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https://www.scribblehub.com/read/1493021-ruins-of-gold/chapter/1735925/?cid=3654097 this is my current chapter 1 and need feedback about the history lessons how much exposition dumpy does it feel how does it flow to the next part after the lessons how are Jonahs thoughts Also feedback on the...

https://www.scribblehub.com/read/1493021-ruins-of-gold/chapter/1735925/?cid=3654097 More viewpoints eyyyyy Also prologue is chapter 1 you can ignore the chapters 1-6 as they will be rewritten soon

What specific issue would this count as, flow?

What would you say a description that fills all 3 of those qualities are? Can u give a few examples? On the latter chapters even though i keep it in mind i still write it like that Jonah is supposed to disassemble a car engine for parts but even though i consciously try to not do it like that...

Actually stopped using ai to fix my mistakes theres quite a lot of them now but im trying to learn how to actually do proper punctuations and fix them on my own as i write Can you link a few resources that are about those which you yourself found helpful? Specifically the last part because...

Ic supernatural wasnt what i was going for it is static electricity due to reasons

Random but what do you think about the humming? I was going for wind picking up speed not real humming what did it seem like from the paragraph?

Id wish for insanely fast thinking speed and think about the rest from there Also i would wish to see how my wishes actually affect things Actually id wish to be put in a simulation where my wishes take hold so i can see it (the simulation is frozen in time or smthn

Good stuff ty for the feedback The thing is its not sudden. You would think having too much food would solve all the issues but no. Since ecosystems die the only thing you have is grain which removes all the protein nutrients vitamins and all causing a slow death. Mentioning it at all felt like...

Fun https://www.scribblehub.com/read/1493021-ruins-of-gold/chapter/1494605/

Typing to see the timezone thats beings used on this site What does a moment ago even mean aaa anyways 2

Nice tutorial ty the chapter feels more better structured now

I see what you mean now. Whats your dc btw?

Ty for the help btw what do you mean by your brain tricks you and makes you think what you wrote is actually what you wrote Ty good advice

Random question should i let a few chapters stack so i can release them on a specified time or should i release them whenever they come out so i can get feedback since this is the first novel thingie im writing