DireBadger
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Dang, I write heroes. Can't ask you for reviews if it's not to your taste.
[CLOSED] No one wants to review your story? Here I am!
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Hoshino
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Thank you very much-nya
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Your story average around 3.2k per chapters? That's awesome!
https://www.scribblehub.com/read/1882292-kalki-the-ashes/
You can try my story if you like action, drama illustrated novel.
You can try my story if you like action, drama illustrated novel.
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Last seekerKinda bored right now, and I'm not in the mood to get invested into a story.
I am not an author, and I don't have a PhD in english literature, and english is not my first language. Therefore, my review will be subjective in certain areas.
However, I have read a LOT of stories, probably ranging in the hundreds. Despite that, the stories I actually read until the end, or stick to it until today if it isn't finished, numbers maybe at around 2-3 stories (basically word-only ones, visual novels / manga / etc. doesn't count since it is irrelevant), so I'm quite a picky reader if I say so myself.
Well, then. If you want to get a quick reality check, drop the link to your story and I'd be glad to bash it
Be brutally honest
blackcrowcrowd
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Yo guys sorry for taking a long time
Review #2:
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As for the blurb, it is SUPER long, and some parts don't make sense in me.
Punishing the world by raising her daughter doesn't make sense to me.
Since your target reader is definitely not me, the only improvement I can suggest for this part is to delete the basically unreadable text on your cover.
The descriptions are pretty creative, but not the best in store. As an example:
That scene should be super intense, but the way you wrote it made it feel so slow. Especially with those triple dots.
The dialogue is pretty good, but not all. Example:
What do you mean don't judge us? Blood Rose Princess and Memory doesn't require bold. Also, the end shouldn't be a dot, it really should be a !
The consistency of facts or believability of the story is normal, but some parts are really weird and off putting. Example:
You said it was a secret military project, but it's an ancient artefact, meaning it is not created. Also, the ability to erase sins from the world's memory is CRAZY STRONG, literally a reality-level information disturbance.
If such things exist, surely they would have used it the moment they realized they are gonna get fucked up soon, not when they're almost dead.
Personally, I wouldn't read this story, not even skim read.
Overall rating: An intermediate slice-of-life x action story.
Categorization: Class 0
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Review #2:
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All my novels are connected within one universe and one overarching theme (the battle of ideologies). So, reading one novel will ultimately connect to the others. Although my writing hasn't yet connected everything coherently. This is still in its early stages. I design my writing as a long-term project.
Blood Rose Princess Just Wants to Live in Peace with Her Little Daughter
What if the world chose to forget its saviour and its sins, while the saviour chose instead to protect her daughter’s innocence? Seven years ago, the age of tyranny was erased from the memory of mankind. Civilisation crumbled, the tyrants fell into an eternal sleep, and the victims woke...www.scribblehub.com
# Overview
The cover is cool, but the small text that you added isn't necessary since they can't be viewed if you don't intentionally look at the cover. The title is really long, but that's fine. However, personally, slice of life isn't my cup of tea so I wouldn't even bother reading a story with this title.As for the blurb, it is SUPER long, and some parts don't make sense in me.
This is the story of a mother who is a former justice executioner who chooses to raise her daughter, not to save the world, but to punish it.
Since your target reader is definitely not me, the only improvement I can suggest for this part is to delete the basically unreadable text on your cover.
# Content
The formatting of the text is really good, but the usage of bold text is too much. Also, I HEAVILY dislike putting AI image in your story, it doesn't help me immerse at all, and the uncanny valley effect it gives me is off putting.The descriptions are pretty creative, but not the best in store. As an example:
"MEMORY ARTIFACT! ILLUMINATE—," Jose shouted.
But before he could finish his sentence… a sword was already slashed forward… at Jose… at the Memory artefact. Jose's eyes widened and then…
But before he could finish his sentence… a sword was already slashed forward… at Jose… at the Memory artefact. Jose's eyes widened and then…
That scene should be super intense, but the way you wrote it made it feel so slow. Especially with those triple dots.
The dialogue is pretty good, but not all. Example:
But Jose refused to give up; he had prepared a secret military project that could change the world.
