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I see I'll focus on Aikos pov in the next chapters. The world structure is done and the path are already planned but the scene are not so I was really confused how to convey the scenes at first. Thanks

I see so the problem started in chapter 4. The main plot is AIKO travelling while and gradually introducing my world structure with twist and turn on her path and eventually reach a point where it possible to world travel hahahaha

Thanks. How do I call you tho.

That was really helpful. Tho I'd really like to know more about the other points I'd like to fix the paragraph and pov for now atleast at the chapter 7 it must be fixed. I see third person POV limited. I understand. I'll improve it by chapter 7. Can you read it and advice me again?

I was supposedly a story teller so I think it's my pov, and there are times I used pov of characters I didn't consider but I think mostly third person and omniscient.

Thanks for the reminder I just found how to edit it hahaha

I attached the link. Feedback about weakness and strength, something lacking something need reinforcement

Heyo everyone, OrionVale here. I'm seeking advice and feedbacks for my first series with 6 chapter as prologue tho it felt long I want to atleast introduced the world I created properly. Any advice is welcome. About weakness, strength, something the story lacks and needs reinforcement, etc...

My post got take down maybe before I put like but here I am again OrionVale. I'm seeking advice and feedbacks for my first series with 6 chapter as prologue. “Aetheria: My New Life as a Spirit Contractor”