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I'll be honest with you, I dont wanna read this again mainly because I'm bored and wanna see something new. But I skimmed through the...

You might remember me. I'm not sure if this is allowed but I made a ton of changes to my story and would like to know your thoughts...

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Alice Inari from my series.:blob_aww:

Only one chapter, then I'll read the rest as it comes out. I want to be able to say I was reading it before it was cool.

Personally, as long as the dialogue is fun and I can tell who's who, I'll enjoy it. Doesn't' matter the genre or the plot or how deep...

10+, I have been disappointed to many times from a highly potential story start of only 1-7 pages and the story goes on hiatus or gets...

I just made revisions to all of these. I also completely changed the turning point with the gun to make it less cringe and more...

Thank you, man. This is some critique I can get behind.

Just a wee bit of advice btw. The narration should feel like the character. Y'know, voice, tone and phrasing? Things that would reflect...

This is 100% correct. The problem at hand though is that you keep separating the narrator and Akuma. They are one in the same. The only...

Lol. Believe me, I know these people are crazy. Unfortunately, my story features many, many gods and beliefs. The main villains are...

You're the second person to express dislike about the intro. I understand that it doesn't really mesh with an ordinary world, but that's...

I can get behind that. I do hold out on Akuma to keep him at a distance. It's a double edged sword.

Ignore Eldoria projecting her hurt feelings onto random strangers like yourself. And ignore Bim being a retard. Well, since someone has...