed the rest of your chapters, and I think my main takeaway here is that lack of tension I mentioned earlier. Good storytelling uses tension to keep the reader engaged, but there're many ways to create tension. One easy way is to make your character want something, and then working the...