"First-Time Writer, Dragon Chaos Story – Pls Send Feedback! ?"

lolwninja

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First time I'm against Stony's opinion... Never thought this day would come.

I read ALL of the chapters and well, the writing is veeeery. Like veryyy. It even still has those bold schrift a certain butler loves do to. BUT... I do NOT think its comes from the OH Great Butler, but rather was just HEAVELY overworked by them.

Anyway, make your thing. If you wanna hear a tip; Tone a little down.

Totally fair I went full chaos early on, but I’ll keep the “tone it down” tip in mind for future chapters.
Really appreciate you reading all the way through. That means a lot.
 

FieryLou

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So... you think it was AI? Can you tell me why? Just curious.
Because every sentence is too much... Dunno how to discibe this, but it feels like many words are just there to fill up in an unnatural way. Like you copy-pasted your work and gave a prombt like; Lenghten this or something similair and in combination with the rest, it feels off. Lets not start with his responses here on the thread who all read artifactial aswell. They agree, but also push their agenda each time always with the same pattern a certain butler does. This is one of those works who the combination of all makes it suspicious. One may use certains words, one may fill their sentences, one may use ehm slashes and so on, but if everything comes at once? Nah
 

StoneInky

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Because every sentence is too much... Dunno how to discibe this, but it feels like many words are just there to fill up in an unnatural way. Like you copy-pasted your work and gave a prombt like; Lenghten this or something similair and in combination with the rest, it feels off. Lets not start with his responses here on the thread who all read artifactial aswell. They agree, but also push their agenda each time always with the same pattern a certain butler does. This is one of those works who the combination of all makes it suspicious. One may use certains words, one may fill their sentences, one may use ehm slashes and so on, but if everything comes at once? Nah
I put it through more checkers.

Most of the checkers said it was human written and edited. One said the text may have been generated with AI, but then heavily edited by a human.

Either way, the novel needs a lot of work. Even the base synopsis feels too cliche and generic, not to mention the actual writing, so it doesn't matter if it's AI edited or not. Who cares, if nobody will read it anyway?

Dude should rework their entire plot idea. It's just a Solo Leveling ripoff rn.
 

FieryLou

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I put it through more checkers.

Most of the checkers said it was human written and edited. One said the text may have been generated with AI, but then heavily edited by a human.

Either way, the novel needs a lot of work rn. Even the base synopsis feels too cliche and generic, not to mention the actual writing, so it doesn't matter if it's AI edited or not. Who cares, if nobody will read it anyway?
Yeah, thats why I said; Just do your thing.
 

lolwninja

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I put it through more checkers.

Most of the checkers said it was human written and edited. One said the text may have been generated with AI, but then heavily edited by a human.

Either way, the novel needs a lot of work. Even the base synopsis feels too cliche and generic, not to mention the actual writing, so it doesn't matter if it's AI edited or not. Who cares, if nobody will read it anyway?

Dude should rework their entire plot idea. It's just a Solo Leveling ripoff rn.
Appreciate the honesty, really but saying “who cares if nobody will read it anyway” feels a bit harsh. I get that the writing’s not perfect and the concept might not be groundbreaking. I’m a first-time writer, not a bestseller. Yeah, there are Solo Leveling vibes, I won’t deny that it’s an influence, not a copy-paste. Everyone starts somewhere, and this is mine. I’d rather put out something imperfect and grow from it than do nothing out of fear of criticism. So thanks for your input it’s noted, even if the tone was more demolition than feedback.
 

Fairemont

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Appreciate the honesty, really but saying “who cares if nobody will read it anyway” feels a bit harsh. I get that the writing’s not perfect and the concept might not be groundbreaking. I’m a first-time writer, not a bestseller. Yeah, there are Solo Leveling vibes, I won’t deny that it’s an influence, not a copy-paste. Everyone starts somewhere, and this is mine. I’d rather put out something imperfect and grow from it than do nothing out of fear of criticism. So thanks for your input it’s noted, even if the tone was more demolition than feedback.
The gang around the forum can get pretty hostile at times, especially when they're out for AI-blood.