"Blood Rose Princess… don't judge us! We will erase our sins from the world's memory."
His hands trembled as he touched the ancient artefact: 'Memory' — a legendary artefact capable of brainwashing the world's inhabitants.
"Blood Rose Princess… don't judge us! We will erase our sins from the world's memory."
His hands trembled as he touched the ancient artefact: 'Memory' — a legendary artefact capable of brainwashing the world's inhabitants.
What do you mean don't judge us? Blood Rose Princess and Memory doesn't require bold. Also, the end shouldn't be a dot, it really should be a !
The consistency of facts or believability of the story is normal, but some parts are really weird and off putting. Example:
But Jose refused to give up; he had prepared a secret military project that could change the world.
"Blood Rose Princess… don't judge us! We will erase our sins from the world's memory."
His hands trembled as he touched the ancient artefact: 'Memory' — a legendary artefact capable of brainwashing the world's inhabitants.
"Blood Rose Princess… don't judge us! We will erase our sins from the world's memory."
His hands trembled as he touched the ancient artefact: 'Memory' — a legendary artefact capable of brainwashing the world's inhabitants.
You said it was a secret military project, but it's an ancient artefact, meaning it is not created. Also, the ability to erase sins from the world's memory is CRAZY STRONG, literally a reality-level information disturbance.
If such things exist, surely they would have used it the moment they realized they are gonna get fucked up soon, not when they're almost dead.
Personally, I wouldn't read this story, not even skim read.
Overall rating: An intermediate slice-of-life x action story.
Categorization: Class 0
Class 3: Good reading experience, will be biting my teeth waiting for new chapters to come out.
Class 2: Good enough, it got some problems but the positives outweigh the bad.
Class 1: Not hopeless, but I won't be interested enough to read it when I first come to it. I probably would just add it to my reading list, but I might never find the spirit to continue reading it.
Class 0: Possible factors: Non-interesting overview, not my cup of tea, or problems with the writing,
Class -1: I ain't readin that.
Class 2: Good enough, it got some problems but the positives outweigh the bad.
Class 1: Not hopeless, but I won't be interested enough to read it when I first come to it. I probably would just add it to my reading list, but I might never find the spirit to continue reading it.
Class 0: Possible factors: Non-interesting overview, not my cup of tea, or problems with the writing,
Class -1: I ain't readin that.
As reference, this is my reading preference and categorization:
I LOVE chinese webnovels, but I also like korean webnovels. Japanese isn't truly my cup of tea, but some of them I like a lot. One of the part I like the most about chinese webnovels is their frequent use of chinese idioms like:
Reading ten thousand books is not as good as traveling ten thousand miles
Frog in a well
A frog yearning for swan meat
etc.
The genre I heavily favor is action, however, I also love a well written romance story. The kind that I dislike heavily is yaoi, if it's gay then FUCK OFF. Yuri is the same, but not that repulsive.
Some of the stories I read and what I thought of it:
1. The Legendary Mechanic: Absolutely amazing, it's action is really immersive, and the comedy are really fun. I enjoyed it so much I reread them chapters like a ritual
2. The King's Avatar: Absolute cinema, same as the legendary mechanic, it's action is really good, comedy is fun, the plot twists and it's plot in general is literally amazing. However, the end chapters are basically all just fighting scenes, so that's just a shame.
Reading ten thousand books is not as good as traveling ten thousand miles
Frog in a well
A frog yearning for swan meat
etc.
The genre I heavily favor is action, however, I also love a well written romance story. The kind that I dislike heavily is yaoi, if it's gay then FUCK OFF. Yuri is the same, but not that repulsive.
Some of the stories I read and what I thought of it:
1. The Legendary Mechanic: Absolutely amazing, it's action is really immersive, and the comedy are really fun. I enjoyed it so much I reread them chapters like a ritual
2. The King's Avatar: Absolute cinema, same as the legendary mechanic, it's action is really good, comedy is fun, the plot twists and it's plot in general is literally amazing. However, the end chapters are basically all just fighting scenes, so that's just a shame.
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Okay, I appreciate your review. There's a lot I could probably correct about the plot, dialogue, and writing, but since your review involves your preferences, I won't comment further. Thank you. Best regards.
