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[Pausting]

Here is the link.

Lonely Castle in the Mirror : THE NINTH PERSON

Jing Chen is an electronic ghost. Ever since the moment she gained consciousness, she has known the it. One day, a mirror she designed using 3D modeling suddenly began to glow intensely. When she stepped through it, she was transported into a vast, mysterious castle… Seven teenagers pass...

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Thank you so much!

 

[Anonjohn20]

Needs more smut. LOL JK

 

[Pausting]

Needs more smut. LOL JK

mmmmmmm, you’re scaring meeeee! ?

 

[Anonjohn20]

mmmmmmm, you’re scaring meeeee! ?

I'm sorry. Force of habit; we are on SmutHub after all.

 

[Pausting]

I'm sorry. Force of habit; we are on SmutHub after all.

That's okay, I was just kidding. But I don't think this book will be like that, because it's more about healing and psychological stuff. I want it to be light, and maybe a bit boring...

 

[Anonjohn20]

I want it to be a bit boring

Bold move from an author. 10/10 risk-taking skills.

 

[Pausting]

Haha, but someone’s gotta do it ?.
Can you give me some other suggestions? I mean… style or grammar, something like that.