Your writing isn't bad for a first timer, so it's a good start.
 

lolwninja

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Because every sentence is too much... Dunno how to discibe this, but it feels like many words are just there to fill up in an unnatural way. Like you copy-pasted your work and gave a prombt like; Lenghten this or something similair and in combination with the rest, it feels off. Lets not start with his responses here on the thread who all read artifactial aswell. They agree, but also push their agenda each time always with the same pattern a certain butler does. This is one of those works who the combination of all makes it suspicious. One may use certains words, one may fill their sentences, one may use ehm slashes and so on, but if everything comes at once? Nah
I know I am still learning as a new author, so I will not always be the best with my writing style. But honestly, what can i do? Fight every critic? I'm just trying to learn and take criticism, even though sometimes it's not pleasant to hear. It may sound like "butler" attitude, but I am really just trying to learn and be a better writer on the basis of feedback from more experienced readers like you. I am not flawless, and I don't know everything yet, but I am doing my best. Thanks for the criticism, though all criticism is appreciated.
The gang around the forum can get pretty hostile at times, especially when they're out for AI-blood.

Your writing isn't bad for a first timer, so it's a good start.
Yeah, no problem, I get it. This is what critics do, and honestly, it’s part of the process. I knew putting my first work out there would come with some fire, especially in forums like this. I’ll just take what’s useful, keep learning, and keep writing. Appreciate you saying it’s a decent start though, that means something.
 

Fairemont

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I know I am still learning as a new author, so I will not always be the best with my writing style. But honestly, what can i do? Fight every critic? I'm just trying to learn and take criticism, even though sometimes it's not pleasant to hear. It may sound like "butler" attitude, but I am really just trying to learn and be a better writer on the basis of feedback from more experienced readers like you. I am not flawless, and I don't know everything yet, but I am doing my best. Thanks for the criticism, though all criticism is appreciated.

Yeah, no problem, I get it. This is what critics do, and honestly, it’s part of the process. I knew putting my first work out there would come with some fire, especially in forums like this. I’ll just take what’s useful, keep learning, and keep writing. Appreciate you saying it’s a decent start though, that means something.
I started off much worse (probably).

I can't remember my earliest works, but it was not good.

Everyone starts somewhere. Everyone improves. It just takes time, practice, and patience.
 

StoneInky

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Appreciate the honesty, really but saying “who cares if nobody will read it anyway” feels a bit harsh. I get that the writing’s not perfect and the concept might not be groundbreaking. I’m a first-time writer, not a bestseller. Yeah, there are Solo Leveling vibes, I won’t deny that it’s an influence, not a copy-paste. Everyone starts somewhere, and this is mine. I’d rather put out something imperfect and grow from it than do nothing out of fear of criticism. So thanks for your input it’s noted, even if the tone was more demolition than feedback.
Oops. I'm sorry, texting at 3AM made my brain go woozy. I meant it more like hm... it doesn't really matter whether you use AI or not, (though again, I personally think you don't), the quality of the work is what matters. Yeah, that sounds more like what I meant, lol.

Will not retract the bit about the plot needing work, though. Either think on the summary/synopsis some more, or post it as fanfiction. Fanfics are fun to start writing with, and it'll net you views.

I started off much worse (probably).

I can't remember my earliest works, but it was not good.

Everyone starts somewhere. Everyone improves. It just takes time, practice, and patience.
I have my earlier works saved on Google Docs. A train wreck, they are. Never posted em, and I'm glad they stayed that way, lmaooo.
 

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Either way, the novel needs a lot of work. Even the base synopsis feels too cliche and generic, not to mention the actual writing, so it doesn't matter if it's AI edited or not. Who cares, if nobody will read it anyway?
Yeah, it doesn't matter if it's AI edited or not. This is Scribble Hub, not Royal Road. If you want to have an actual audience you should write GB/GL. Even if the base synopsis feels too cliche and generic, not to mention the actual writing, it will still become popular.
 

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Yeah, it doesn't matter if it's AI edited or not. This is Scribble Hub, not Royal Road. If you want to have an actual audience you should write GB/GL. Even if the base synopsis feels too cliche and generic, not to mention the actual writing, it will still become popular.
You don't look for healthy food on a fast food restaurant. You go there because of junk food.

The best story in this site according to TheTrinary (Caninstinct) only has about 100 readers.

 

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Either way, the novel needs a lot of work. Even the base synopsis feels too cliche and generic, not to mention the actual writing, so it doesn't matter if it's AI edited or not. Who cares, if nobody will read it anyway?
Yeah, it doesn't matter if it's AI edited or not. This is Scribble Hub, not Royal Road. If you want to have an actual audience you should write GB/GL. Even if the base synopsis feels too cliche and generic, not to mention the actual writing, it will still become popular.
You don't look for healthy food on a fast food restaurant. You go there because of junk food.

The best story in this site according to TheTrinary (Caninstinct) only has about 100 readers.
Should I write a guide about how to make people read your story?
 
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