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Yessir
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In case you have some time, I’d love for you to check out my story.
WHAT TO EXPECT:
• Slow burn
• Epic fantasy
• Deep, immersive worldbuilding
• 2,600–6,000 word chapters
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1904113/the-last-spark/
WHAT TO EXPECT:
• Slow burn
• Epic fantasy
• Deep, immersive worldbuilding
• 2,600–6,000 word chapters
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1904113/the-last-spark/
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Review #3
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I understand that you probably took your time thinking about the title and came up with this, but it really doesn't explain anything, not interesting.
Also, the blurb is just one huge paragraph, and that is mm yeah not good buddy, pick any random procrastinator lurking on SH and you will find that 99% of them doesn't have the attention span to read that huge text wall.
I can't give a review on how you write your description and believability, since... well, I ain't reading all that dawg
I also can't review how your dialogues are written, since, THERE ISN'T ANY?? are you kidding me how is there not a single spoken word in your first chapter
Personally, I am absolutely not reading this.
Overall rating: Wall text
Categorization: Class -1
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If you were kind enough to take a look at the opening chapter of my novel Terra Una, I'd be very much thankful.
Terra Una - 1. CORPUS ALTERIUS (The Body of the Alter) | Scribble Hub
# Overview
No one knows what the name means, I can't see what the cover is about, and the blurb is kinda meh with too much terms that I don't understand.I understand that you probably took your time thinking about the title and came up with this, but it really doesn't explain anything, not interesting.
Also, the blurb is just one huge paragraph, and that is mm yeah not good buddy, pick any random procrastinator lurking on SH and you will find that 99% of them doesn't have the attention span to read that huge text wall.
Yeah I'm pulling this number out of my ass, what are you gonna do about t?
# Content
First of all, why is your story just these huge walls of text? I suggest dividing them into smaller chunks, since they are just excruciating to read, especially on mobile. I felt like I'm back when I was in high school cramming for tomorrow's test or something.I can't give a review on how you write your description and believability, since... well, I ain't reading all that dawg
I also can't review how your dialogues are written, since, THERE ISN'T ANY?? are you kidding me how is there not a single spoken word in your first chapter
Personally, I am absolutely not reading this.
Overall rating: Wall text
Categorization: Class -1
Class 3: Good reading experience, will be biting my teeth waiting for new chapters to come out.
Class 2: Good enough, it got some problems but the positives outweigh the bad.
Class 1: Not hopeless, but I won't be interested enough to read it when I first come to it. I probably would just add it to my reading list, but I might never find the spirit to continue reading it.
Class 0: Possible factors: Non-interesting overview, not my cup of tea, or problems with the writing,
Class -1: I ain't readin that.
Class 2: Good enough, it got some problems but the positives outweigh the bad.
Class 1: Not hopeless, but I won't be interested enough to read it when I first come to it. I probably would just add it to my reading list, but I might never find the spirit to continue reading it.
Class 0: Possible factors: Non-interesting overview, not my cup of tea, or problems with the writing,
Class -1: I ain't readin that.
As reference, this is my reading preference and categorization:
I LOVE chinese webnovels, but I also like korean webnovels. Japanese isn't truly my cup of tea, but some of them I like a lot. One of the part I like the most about chinese webnovels is their frequent use of chinese idioms like:
Reading ten thousand books is not as good as traveling ten thousand miles
Frog in a well
A frog yearning for swan meat
etc.
The genre I heavily favor is action, however, I also love a well written romance story. The kind that I dislike heavily is yaoi, if it's gay then FUCK OFF. Yuri is the same, but not that repulsive.
Some of the stories I read and what I thought of it:
1. The Legendary Mechanic: Absolutely amazing, it's action is really immersive, and the comedy are really fun. I enjoyed it so much I reread them chapters like a ritual
2. The King's Avatar: Absolute cinema, same as the legendary mechanic, it's action is really good, comedy is fun, the plot twists and it's plot in general is literally amazing. However, the end chapters are basically all just fighting scenes, so that's just a shame.
