FrenzyWanderer
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As a new Author I struggle a lot with balancing these 2, I have written a novel in SH https://www.scribblehub.com/series/...up-dont-ask-about-my-sisters-opinion-on-this/
But I got 2-3 feedbacks saying too little detail and hard to follow. And my writing style tend to deviate into those japanese LN style, if unintended.
I rarely tend to include long paragraphs, even when using them I use them only to immerse the reader at the beginning and not anywhere else.
Is this kind of prose viable?
Can you give my novel a shot and highlight whether this type of writing OK, because some liked it and some absolutely despised it
Since I have no proper experience or much skill, I struggle in these kind of conflicting feedback
Also can anyone please tell me whether I messed up opening 2 chapters (your opinion)
And compare it into ch 03, 04, 05
The novel until now is around 4,000 words
And also highlight any other prose related issues (there are few problems in ch01 and 02 some lack fullstops, because when copying from my draft I copied it section by section, so my cursor had missed them in some places, I couldn't find the way to edit published chapters and the error is fixed in ch03 onwards)
Thank you in advance
Sorry for any inconvenience caused, just started writing 1-2 yrs ago and this is the first thing I published
But I got 2-3 feedbacks saying too little detail and hard to follow. And my writing style tend to deviate into those japanese LN style, if unintended.
I rarely tend to include long paragraphs, even when using them I use them only to immerse the reader at the beginning and not anywhere else.
Like this one, a quotation from my novel ch03
Is this kind of prose viable?
Can you give my novel a shot and highlight whether this type of writing OK, because some liked it and some absolutely despised it
Since I have no proper experience or much skill, I struggle in these kind of conflicting feedback
Also can anyone please tell me whether I messed up opening 2 chapters (your opinion)
And compare it into ch 03, 04, 05
The novel until now is around 4,000 words
And also highlight any other prose related issues (there are few problems in ch01 and 02 some lack fullstops, because when copying from my draft I copied it section by section, so my cursor had missed them in some places, I couldn't find the way to edit published chapters and the error is fixed in ch03 onwards)
Thank you in advance
Sorry for any inconvenience caused, just started writing 1-2 yrs ago and this is the first thing I published
