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Depend on your intention or context, but i felt like losing the plot at chapter 2.

So you think i should explain the stuff more in the chapter 2?

I think this is my own personal taste, but i feel like the story plot breaking at chapter 2. Chapter 1 about arena, using short...

Damn! you've just given me a good hook with that suggestion. Thank you so much for reading.

Hi! I read your prologue on the Scribble Hub and wanted to share a few thoughts. First, I personally really enjoy dark fantasy, so I’m...

Your prose is amazing btw. Breaking my rule because I love the people in this story. I kinda like everyone is so sex positive and...

So you think i should cut prologue section all together? or just prologue one? Because after reading your review i feel like i can show...

First, I want to echo what other folks have been saying. Putting every sentence on a new line is really not the way to go about things...

You can use italics for character thoughts (monologues). But... In practice, that theory is quite difficult to apply in web novels...

what about a character's thoughts? Should i just describe how they are feeling instead of writing their thoughts?

I'll give you a little immersive recipe based on my research... an immersive narrative is one that cleverly hides the narrator's voice...

Okay you are right, i did use those tags a lot.

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So you are saying that words like asked,said need to be used less? eh you can't be worse than my parents, hit me.

Noted, I'll keep this in mind while writing the next chapter. Also, what did you feel while reading it.