Planning for my story!

[Breakin]

Here is my storyline:

Hope you guys help me with this!
Okay it’s a joke I can’t even read this

 

[Deleted member 84247]

This handwriting is so bad you made a new language.

 

[Zenftiy]

Paracetamol

 

[RainyLiquid]

Hmmmmmm. I don't understand.

 

[Yuin]

Gosh, how do you read this? Just by looking at the first letter of each word?

 

[Breakin]

You guys can share your handwriting. I don’t think mine is bad…

 

[Corty]

Respect. I gave up on handwriting as it is slow and I write like a doctor.

 

[NotaNuffian]

All I know is that for your prologue, your MC is terminally ill.

Which is just so darn cliche.

 

[Supperset]

Why

Here is my storyline:
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Hope you guys help me with this!
Okay it’s a joke I can’t even read this

It's almost like a doctor's handwriting.

 

[CharlesEBrown]

Sad thing is... that's better than my handwriting.

 

[ConansWitchBaby]

Seems like easy enough Yaoi if I'm reading this correctly. The reconnection might be a bit hard unless you already breath romance literature. If you do, looks solid for a premise although a bit short.

 

[Ai-chan]

That's okay as a story, but you first have to ask the question of who, where and why. If Mike becomes a pawn shop, you have to think up how he ended up as a pawn shop in a parallel world and why the literature books are sold in his shop instead of actual bookstores. You also need to figure out how the beastmen are tied to the whole thing and why their dicks are so huge. What benefit does he have for letting people just wander around inside him and so on and so on. Ai-chan thinks it will help you greatly if you ask a local priest to bless your outline.

 

[A_veil_of_red_ink]

agaboga bboo, that's what I understood by that language. btw plot is good.
Like when you wrote hangbang bmdorn, man, it made me cry. What a great story.

Good work.

 

[Breakin]

That's okay as a story, but you first have to ask the question of who, where and why. If Mike becomes a pawn shop, you have to think up how he ended up as a pawn shop in a parallel world and why the literature books are sold in his shop instead of actual bookstores. You also need to figure out how the beastmen are tied to the whole thing and why their dicks are so huge. What benefit does he have for letting people just wander around inside him and so on and so on. Ai-chan thinks it will help you greatly if you ask a local priest to bless your outline.

Woah.. how you know I was writing a crime and punishment fan fic??

agaboga bboo, that's what I understood by that language. btw plot is good.
Like when you wrote hangbang bmdorn, man, it made me cry. What a great story.

Good work.

Only you get my language ?

*squints*

Prologue:
"He is a terminally ill man who had liver damage after his date with Tasha"
...
?

Okay, the first 5 words are right… and the rest are wrong!