Reading ten thousand books is not as good as traveling ten thousand miles
Frog in a well
A frog yearning for swan meat
etc.
The genre I heavily favor is action, however, I also love a well written romance story. The kind that I dislike heavily is yaoi, if it's gay then FUCK OFF. Yuri is the same, but not that repulsive.
Some of the stories I read and what I thought of it:
1. The Legendary Mechanic: Absolutely amazing, it's action is really immersive, and the comedy are really fun. I enjoyed it so much I reread them chapters like a ritual
2. The King's Avatar: Absolute cinema, same as the legendary mechanic, it's action is really good, comedy is fun, the plot twists and it's plot in general is literally amazing. However, the end chapters are basically all just fighting scenes, so that's just a shame.
Hoshino
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Hmm... If you don't mind, What would my novel be classified as-nya?
blackcrowcrowd
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Review #4
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The title itself explains a little bit of what the story might be, but not much. Personally, I wouldn't click if it's this title.
The blurb is somewhat meh, with a bit of confusion. There isn't a clear distinction between "The Wolf" no longer here, and "The Wolf" is here, so that's super confusing. Also, you didn't talk about why the wolf is scary, since the wording made it seem that the existence of the wolf makes stuff happens, but not clear whether it is good stuff, or scary stuff.
The second last sentence is also weird, see explanation:
vs
It is more of a personal choice, so this part, you do you man.
Not going to lie, the description is actually pretty good. However, the early paragraphs of your first chapter can feel boring, so you could do something about that.
The dialogues are actually pretty immersive, and colorful (I'm pretty sure the right word isn't colorful, but I don't remember what other words are antonyms of bland and monotonous) which is mind blowing to me, since, looking at the cover, I thought I'm going to read another slop.
The believability and consistency of facts in the story itself, I can't review yet. I don't feel like reading more just to scour for mistakes here and there. So far so good, though.
Personally, I actually like it. You need to do something about the cover, maybe replacing it into only 1 person, to scale with how the cover will appear on the homepage.
Overall rating: Class 1,5 (It's a bit good enough for me to just start reading now, but meh I'll wait.)
Categorization:
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If you have some time, mind checking out my slow burn mystery novel?
Neapolitan Nightmares
The town of Berrymarrel, a quiet and honestly boring little town where nothing ever happens. At least not anymore, now that 'The Wolf' is no longer roaming the streets. Nobody was prepared for his return, the serial killer who's always seen yet never caught. It's up to three girls at...
# Overview
The cover is unique, but not necessarily in a good way. I can't read the title on the cover, might need to change the font a bit. The cover doesn't show much connection with the title, although it does connect with the blurb. However, at the front page, people only see the cover and the title, not the blurb.The title itself explains a little bit of what the story might be, but not much. Personally, I wouldn't click if it's this title.
The blurb is somewhat meh, with a bit of confusion. There isn't a clear distinction between "The Wolf" no longer here, and "The Wolf" is here, so that's super confusing. Also, you didn't talk about why the wolf is scary, since the wording made it seem that the existence of the wolf makes stuff happens, but not clear whether it is good stuff, or scary stuff.
The second last sentence is also weird, see explanation:
Sieglinde, who wants answers. Lucia, who wants revenge and Ichigo, who's just trying to have fun with her besties.
Look at the bolded text, why is there a dot there? If you're going to separate each character by sentence, there should be a dot after Lucia's sentence. If you're not going to, change the dot after answers to a comma.
I know this is such a nitpicky thing, but it's your blurb dude, if it ain't the best you can put out people won't even try your story.
Look at the bolded text, why is there a dot there? If you're going to separate each character by sentence, there should be a dot after Lucia's sentence. If you're not going to, change the dot after answers to a comma.
I know this is such a nitpicky thing, but it's your blurb dude, if it ain't the best you can put out people won't even try your story.
# Content
The formatting could do some more line breaks, see:As Lucia noticed the blonde girl's glance, she gave a quick wave with her hand to come near. "How's the first day back at school going for you, Lin?" She whispered.
As Lucia noticed the blonde girl's glance, she gave a quick wave with her hand to come near.
"How's the first day back at school going for you, Lin?" She whispered.
