First time new writer in this sitee~ Need some honest feedback to my story.

[Edeshei]

Hellloo~ I would liek to hear your honest feedback regarding my story. I do wanna hone my craft in writing. I'm a bit amateur in structure sooo I would love to hear if there's anything I should improve with my story :>

Oh! Please do drop your stories that I could read :> since im new to the site I want to explore more of your stories here

 

[Empress_Omnii]

Caelestialis

SLOW BURN| DARK FANTASY | ROMANTIC ANGST | PROGRESSION In the once-prosperous city of Araes, the disappearance of the deity Razla has plunged the land into chaos. The people suffer, abandoned by their god, while crime and desperation fester in the streets. Dawn is a skilled reluctant thief but...

www.scribblehub.com

Here's the link. Many people prefer having it linked over having to look (even if it's in your signature, as they don't show up on mobile)

As for feedback. It's not gay, so a tragedy. I've got way too many other books on the go. In my case only gay stories bypass that queue, so sorry for the lack of feedback.

 

[Akkizakura]

Caelestialis

SLOW BURN| DARK FANTASY | ROMANTIC ANGST | PROGRESSION In the once-prosperous city of Araes, the disappearance of the deity Razla has plunged the land into chaos. The people suffer, abandoned by their god, while crime and desperation fester in the streets. Dawn is a skilled reluctant thief but...

www.scribblehub.com

Here's the link. Many people prefer having it linked over having to look (even if it's in your signature, as they don't show up on mobile)

As for feedback. It's not gay, so a tragedy. I've got way too many other books on the go. In my case only gay stories bypass that queue, so sorry for the lack of feedback.

This. Many people here are gay, so they prefer gay stories.

Unless if they are like @StoneInky who isn't picky and will read everything. She is still gay, though.

Stone or Ink, Do your thing.

 

[Empress_Omnii]

This. Many people here are gay, so they prefer gay stories.

I say it's closer to 50/50 between smut/harem readers and lgbtq+ (mostly lesbeans and trans peeps)

Some overlap and many readers that aren't either, but... I am not doing data analysis to actually make sense of it.

 

[Edeshei]

Caelestialis

SLOW BURN| DARK FANTASY | ROMANTIC ANGST | PROGRESSION In the once-prosperous city of Araes, the disappearance of the deity Razla has plunged the land into chaos. The people suffer, abandoned by their god, while crime and desperation fester in the streets. Dawn is a skilled reluctant thief but...

www.scribblehub.com

Here's the link. Many people prefer having it linked over having to look (even if it's in your signature, as they don't show up on mobile)

As for feedback. It's not gay, so a tragedy. I've got way too many other books on the go. In my case only gay stories bypass that queue, so sorry for the lack of feedback.

Thank you so much!! I didnt know that, how do you insert this in link?

Caelestialis

SLOW BURN| DARK FANTASY | ROMANTIC ANGST | PROGRESSION In the once-prosperous city of Araes, the disappearance of the deity Razla has plunged the land into chaos. The people suffer, abandoned by their god, while crime and desperation fester in the streets. Dawn is a skilled reluctant thief but...

www.scribblehub.com

Here's the link. Many people prefer having it linked over having to look (even if it's in your signature, as they don't show up on mobile)

As for feedback. It's not gay, so a tragedy. I've got way too many other books on the go. In my case only gay stories bypass that queue, so sorry for the lack of feedback.

It's okaay i still appreciate you commented :>

This. Many people here are gay, so they prefer gay stories.

Unless if they are like @StoneInky who isn't picky and will read everything. She is still gay, though.

Stone or Ink, Do your thing.

Ohhh I seeee I seee thanks for the info!

 

[StoneInky]

This. Many people here are gay, so they prefer gay stories.

Unless if they are like @StoneInky who isn't picky and will read everything. She is still gay, though.

Stone or Ink, Do your thing.

I am not gayyyyy! Why am I gay? You are gay!

I've stopped doing random reviews, remember? I'm doing the ones on my thread so I have zero time. Hm. Reminds me that I should review some today.

 

[Macha]

This. Many people here are gay, so they prefer gay stories.

Unless if they are like @StoneInky who isn't picky and will read everything. She is still gay, though.

Stone or Ink, Do your thing.

I am not gayyyyy! Why am I gay? You are gay!

I've stopped doing random reviews, remember? I'm doing the ones on my thread so I have zero time. Hm. Reminds me that I should review some today.

Because you two are the same person!

 

[StoneInky]

Because you two are the same person!

But you are the same person tooo! If we're gay, that means YOU are gay toooooo! We are all gay then!

 

[Macha]

But you are the same person tooo! That means YOU are gay toooooo! We are all gay!

Dream #00004

I awakened the power to control Air. There was this other confused girl who awakened the power of Water. A bunch of other power users were trying to gang on us, so I beat them all up with judo (I dunno how), grabbed her hand, and fled us to the stratosphere.

It was very strangely sapphic. I remember the line 'I am yours and you are mine'.

I used air to make a barrier of oxygen around us, she used water to disguise us as a cloud? Then we dropped back into the ocean around Vietnam cuz we were hungry, and my new gf wanted Vietnamese coffee, fruit, and chicken wings. We were Western foreigners with zero money. So we um, liberated(?) some materials? It was really fun, though.

Then more power users came, cuz they always come. I protected new gf while she negotiated. Lmaooooo.

(I swear I am not gae. But sometimes you get weird dreams.)

This is smuthub! Everyone is the same person! We are all gay!

 

[StoneInky]

This is smuthub! Everyone is the same person! We are all gay!

...Prove it, then!

 

[Leti]

...Prove it, then!

It's actually 50/50.

 

[Esia]

I wrote a review. Please wait for the mods approval to see it.

 

[Macha]

I wrote a review. Please wait for the mods approval to see it.

Aren't you and Edeshei the same person?

 

[Edeshei]

Aren't you and Edeshei the same person?

Nooo ??

I wrote a review. Please wait for the mods approval to see it.

Okhiee thankkssss

 

[StoneInky]

It's actually 50/50.

Aren't you and Edeshei the same person?

Nooo ??

Okhiee thankkssss

Susss... very very sus... hm...

 

[Edeshei]

Susss... very very sus... hm...

Literally just joined yesterday ???

 

[Erysion]

Nooo ??

Okhiee thankkssss

I have a bad news and good news for you. You will hear the bad news first.

The bad news? Prepare to be cursed. Most stories Esia reviewed ends up getting deleted.

The good news? They gets deleted because of publishing contracts. You have a bright future ahead.

 

[StoneInky]

I have a bad news and good news for you. You will hear the bad news first.

The bad news? Prepare to be cursed. Most stories Esia reviewed ends up getting deleted.

The good news? They gets deleted because of publishing contracts. You have a bright future ahead.

!! Adding to my to do list: Trick Ask Esia to review my novel.

 

[Macha]

!! Adding to my to do list: Trick Ask Esia to review my novel.

She always say nice things. Her reviews aren't very helpful.

 

[RainingFish]

I've read the first chapter, and am liking it so far.