[CLOSED] Unreliable Biased Feedback v3

[greyblob]

Generic~! Anyway, the exposition and the transition to POVs is a stylistic mannerism that I will not get rid of. I am aware that the show do not tell faction is strong here, and in English in particular, but that is a different discourse. Not that you would not know.

I never thought, though, that it would feel cringe ... and that the villains are cartoonish ... Interesting information. Also, bandits?

That being said, for your effort.

generic was the wrong choice of words. I'd say cliche is more accurate

Its not about show vs tell its about the story being relayed through the character's eyes. I find that to be more enjoyable but its subjective.

bandits or knights or ara something kindom. they jumped a carriage. tomato tomato

 

[Assurbanipal_II]

generic was the wrong choice of words. I'd say cliche is more accurate

Its not about show vs tell its about the story being relayed through the character's eyes. I find that to be more enjoyable but its subjective.

bandits or knights or ara something kindom. they jumped a carriage. tomato tomato