"How's the first day back at school going for you, Lin?" She whispered.
It is more of a personal choice, so this part, you do you man.
Not going to lie, the description is actually pretty good. However, the early paragraphs of your first chapter can feel boring, so you could do something about that.
The dialogues are actually pretty immersive, and colorful (I'm pretty sure the right word isn't colorful, but I don't remember what other words are antonyms of bland and monotonous) which is mind blowing to me, since, looking at the cover, I thought I'm going to read another slop.
The believability and consistency of facts in the story itself, I can't review yet. I don't feel like reading more just to scour for mistakes here and there. So far so good, though.
Personally, I actually like it. You need to do something about the cover, maybe replacing it into only 1 person, to scale with how the cover will appear on the homepage.
Overall rating: Class 1,5 (It's a bit good enough for me to just start reading now, but meh I'll wait.)
Categorization:
Class 3: Good reading experience, will be biting my teeth waiting for new chapters to come out.
Class 2: Good enough, it got some problems but the positives outweigh the bad.
Class 1: Not hopeless, but I won't be interested enough to read it when I first come to it. I probably would just add it to my reading list, but I might never find the spirit to continue reading it.
Class 0: Possible factors: Non-interesting overview, not my cup of tea, or problems with the writing,
Class -1: I ain't readin that.
Class 2: Good enough, it got some problems but the positives outweigh the bad.
Class 1: Not hopeless, but I won't be interested enough to read it when I first come to it. I probably would just add it to my reading list, but I might never find the spirit to continue reading it.
Class 0: Possible factors: Non-interesting overview, not my cup of tea, or problems with the writing,
Class -1: I ain't readin that.
As reference, this is my reading preference and categorization:
I LOVE chinese webnovels, but I also like korean webnovels. Japanese isn't truly my cup of tea, but some of them I like a lot. One of the part I like the most about chinese webnovels is their frequent use of chinese idioms like:
Reading ten thousand books is not as good as traveling ten thousand miles
Frog in a well
A frog yearning for swan meat
etc.
The genre I heavily favor is action, however, I also love a well written romance story. The kind that I dislike heavily is yaoi, if it's gay then FUCK OFF. Yuri is the same, but not that repulsive.
Some of the stories I read and what I thought of it:
1. The Legendary Mechanic: Absolutely amazing, it's action is really immersive, and the comedy are really fun. I enjoyed it so much I reread them chapters like a ritual
2. The King's Avatar: Absolute cinema, same as the legendary mechanic, it's action is really good, comedy is fun, the plot twists and it's plot in general is literally amazing. However, the end chapters are basically all just fighting scenes, so that's just a shame.
Reading ten thousand books is not as good as traveling ten thousand miles
Frog in a well
A frog yearning for swan meat
etc.
The genre I heavily favor is action, however, I also love a well written romance story. The kind that I dislike heavily is yaoi, if it's gay then FUCK OFF. Yuri is the same, but not that repulsive.
Some of the stories I read and what I thought of it:
1. The Legendary Mechanic: Absolutely amazing, it's action is really immersive, and the comedy are really fun. I enjoyed it so much I reread them chapters like a ritual
2. The King's Avatar: Absolute cinema, same as the legendary mechanic, it's action is really good, comedy is fun, the plot twists and it's plot in general is literally amazing. However, the end chapters are basically all just fighting scenes, so that's just a shame.
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Probably hovering at Class 2 for me, it's pretty good.
PhoonEz
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hello, i'm the guy from the other thread. if you have time please consider reviewing my novel thank you.
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This Fantasy World Is Way Too Much for a Mob Like Me — Please, Give Me a Break!
A man wakes up in a world that feels painted — skies brushed in color, memories out of order, and a book that talks back. He doesn’t know where he is, or who he was. All he knows is that something — or someone — is telling his story. The book insists...
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I feel bad for adding to your ever growing list of requests. ?
I’m not sure if you’re into female-targeted stories (romance, slow-burn, tropes), so feel free to skip mine if you aren’t. I feel like the writing is a little childish. The titles of the chapters are like that because they used to be one single chapter, but I had to split them up for the web novel scene.
