Cookiez_N_Potionz
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After looking at how much replies this thread is getting, I'm changing the format in which I 'review' you guys' stories.
Also, I realized that since I'm only going to review a tiny part of your stories, I will be really focusing on what I don't like, to the point of being nitpicky about it.
#5
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Total reading time: Around 3'
Last read: Early part of Chapter 3
The cover is a bit meh, and the title doesn't really interest me. There is no reason to put LitRPG on your title since it's literally on your tags. The blurb is confusing, and some parts isn't consistent with the chapter itself. He didn't bump into a girl, he was just there, and the girl came to him.
The flow of the story is super fast, and there isn't much distinction between different scenes. There's a scene where the MC is supposed to have a heartwarming talk with his dad, but it felt so bland, like semi emotionless stuff. The dialogues aren't the worst, but I feel like it could use more commas and dots.
Also, usage of slang to describe the MC's actions isn't preferable. Ex: 'outta the bed' should just be 'out of the bed', there is no reason why you would change up the writing style into 'outta'
Overall reader experience: Subpar
Personal Rating: Class 0,5
Categorization:
______________________________Class 3: Good reading experience, will be biting my teeth waiting for new chapters to come out.
Class 2: Good enough, it got some problems but the positives outweigh the bad.
Class 1: Not hopeless, but I won't be interested enough to read it when I first come to it. I probably would just add it to my reading list, but I might never find the spirit to continue reading it.
Class 0: Possible factors: Non-interesting overview, not my cup of tea, or problems with the writing,
Class -1: I ain't readin that.
#6
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Total reading time: Schwarz 5'11'' Si Vis 3' 54''
Schwarz:
The cover is above average, although it's similar to a lot of covers in this site (Literally just the image of the MC slapped onto a rectangular box, boom! a cover is made.) but the text and some of the patterns that decorate it is pretty cool. The title doesn't explain anything about the story, which isn't a good sign. However, judging from how many views your chapter got (Holy hell that's a lot) maybe I'm wrong for this part yeah
The early chapters are rather arduous, since I've read a shit ton of reincarnation novels so the reincarnation part is just going to get skipped for me. The usage of AI image is repulsive for me, since they HIGHLY restricts my imagination of what the characters are going to be. This is a different case with the cover, since the cover is basically just looked at once and then never really seen again. Images in the middle of the chapters, however, forces this uncanny looking shi into your mind.
The actual dialogues are not the worst, but I can't feel much emotion from it.
The 'Show, Don't Tell' is HEAVILY violated here. I know, I know that actual good authors have pointed out that this rule isn't absolute. However, let's just face it I'm here to read an interesting story not read a five thousand page essay on the background of the world. That's a huge exaggeration, but it does hold true a little bit to your story. You do a lot of infodumps that just get skimmed over.
Overall reader experience: Subpar
Personal Rating: 0,8
Categorization:
Class 3: Good reading experience, will be biting my teeth waiting for new chapters to come out.
Class 2: Good enough, it got some problems but the positives outweigh the bad.
Class 1: Not hopeless, but I won't be interested enough to read it when I first come to it. I probably would just add it to my reading list, but I might never find the spirit to continue reading it.
Class 0: Possible factors: Non-interesting overview, not my cup of tea, or problems with the writing,
Class -1: I ain't readin that.
Si Vis Pacem, Para Bellum:
Cover, title and blurb (+ reincarnation part) is as mentioned before on Schwarz
Now, before talking about what the content is, I'm going to preface this by saying I actually read this one before, and in my memory i actually enjoyed it a bit, but it seems that I'm in a state of reading burnout or my tastes have changed, since my current reading experience is really far from that.
The dialogues are intermediate, maybe average+ since it actually felt like humans talking instead of some robots trying to fake being a human. The descriptions are probably objectively not bad, but I'm not a huge fan of slice of life for now so it felt like the descriptions made the pacing a bit slow. Of course, it might just be because I'm rereading this because I'm doing a review, not to 'enjoy' it.
The show don't tell part is also not very followed here, since if we observe it seems that the only sense that is used is vision.
Overall reader experience: Used to be a bit fun, now it's just subpar for me.
Personal Rating: 0,9
Categorization:
Class 3: Good reading experience, will be biting my teeth waiting for new chapters to come out.
Class 2: Good enough, it got some problems but the positives outweigh the bad.
Class 1: Not hopeless, but I won't be interested enough to read it when I first come to it. I probably would just add it to my reading list, but I might never find the spirit to continue reading it.
Class 0: Possible factors: Non-interesting overview, not my cup of tea, or problems with the writing,
Class -1: I ain't readin that.
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As reference, this is my reading preference and categorization:
I LOVE chinese webnovels, but I also like korean webnovels. Japanese isn't truly my cup of tea, but some of them I like a lot. One of the part I like the most about chinese webnovels is their frequent use of chinese idioms like:
Reading ten thousand books is not as good as traveling ten thousand miles
Frog in a well
A frog yearning for swan meat
etc.
The genre I heavily favor is action, however, I also love a well written romance story. The kind that I dislike heavily is yaoi, if it's gay then FUCK OFF. Yuri is the same, but not that repulsive.
Some of the stories I read and what I thought of it:
1. The Legendary Mechanic: Absolutely amazing, it's action is really immersive, and the comedy are really fun. I enjoyed it so much I reread them chapters like a ritual
2. The King's Avatar: Absolute cinema, same as the legendary mechanic, it's action is really good, comedy is fun, the plot twists and it's plot in general is literally amazing. However, the end chapters are basically all just fighting scenes, so that's just a shame.
Thx for the honest opinion
