Recent content by Natsummer

Yes, it is Large language model. I am not against the idea of using Ai tools for assistance. This work is clearly just copy and paste. This is the problem. Then OP proceed to ask for honest feedbacks. I don't think it is fair to fellow readers.

Yes! I think it would be better if you foreshadow or tease about the meaning behind the words. It would significantly made the story more interesting!! Since it is a very deep word in linguistic aspect In general speaking, characters appear with a reason and purpose. Think about what you want...

After just five seconds reading chapter 1... the very first lines. I immediately knew it is written by LLM/GPT. And I thought, it is okay. I still gave it a chance. And unsurprisingly, it was nothing but disappointment. You lost credibility as a writer. It raises concern about originality and...

Its okay until chapter 3 and beyond. Your story has a decent idea, mixing supernatural mystery with questions about truth and perception... but it’s destroyed by the terrible execution and writing... The writing is flat and overloaded with dull, repetitive internal monologues. The structure is...

Chaotic but It's okay, I can't say much with only one chapter available. I like your choice of the title, it has some deep meaning, but... I haven't felt the story connection with the title yet. It's not matching with the content currently. I hope to see the depth of your writing if that is...

Interesting read so far. Good job. The characters are interesting and very well-written. However, the teacher is stealing scenes. I assume she’s a side character? Your main characters are overshadowed by her presence. You need to tune her down if this isn’t your intention. The interactions are...

Chapter 1 is decent. I like some of the humor in there. However, there's a hint of LLM/ChatGPT flavor. Chapter 2 and beyond, is filled with LLM/GPT structures. Sorry, but please fix them. I am not reading anything beyond Chapter 1 until you re-write them. Interesting concept and theme though.

Sorry but first few lines, its written by ChatGPT or LLM... Its obvious.