Looking feedback for my novel darker obsession a dystopian hindu mythical story

[Shanikumar]

Hello, I had thoughts of writting frictional novel using hindu mythology and lore for a long time and i did here in scribble hub i want feedback on
Charecter, world building, pacing and Power l. even a small comment of your would be very helpful and appreciated.

Thankyou for being here

Darker obsession:- https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1731575/darker-obsession/

 

[Eldoria]

i want feedback on
Charecter, world building, pacing and Power

Honestly, aside from pacing, characters and world building (including the power system) are the story content I consider as the last resort when giving feedback. Why?

To analyze story content, reviewers have to read many chapters (at least 10k words, I think) to analyze the coherence of the story content. The average (volunteer) reviewer won't have the energy (and time) to read that much.

I prefer to provide feedback on how the story is conveyed to the reader (storytelling) based on the few chapters I've read, with an emphasis on the reading experience.

 

[Shanikumar]

Honestly, aside from pacing, characters and world building (including the power system) are the story content I consider as the last resort when giving feedback. Why?

To analyze story content, reviewers have to read many chapters (at least 10k words, I think) to analyze the coherence of the story content. The average (volunteer) reviewer won't have the energy (and time) to read that much.

I prefer to provide feedback on how the story is conveyed to the reader (storytelling) based on the few chapters I've read, with an emphasis on the reading experience.

That would be nice , and thankyou for your cohesive advice, Appreciated
And thanks