Very Unfair Story Feedback Thread

[LuoirM]

Necro because I wanna open this back up!

 

[Hoshino]

well... Nya.

 

[LuoirM]

well... Nya.

Surprisingly enough, you improved since your last submissions. And I gotta say, I didn't click off immediately.
One ick I have was the fact that the word "I" should never exist at the start of a sentence or title, because it looks ugly and make the sentence messy, visually, of course, like how you shouldn't use a name with "r" at the end unless it's meant to be quirky like Luoir

And... Why is his head in place of the infinity symbol- I hope it's explained in the story later on.

I stopped raeding after the synopsis though, because I do not like metas and self-aware fourthwall stuff thrown directly into my face like that, especially in a power fantasy esque story

 

[Hoshino]

Surprisingly enough, you improved since your last submissions. And I gotta say, I didn't click off immediately.
One ick I have was the fact that the word "I" should never exist at the start of a sentence or title, because it looks ugly and make the sentence messy, visually, of course, like how you shouldn't use a name with "r" at the end unless it's meant to be quirky like Luoir

And... Why is his head in place of the infinity symbol- I hope it's explained in the story later on.

I stopped reading after the synopsis though, because I do not like metas and self-aware fourth wall stuff thrown directly into my face like that, especially in a power fantasy esque story

I'm so proud of you that you have come this far-nya. To think the day would come when you would make it past the grueling time of the page loading, and even more getting past the title-nya...

 

[V8485]

The Devil Been Isekai | Scribble Hub

 

[Worthy39]

This wasn't super clear, do you comment on the story, or here in the thread? If you comment "I couldn't read past the synopsis" on the story, I struggle enough to get any recognition for the story as is, a negative comment would just be the last nail in my coffin. If you comment here, then I will gladly throw my soul at you so it can be ripped to shreds.

 

[LuoirM]

This wasn't super clear, do you comment on the story, or here in the thread? If you comment "I couldn't read past the synopsis" on the story, I struggle enough to get any recognition for the story as is, a negative comment would just be the last nail in my coffin. If you comment here, then I will gladly throw my soul at you so it can be ripped to shreds.

Here baby

 

[Worthy39]

In that case, have at it.

Eidolon Codex

 

[MagdalenaForsberg]

Please review my chapters. Looking forward to hearing the harsh stuff ?

MagdalenaForsberg's Profile | Scribble Hub

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[Cookiez_N_Potionz]

Don't sugarcoat, let me feel the honesty

The Maverick and The Succubus [LitRPG]

5 Systems. 5 Royal Families. Greetings, Champion! 17 year-old, Collin Rex is a football player with a heart of gold. But his easygoing life is flipped upside-down when his older siblings fall into a mysterious coma. With no more tricks in their playbook Collin's folks decide to move back to...

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[smartpants6]

Sure, give it a go for mine

 

[goldenphonix]

have at it. here to learn and improve

The Nightmare Weaver

[Currently retouching earliest chapters to fit the updated narrative. Done: 1-10. Will keep updating this.] “What if every nightmare you've ever had was a manufactured product?” Zev McTerror has always been the quiet type—small, awkwardly polite, and terrible at saying no. It was only natural...

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[ak47_1511]

https://www.scribblehub.com/read/1882292-kalki-the-ashes/
Use my story, it's illustrated, might help?

 

[Abnormals]

Because I made it very simple even a Korean like you could understand.


Some recent stories posted on this site are written by LLM or the butler. Brace yourself! They are coming!


Human written stories with bad grammar VS AI-generated stories with perfect grammar. Who will win? The one who don't lose!

Simply use AI from grammar , when i write there was a lot of spelling mistake and grametical error so i use AI to correct my grammer but sometime it change some word that does'nt fit well with me so i change back to the origanal term like : it change there to its etc

 

[Para23]

Hello, my name's LuoirM (ignore the username currently I couldn't change it yet, my teenage years were wild). And here's my
Very Unfair Story Feedback Thread

Why is it" Very Unfair"
Because I have a reading disability (undiagnosed).
I only remember reading exactly one book in my life, back in 7th grade. It was a Chinese romance.
I tried reading online novels before, but never got past the first 5 lines. Both in my native tongue and in Engrisk.

How does this work?
Give me a link. I'll tell you when did I stop reading, and as an unimportant reader, would I ever come back?
Gon give advices, too, if you're female.

Why should you use my service?
Because if you're really, really good at captivating the eyes, and managed to capture someone with a problem like myself, it's a very great feat!
It's free!

Why shouldn't you use my service?
Because I can, and possibly will, stop reading right at the synopsis, comment "I can't read past the synopsis" and that will demoralize you as an author, you may think that you're a bad author even if you're not.

Dilemma huh? Alright, let's go, if you dare...

Alright I’ll give it a go, just curious to see up to where it’ll catch your interest
Decay Hunter

 

[Nekyo]

After my first review I don't think I have anything to fear!

Let's see if my story gets past the title! >w< Bring it on Luoir-san!

Voidlight: The Devil and Heroine Can’t Possibly Get Along. Not Even in the Human World! Right!? [Reverse Isekai]

They were gods of war. Now they can barely afford rent. Hollow was an Abyssal, a demon born from pure hatred. The most feared across the Spiritual World. Liliane was a Radiant, a human who burned away her body and emotions to become the light meant to stop him. For...

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[MrShu]

Hello everyone, I am new here.

A Will Beyond The World

In Vespera, power is decided at birth—by noble bloodlines, divine favour, and the strength of one’s magic. Ronan has none of it. An orphan with a single fire affinity and a shallow mana pool, he’s the last person anyone expects to matter in the hallowed halls of...

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Here is my story. I don't know what hooked me in this, as I am afraid of being judged by others. But still here I am posting. Hopefully, you can read the first chapter.??