I need some help.

[Deleted member 29316]

where did you write your review??

The review section of your work. Maybe it's awaiting moderator approval?

Here's the screenshot.

 

[Deleted member 29081]

Honestly, I can't justify reading it with the way the summary is right now. The synopsis for a story should not reveal too much, but yours reveals too little. What's the premise? The hook? Some guy is sitting on a roof somewhere and sighing while thinking about the future. Okay, but why should that interest me? A lot of guys do that. Maybe not on a roof, per se, but still...

Why should I want to know this guy's story? Can you provide a bit more details on the premise of your story? What makes it a worthwhile read?

 

[averagewriter]

ok

 

[OliviaMyriad]

Before I go any further, I just want to say that synopsis needs work even before adding more ideas and details.

"he sighed."
while wondering about what awaits him in the future.

Those quotation marks, period, and line break should not be there and honestly made me do a triple-take trying to figure out what it meant.

 

[Solstice1309]

Don’t worry. I’m a new author as well. I’ve only got a couple of comments on my chapters but what matters to me is that people take some time out of their schedules to read my work even though it’s sloppy at the beginning.

With more readers you’ll eventually get more comments. Good luck! Let’s both do our best!

 

[averagewriter]

Good day! I read and gave your story a review. Hope that it would help you fix your story!

If you got questions, feel free to ask!

At last. After almost two days of continuous work.
I have finished

Good day! I read and gave your story a review. Hope that it would help you fix your story!

If you got questions, feel free to ask!

At last. After two days of almost continuous work.
I have finished revising all of the chapters while following your advice.
I hope you find it readable this time around, though if you don't then forget about it since i am not planning on revising it again any time soon.
Though criticism would still be appreciated as long as it is reasonable. Since it would help me improve while writing my new chapters. "exhausted sigh."

 

[Deleted member 29316]

At last. After almost two days of continuous work.
I have finished
At last. After two days of almost continuous work.
I have finished revising all of the chapters while following your advice.
I hope you find it readable this time around, though if you don't then forget about it since i am not planning on revising it again any time soon.
Though criticism would still be appreciated as long as it is reasonable. Since it would help me improve while writing my new chapters. "exhausted sigh."

Already checked out your prologue and it did improve a lot. Will binge-read it once my net connection is fixed.

Take a rest for now; you did great! ?

P. S.: I'm on super-slow mobile data rn. ???

 

[averagewriter]

Already checked out your prologue and it did improve a lot. Will binge-read it once my net connection is fixed.

Take a rest for now; you did great! ?

P. S.: I'm on super-slow mobile data rn. ???

thanks

 

[averagewriter]

Honestly, I can't justify reading it with the way the summary is right now. The synopsis for a story should not reveal too much, but yours reveals too little. What's the premise? The hook? Some guy is sitting on a roof somewhere and sighing while thinking about the future. Okay, but why should that interest me? A lot of guys do that. Maybe not on a roof, per se, but still...

Why should I want to know this guy's story? Can you provide a bit more details on the premise of your story? What makes it a worthwhile read?

I have changed the synopsis. Hope it can give you a look into the story this time around.

Though for some reason it ended up being a little bit wierd.

 

[HJ]

No comment is better than a bad comment.

 

[averagewriter]

I guess that is also true.