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I’m not sure if you’re into female-targeted stories (romance, slow-burn, tropes), so feel free to skip mine if you aren’t. I feel like the writing is a little childish. The titles of the chapters are like that because they used to be one single chapter, but I had to split them up for the web novel scene.
Bloodsworn Eternity, Vow Across Lifetimes
In the kingdom of Velisandria, where the streets at night are roamed by creatures of bloodlust, Elise Whitefield knows nothing beyond obedience: protect the realm, slay the night, and guard the borders of Duskmoore where the dark forest hungers just beyond. Her heart has been a locked casket...
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Oh boy
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I just posted my story here, so feel free to bash it into oblivion lolKinda bored right now, and I'm not in the mood to get invested into a story.
I am not an author, and I don't have a PhD in english literature, and english is not my first language. Therefore, my review will be subjective in certain areas.
However, I have read a LOT of stories, probably ranging in the hundreds. Despite that, the stories I actually read until the end, or stick to it until today if it isn't finished, numbers maybe at around 2-3 stories (basically word-only ones, visual novels / manga / etc. doesn't count since it is irrelevant), so I'm quite a picky reader if I say so myself.
Well, then. If you want to get a quick reality check, drop the link to your story and I'd be glad to bash it
https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1906863/decay-hunter/
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Well I must say the community here seems really awesome
Epics of Tarronia: Fire & Shadow
here you go, feel free to thrash it, there is not much of t just prologue but lets see
Thanks for such kind offer
take care
Epics of Tarronia: Fire & Shadow
here you go, feel free to thrash it, there is not much of t just prologue but lets see
Thanks for such kind offer
take care
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After looking at how much replies this thread is getting, I'm changing the format in which I 'review' you guys' stories.
Also, I realized that since I'm only going to review a tiny part of your stories, I will be really focusing on what I don't like, to the point of being nitpicky about it.
#5
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Last read: Early part of Chapter 3
The cover is a bit meh, and the title doesn't really interest me. There is no reason to put LitRPG on your title since it's literally on your tags. The blurb is confusing, and some parts isn't consistent with the chapter itself. He didn't bump into a girl, he was just there, and the girl came to him.
The flow of the story is super fast, and there isn't much distinction between different scenes. There's a scene where the MC is supposed to have a heartwarming talk with his dad, but it felt so bland, like semi emotionless stuff. The dialogues aren't the worst, but I feel like it could use more commas and dots.
Also, usage of slang to describe the MC's actions isn't preferable. Ex: 'outta the bed' should just be 'out of the bed', there is no reason why you would change up the writing style into 'outta'
Overall reader experience: Subpar
Personal Rating: Class 0,5
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Total reading time: Schwarz 5'11'' Si Vis 3' 54''
Schwarz:
The cover is above average, although it's similar to a lot of covers in this site (Literally just the image of the MC slapped onto a rectangular box, boom! a cover is made.) but the text and some of the patterns that decorate it is pretty cool. The title doesn't explain anything about the story, which isn't a good sign. However, judging from how many views your chapter got (Holy hell that's a lot) maybe I'm wrong for this part yeah
The early chapters are rather arduous, since I've read a shit ton of reincarnation novels so the reincarnation part is just going to get skipped for me. The usage of AI image is repulsive for me, since they HIGHLY restricts my imagination of what the characters are going to be. This is a different case with the cover, since the cover is basically just looked at once and then never really seen again. Images in the middle of the chapters, however, forces this uncanny looking shi into your mind.
The actual dialogues are not the worst, but I can't feel much emotion from it.
The 'Show, Don't Tell' is HEAVILY violated here. I know, I know that actual good authors have pointed out that this rule isn't absolute. However, let's just face it I'm here to read an interesting story not read a five thousand page essay on the background of the world. That's a huge exaggeration, but it does hold true a little bit to your story. You do a lot of infodumps that just get skimmed over.
Overall reader experience: Subpar
Personal Rating: 0,8
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Si Vis Pacem, Para Bellum:
Cover, title and blurb (+ reincarnation part) is as mentioned before on Schwarz
Now, before talking about what the content is, I'm going to preface this by saying I actually read this one before, and in my memory i actually enjoyed it a bit, but it seems that I'm in a state of reading burnout or my tastes have changed, since my current reading experience is really far from that.
