Would this concept intrigue you? (You're not seeing this novel in most likely a year or two)

[MakBow]

Tell me, would this synopsis reel you in if I wrote a novel centered around this:
(Like I said, I'm not writing this in a good year or two)
(This is my first dip into cultivation, so you won't see anything truly original)

Synopsis
Li Haung, a young man who had a fairly average life, not too exciting, but not too depressing, finds himself in a situation where death is the only outcome as he is pushed in front of a train by a random old man.
Just when it seems like it is all over, the world’s balance is disrupted as time freezes, and he meets a cultivator who mocks him for such a simple life.
Out of pettiness, Li Haung plays on their ego and superiority complex, which traps him in a bet in which he must kill the immortal or else he will suffer a fate worse than death, being transmigrated into the world of cultivation.
Now in a new world, he has to travel through the body of an alternate version of himself, one with trash talent, weak meridians, and a weak foundation, all while trying to get stronger across his lifespan if it means he won’t suffer for eternity, learning what cultivation means, the price of power, and the back-breaking truth of fate.
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[Jerynboe]

Uh. I mean it sounds like something some people would like but no. Looks like a cultivation flavored basic revenge story. That’s not to say it couldn’t be done well, but this feels like a transparent ad for a product you don’t even have available yet. It didn’t land for me, personally. Good luck with that.

 

[MakBow]

Uh. I mean it sounds like something some people would like but no. Looks like a cultivation flavored basic revenge story. That’s not to say it couldn’t be done well, but this feels like a transparent ad for a product you don’t even have available yet. It didn’t land for me, personally. Good luck with that.

Oh, it's not a revenge story. Think of it more like Saga of Tanya the Evil. It's more about proving that guy wrong, killing is just a byproduct.

And revenge wouldn't make sense. The immortal didn't do anything directly to him, just mocked him and pissed him off.

It's really just the MC being petty as hell.

 

[Arkus86]

In all honesty, the only relatively original part of the plot is the bet, the rest of the premise has been done to hell and back in both cultivation and isekai. Even the motivation of both sides stemming from anger feels rather hollow, bland, flat, tiresome.
Nobody dying and getting reincarnated as nobody, only to get OP somehow and get revenge.

It's more about proving that guy wrong, killing is just a byproduct.

If the goal is to kill him for making fun of the MC as you said, it's a revenge story. You can paint the horse with stripes, but it's still a horse.

 

[MakBow]

In all honesty, the only relatively original part of the plot is the bet, the rest of the premise has been done to hell and back in both cultivation and isekai. Even the motivation of both sides stemming from anger feels rather hollow, bland, flat, tiresome.
Nobody dying and getting reincarnated as nobody, only to get OP somehow and get revenge.

If the goal is to kill him for making fun of the MC as you said, it's a revenge story. You can paint the horse with stripes, but it's still a horse.

I know it has been done. This is my first step into cultivation so I'm not trying to destroy the entire story just trying to make it original.
I want it to be simple for me to work with while also doing what I want

Never said he's getting an OP ability, if anything, he will struggle a lot, and his progress will be incredibly slow since he as a weak foundation and trash talent and it stays that way.

The only 'OP' thing about him is that he can do multiple paths and has a blessing from that immortal that increases his luck at the price he must experience misfortune at the same level.

The MC of course develops, and it becomes more the just petty revenge.
That's actually one of the main points I want to explore.
How hollow his ideals and goals are, a reflection of how uninteresting he is and how he grows to get greater goals while keeping his original goal.

 

[Eldoria]

Well, the vibe sounds like a cultivation story with a MC who likes to slap young masters, like hundreds of other fictions. Some people might like it, but I don't (because I'm already fed up with this trope).

So, don't listen to my opinion. My opinion is a minority opinion among many general readers.

 

[MakBow]

Well, the vibe sounds like a cultivation story with a MC who likes to slap young masters, like hundreds of other fictions. Some people might like it, but I don't (because I'm already fed up with this trope).

