Hello! New author here!

[CYY]

Hi everyone!
I go by CYY, and about three months ago I had the fantastic idea of wanting to write a book! I've always loved books ever since I was a kid, reading Enid Blyton and Roald Dahl books. Right now, some of my favourites include the Wandering Inn, Art of the Adept and Cradle. So I decided I would want to write a slow burn classic-type book that feels real, where readers can experience the struggles and triumphs together with the main character.
If you would like to read it, the link is https://www.scribblehub.com/series/2078596/soulcarved-survivor/
Anyways, I just wanted to introduce myself, this is my first time on ScribbleHub's forum.
I like chess and books while listening to music. Currently I am 1600 elo rapid on chess.com, and I don't plan on stagnating any time soon. I welcome any challenges.
So that's me... I'll hang around the forum from now on. Look forward to interacting with you all!

 

[Eldoria]

Hello, welcome. I don't want to discourage you. But, if you post anything about your fiction, please post it in the Readers > Latest Chapter Discussion section. Also, be careful about promoting your fiction, as most of the users on this forum are more authors than readers.

Regards.

 

[Omarfaruq]

Hello, welcome. I don't want to discourage you. But, if you post anything about your fiction, please post it in the Readers > Latest Chapter Discussion section. Also, be careful about promoting your fiction, as most of the users on this forum are more authors than readers.

Regards.

Fax!!

 

[Xanderx]

Hi pookie, I’m also a new writer as well, welcome to the club!!!!

 

[PancakesWitch]

Hello Shang

 

[foxes]

Oh, hi. I'm also a be-be-be-beginner writer. I've just started so many times that I'm already st-st-stuttering.

Let's say you have a very strange prologue in your book. It's probably normal. But there are events detached from Xvalkken. It's supposed to introduce us to the world, but it doesn't always work.

The size of the first chapter is big. Tolerable, but still. And there are a lot of scenes that could be divided into separate chapters. The narrative itself does not allow you to cling to the hero. In the beginning, his father torments him. And then they talk about the dwarves and the history of the city - it's repulsive. I've tried it myself, it's bad. If there are no personal experiences of the hero, people need a conversation or a fight. You have a solid lecture in your text - it's hard to read.

To be honest, I don't even read interesting books right now, but you need motivation to follow your main character. And it's hard to wake her up because he just doesn't want to study. Even if he gets beaten. Someone compassionate could show up here so that we could be infected with his sympathy. But there is nothing of this, even the hero himself somehow weakly feels sorry for himself or hates himself. At least it's difficult to extract from the wall of text about the world around us.

First, you need to get attached to the character in order to show the environment. Or his reaction to it. However, a third-person perspective does not allow us to see the entire world or the motives of those we are not following. There are few images. There are descriptions of nature and places? For example, someone was grumbling in a leaf-covered clearing between two oak trees.

Also, everyone gets drunk in January, and no one reads anything. Probably.

 

[Xcalibur_Xc]

Yo, welcome and good luck with your book

 

[CYY]

Hello, welcome. I don't want to discourage you. But, if you post anything about your fiction, please post it in the Readers > Latest Chapter Discussion section. Also, be careful about promoting your fiction, as most of the users on this forum are more authors than readers.

Regards.

Noted!

Oh, hi. I'm also a be-be-be-beginner writer. I've just started so many times that I'm already st-st-stuttering.

Let's say you have a very strange prologue in your book. It's probably normal. But there are events detached from Xvalkken. It's supposed to introduce us to the world, but it doesn't always work.

The size of the first chapter is big. Tolerable, but still. And there are a lot of scenes that could be divided into separate chapters. The narrative itself does not allow you to cling to the hero. In the beginning, his father torments him. And then they talk about the dwarves and the history of the city - it's repulsive. I've tried it myself, it's bad. If there are no personal experiences of the hero, people need a conversation or a fight. You have a solid lecture in your text - it's hard to read.

To be honest, I don't even read interesting books right now, but you need motivation to follow your main character. And it's hard to wake her up because he just doesn't want to study. Even if he gets beaten. Someone compassionate could show up here so that we could be infected with his sympathy. But there is nothing of this, even the hero himself somehow weakly feels sorry for himself or hates himself. At least it's difficult to extract from the wall of text about the world around us.

First, you need to get attached to the character in order to show the environment. Or his reaction to it. However, a third-person perspective does not allow us to see the entire world or the motives of those we are not following. There are few images. There are descriptions of nature and places? For example, someone was grumbling in a leaf-covered clearing between two oak trees.

Also, everyone gets drunk in January, and no one reads anything. Probably.

I see. Thanks for the feedback!

 

[foxes]

I see. Thanks for the feedback!

I used to think that it would be interesting to put the reader in the hero's shoes. But in the end, they will run away from your story just like your hero did. All of this can be done with just one scene. If there is a battle to be fought, the hero should sit by the pond and examine their fresh scars and bruises. If you have a treatise, the hero should think or say, "memorizing the same thing won't help." All other events can be incorporated into this scene by the pond and the character's emotions. This way, you can describe the character's appearance. Instead of the reader running away from your problems, have the character run away from them in the story.

There are three things you can watch forever: fire, water, and other people working

 

[McPhoenixDavid]

Maybe it is just me but I could not even pronounce the first word of your summary. If that is your MC, then...

 

[Emotica]

Maybe it is just me but I could not even pronounce the first word of your summary. If that is your MC, then...

Made me click, but… the pronunciation really isn’t that complex. Maybe if I heard it out loud I’d be entirely off though.

 

[CYY]

Maybe it is just me but I could not even pronounce the first word of your summary. If that is your MC, then...

Heh heh. It's the name of the MC, supposed to be a naming convention of those people living in the area (the Melting)

 

[McPhoenixDavid]

Heh heh. It's the name of the MC, supposed to be a naming convention of those people living in the area (the Melting)

I see

Made me click, but… the pronunciation really isn’t that complex. Maybe if I heard it out loud I’d be entirely off though.

Mhm.