The dialogues are intermediate, maybe average+ since it actually felt like humans talking instead of some robots trying to fake being a human. The descriptions are probably objectively not bad, but I'm not a huge fan of slice of life for now so it felt like the descriptions made the pacing a bit slow. Of course, it might just be because I'm rereading this because I'm doing a review, not to 'enjoy' it.
The show don't tell part is also not very followed here, since if we observe it seems that the only sense that is used is vision.
Overall reader experience: Used to be a bit fun, now it's just subpar for me.
Personal Rating: 0,9
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Also, I realized that since I'm only going to review a tiny part of your stories, I will be really focusing on what I don't like, to the point of being nitpicky about it.
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Total reading time: Around 3'I love to improve and criticism can be helpful
The Maverick and The Succubus [LitRPG]
5 Systems. 5 Royal Families. Greetings, Champion! 17 year-old, Collin Rex is a football player with a heart of gold. But his easygoing life is flipped upside-down when his older siblings fall into a mysterious coma. With no more tricks in their playbook Collin's folks decide to move back to...
Last read: Early part of Chapter 3
The cover is a bit meh, and the title doesn't really interest me. There is no reason to put LitRPG on your title since it's literally on your tags. The blurb is confusing, and some parts isn't consistent with the chapter itself. He didn't bump into a girl, he was just there, and the girl came to him.
The flow of the story is super fast, and there isn't much distinction between different scenes. There's a scene where the MC is supposed to have a heartwarming talk with his dad, but it felt so bland, like semi emotionless stuff. The dialogues aren't the worst, but I feel like it could use more commas and dots.
Also, usage of slang to describe the MC's actions isn't preferable. Ex: 'outta the bed' should just be 'out of the bed', there is no reason why you would change up the writing style into 'outta'
Overall reader experience: Subpar
Personal Rating: Class 0,5
Categorization:
Class 3: Good reading experience, will be biting my teeth waiting for new chapters to come out.
Class 2: Good enough, it got some problems but the positives outweigh the bad.
Class 1: Not hopeless, but I won't be interested enough to read it when I first come to it. I probably would just add it to my reading list, but I might never find the spirit to continue reading it.
Class 0: Possible factors: Non-interesting overview, not my cup of tea, or problems with the writing,
Class -1: I ain't readin that.
Class 2: Good enough, it got some problems but the positives outweigh the bad.
Class 1: Not hopeless, but I won't be interested enough to read it when I first come to it. I probably would just add it to my reading list, but I might never find the spirit to continue reading it.
Class 0: Possible factors: Non-interesting overview, not my cup of tea, or problems with the writing,
Class -1: I ain't readin that.
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Total reading time: Schwarz 5'11'' Si Vis 3' 54''
Schwarz:
The cover is above average, although it's similar to a lot of covers in this site (Literally just the image of the MC slapped onto a rectangular box, boom! a cover is made.) but the text and some of the patterns that decorate it is pretty cool. The title doesn't explain anything about the story, which isn't a good sign. However, judging from how many views your chapter got (Holy hell that's a lot) maybe I'm wrong for this part yeah
The early chapters are rather arduous, since I've read a shit ton of reincarnation novels so the reincarnation part is just going to get skipped for me. The usage of AI image is repulsive for me, since they HIGHLY restricts my imagination of what the characters are going to be. This is a different case with the cover, since the cover is basically just looked at once and then never really seen again. Images in the middle of the chapters, however, forces this uncanny looking shi into your mind.
The actual dialogues are not the worst, but I can't feel much emotion from it.
The 'Show, Don't Tell' is HEAVILY violated here. I know, I know that actual good authors have pointed out that this rule isn't absolute. However, let's just face it I'm here to read an interesting story not read a five thousand page essay on the background of the world. That's a huge exaggeration, but it does hold true a little bit to your story. You do a lot of infodumps that just get skimmed over.
Overall reader experience: Subpar
Personal Rating: 0,8
Categorization:
Class 3: Good reading experience, will be biting my teeth waiting for new chapters to come out.