So, don't listen to my opinion. My opinion is a minority opinion among many general readers.

Oh no, the MC himself will get humbled far more than he will face slap. I like it when the MC suffers more

 

[Arkus86]

I know it has been done. This is my first step into cultivation so I'm not trying to destroy the entire story just trying to make it original.
I want it to be simple for me to work with while also doing what I want

Never said he's getting an OP ability, if anything, he will struggle a lot, and his progress will be incredibly slow since he as a weak foundation and trash talent and it stays that way.

The only 'OP' thing about him is that he can do multiple paths and has a blessing from that immortal that increases his luck at the price he must experience misfortune at the same level.

The MC of course develops, and it becomes more the just petty revenge.
That's actually one of the main points I want to explore.
How hollow his ideals and goals are, a reflection of how uninteresting he is and how he grows to get greater goals while keeping his original goal.

Do not take my words as discouragement. If you want to do it, do it, cultivation has enough readers you are likely to get some either way, as long as it's not utter trash.

The part about becoming OP might be misunderstanding, but the (initial) goal of becoming strong enough to kill a cultivator who can casually pop into another world, and stop/slow time to laugh at someone about to die, kind of implies it.

If there's more to it than petty revenge, great, but keep in mind if at least the promise of character development does not appear early on, the change of goals and MC's growth as a person might turn away those who came for petty revenge. Similarly, if the start of the process takes too long, it might turn away those who came for character development.

 

[MakBow]

Do not take my words as discouragement. If you want to do it, do it, cultivation has enough readers you are likely to get some either way, as long as it's not utter trash.

The part about becoming OP might be misunderstanding, but the (initial) goal of becoming strong enough to kill a cultivator who can casually pop into another world, and stop/slow time to laugh at someone about to die, kind of implies it.

If there's more to it than petty revenge, great, but keep in mind if at least the promise of character development does not appear early on, the change of goals and MC's growth as a person might turn away those who came for petty revenge. Similarly, if the start of the process takes too long, it might turn away those who came for character development.

I mean, the pettiness doesn't go away, it's just that other things are stacked on top of that so it's more than JUST petty revenge is what I meant.
In the end, he's still killing him out of pettiness. (And because if he doesn't, he gets erased from existence or something worse)
(Yeah, I should have mentioned that. If he doesn't kill him, his soul is erased, so it's also about survival)
(He didn't add that, the cultivator did)

He will always remain the same petty MC. It's merely that

 

[FRWriter]

The concept is totally okay. Seriously, the exact reason for transmigrating does not even matter. The Cultivation system, professions, world-building, fight scenes, characters, humor, and overall writing/plot count.

This is a perfectly serviceable start, but this seems to me like he genuinely wants another chance at life. I don't even see the revenge... in fact, shouldn't he be grateful for being saved and getting another shot at life in a cultivation world?

 

[MakBow]

The concept is totally okay. Seriously, the exact reason for transmigrating does not even matter. The Cultivation system, professions, world-building, fight scenes, characters, humor, and overall writing/plot count.

This is a perfectly serviceable start, but this seems to me like he genuinely wants another chance at life. I don't even see the revenge... in fact, shouldn't he be grateful for being saved and getting another shot at life in a cultivation world?

That's the comedy of it.

He would rather die than be saved by someone who mocked him for having no money, no b#ches, barely a social life, (he still had friends).

And his alternate self is no different, only he has trash talent, a nearly crippled aptitude, and a weak foundation.

And of course, if he fails to kill the immortal in his lifespan, he gets erased or worse (I'm still deciding) because the immortal also wants to be a petty a$$hole, making his heavenly tribulations so much harder to deal with

 

[Lufli]

Doesn't seem interesting to me. What you are promising (at least that's how I felt reading the synopsis) is a bland MC, going around, killing people just to be evil.
Still, these types of stories surely have an audience, but it isn't really an original concept.
If you feel good about it, then just write it.