Class 2: Good enough, it got some problems but the positives outweigh the bad.
Class 1: Not hopeless, but I won't be interested enough to read it when I first come to it. I probably would just add it to my reading list, but I might never find the spirit to continue reading it.
Class 0: Possible factors: Non-interesting overview, not my cup of tea, or problems with the writing,
Class -1: I ain't readin that.
Class 2: Good enough, it got some problems but the positives outweigh the bad.
Class 1: Not hopeless, but I won't be interested enough to read it when I first come to it. I probably would just add it to my reading list, but I might never find the spirit to continue reading it.
Class 0: Possible factors: Non-interesting overview, not my cup of tea, or problems with the writing,
Class -1: I ain't readin that.
Si Vis Pacem, Para Bellum:
Cover, title and blurb (+ reincarnation part) is as mentioned before on Schwarz
Now, before talking about what the content is, I'm going to preface this by saying I actually read this one before, and in my memory i actually enjoyed it a bit, but it seems that I'm in a state of reading burnout or my tastes have changed, since my current reading experience is really far from that.
The dialogues are intermediate, maybe average+ since it actually felt like humans talking instead of some robots trying to fake being a human. The descriptions are probably objectively not bad, but I'm not a huge fan of slice of life for now so it felt like the descriptions made the pacing a bit slow. Of course, it might just be because I'm rereading this because I'm doing a review, not to 'enjoy' it.
The show don't tell part is also not very followed here, since if we observe it seems that the only sense that is used is vision.
Overall reader experience: Used to be a bit fun, now it's just subpar for me.
Personal Rating: 0,9
Categorization:
Class 3: Good reading experience, will be biting my teeth waiting for new chapters to come out.
Class 2: Good enough, it got some problems but the positives outweigh the bad.
Class 1: Not hopeless, but I won't be interested enough to read it when I first come to it. I probably would just add it to my reading list, but I might never find the spirit to continue reading it.
Class 0: Possible factors: Non-interesting overview, not my cup of tea, or problems with the writing,
Class -1: I ain't readin that.
Class 2: Good enough, it got some problems but the positives outweigh the bad.
Class 1: Not hopeless, but I won't be interested enough to read it when I first come to it. I probably would just add it to my reading list, but I might never find the spirit to continue reading it.
Class 0: Possible factors: Non-interesting overview, not my cup of tea, or problems with the writing,
Class -1: I ain't readin that.
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As reference, this is my reading preference and categorization:
I LOVE chinese webnovels, but I also like korean webnovels. Japanese isn't truly my cup of tea, but some of them I like a lot. One of the part I like the most about chinese webnovels is their frequent use of chinese idioms like:
Reading ten thousand books is not as good as traveling ten thousand miles
Frog in a well
A frog yearning for swan meat
etc.
The genre I heavily favor is action, however, I also love a well written romance story. The kind that I dislike heavily is yaoi, if it's gay then FUCK OFF. Yuri is the same, but not that repulsive.
Some of the stories I read and what I thought of it:
1. The Legendary Mechanic: Absolutely amazing, it's action is really immersive, and the comedy are really fun. I enjoyed it so much I reread them chapters like a ritual
2. The King's Avatar: Absolute cinema, same as the legendary mechanic, it's action is really good, comedy is fun, the plot twists and it's plot in general is literally amazing. However, the end chapters are basically all just fighting scenes, so that's just a shame.
Reading ten thousand books is not as good as traveling ten thousand miles
Frog in a well
A frog yearning for swan meat
etc.
The genre I heavily favor is action, however, I also love a well written romance story. The kind that I dislike heavily is yaoi, if it's gay then FUCK OFF. Yuri is the same, but not that repulsive.
Some of the stories I read and what I thought of it:
1. The Legendary Mechanic: Absolutely amazing, it's action is really immersive, and the comedy are really fun. I enjoyed it so much I reread them chapters like a ritual
2. The King's Avatar: Absolute cinema, same as the legendary mechanic, it's action is really good, comedy is fun, the plot twists and it's plot in general is literally amazing. However, the end chapters are basically all just fighting scenes, so that's just a shame.