Send me your stories(free feedback/reviews)

[CountVampyre]

I'm kinda bored, so I'm giving you the chance to get a free feedback/review for your work (grammar not included since I suck at it). Putting grammar aside, I'm a seasoned reader and have quite a bit of experience, meaning I should be able to give you some valuable pointers.



Requirements:

• 25k words max
• No GB/Yaoi/NTR or other cursed tags (GL is fine)
• No AI slop (light edits are fine, but I don't want that obvious AI undertone)

Just tell me if you want a review, or feedback. You can also pick both.

 

[Talien_Auravale]

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1548321/ashen-crest-rise-of-the-soulborne/

 

[N.K.Watson]

I've got just under 15,000, 4 chapters. I'm VERY new to writing, just plotting and writing the weird story in my head. (My synopsis is AI written, i sent my plotted chapters into chatgpt and had it write one. i'm working on creating my own. My chapters are my own.)

 

[JMCfor]

Please here is mine let me know what you think;

DEMONIC WIZARD

Betrayed, broken, and buried beneath the boot of a world that knew no mercy—Aris died unfairly. Unfortunately or fortunately fate wasn’t finished with him. Reborn in a desolate world ruled by wizards from behind the scenes, who feast on souls and grind the weak into dust, he awakens...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[CountVampyre]

@three who wrote

Yeah, gonna give them a read.

 

[CharlesEBrown]

I think I have two that currently fit that range of limitations (on this site) - True Blue and Digital Cowboy( though both should move beyond it over the next few days - True Blue is a good deal longer on Royal Road; Digital Cowboy Dane just passed that length at CH 13 on PocketFM...); feel free to give either feedback or a review if you want to bother.

 

[CountVampyre]

I think I have two that currently fit that range of limitations on this site ) - True Blue and Digital Cowboy( though both should move beyond it over the next few days - True Blue is a good deal longer on Royal Road; Digital Cowboy Dane just passed that length at CH 13 on PocketFM...); feel feree to give either feedback or a review if you want to bother.

:)

 

[Cookiez_N_Potionz]

I have a question.

My story is a LitRPG with drama and supernatural elements. Also, my character is bisexual and in a relationship with a guy. That isn't the main focus though, but does that eliminate my story? My word count is also 30k.

 

[CountVampyre]

I have a question.

My story is a LitRPG with drama and supernatural elements. Also, my character is bisexual and in a relationship with a guy. That isn't the main focus though, but does that eliminate my story? My word count is also 30k.

Sigh

First of all, tag your story properly. A "bisexual MC" tag is not enough if he is in a relationship with a guy. But yeah, I'm going to give it a go. With BL, I meant those that really focus on it. I'll do it tomorrow, though. I'm going to write the reviews for the others first, and then sleep.

 

[Bartun]

Oh, I would love some feedback on my rewritten chapters.

Here's the link to my humble little story.

 

[Cookiez_N_Potionz]

Sigh

First of all, tag your story properly. A "bisexual MC" tag is not enough if he is in a relationship with a guy. But yeah, I'm going to give it a go. With BL, I meant those that really focus on it. I'll do it tomorrow, though. I'm going to write the reviews for the others first, and then sleep.

Okay, cool!

The Succubus and The Maverick [LitRPG]

5 Systems. 5 Royal Families. Greetings, Champion! 17 year-old, Collin Rex is a football player with a heart of gold. But his easygoing life is flipped upside-down when his older siblings fall into a mysterious coma and no one knows why. With no more tricks in their playbook Collin's parents...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[CountVampyre]

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1548321/ashen-crest-rise-of-the-soulborne/

I'm sorry, but you are out. What is this? If it is not written by AI, then I'm sorry, but the undertone is too much. Apart from this, the first three "chapters" are not chapters at all. They are just info dumps.

Example for my accusation:

Kael's eyes snapped open, his heartbeat pounding in his ears, each beat a reminder of the power locked within his Void Crest. Shadows flickered behind his closed eyelids-visions of a self lost in swirling obsidian mist, a future where the power consumed him completely.

"Focus, Kael-what do you hear?" Senn's steady, low voice broke the oppressive silence. The old mentor knelt beside him, a firm hand on Kael's shoulder anchoring him to the present.

Kael's voice trembled as he replied, "I hear a voice that knows my deepest fears. It tells me that surrender is the only path to true strength-that I must let the Void take over."

Senn's eyes, lined with years of hardship, softened slightly but remained resolute. "That voice is the echo of the Void within you. It is both a lure and a warning. You bear a tremendous power, but you must never allow it to unmoor your mind. Remember, control comes not from silencing the chaos, but by mastering it."

Kael closed his eyes once more, striving to reclaim calm as the voice persisted, more insistent now:

"Only in complete surrender will you know true strength..."

The words resonated with the raw edge of temptation, and Kael's vision blurred as the world around him melted into a chaotic tapestry of shadow and ember. Fragmented images of loss and betrayal flashed before his eyes-a montage of a soul teetering on the brink of oblivion. Desperation rattled his voice as he managed, "I will not lose who I am!"

 

[RaizellV]

I have been writing this story for the past two months (here and on RR), and I just want to see how it goes on a wider audience, since I haven't seen much feedback on Scribble Hub, so feel free to give me some much needed feedback or even a review if you'd like!
A song For The Ages | Scribble Hub
Thank you for your help!

 

[zeilo]

Hi there! I've been writing for a month myself and I would appreciate either a review or a feedback (or both!). Apart from people adding my stuff to their reading lists, I haven't really experienced human feedback in this site.

What to expect:
-Legitimate Mixed Martial Arts Techniques Used
-Grounded and Brutal Fight Choreography
-Exploration and Map Completion Focus
-Emphasis on self-acquired skills (No Isekai or System Cheat Bullshit!)

 

[Danja]

Tales of Aaliya — Book One: Origins

What happens when a mysterious woman enters Jack Thornton's life? The Marines never prepared him for THIS! A bound collection of the first three stories of this series in the order that they were written. 1. I've Got a Secret 2. Angel One 3. Meet the Parents

www.scribblehub.com

 

[yasa]

Guess I'll drop mine.

https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1404379/mockery-of-once-innocent-delusions/

 

[Rookieqw]

Thank you for your kind offer! Here is my story: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1042505/hordedoom/

Feedback and an honest review would be awesome! Don't shy away from giving me a low score; I am not as good as most authors here yet, but I want to improve.

 

[Assurbanipal_II]

I'm kinda bored, so I'm giving you the chance to get a free feedback/review for your work (grammar not included since I suck at it). Putting grammar aside, I'm a seasoned reader and have quite a bit of experience, meaning I should be able to give you some valuable pointers.



Requirements:

• 25k words max
• No GB/Yaoi/NTR or other cursed tags (GL is fine)
• No AI slop (light edits are fine, but I don't want that obvious AI undertone)

Just tell me if you want a review, or feedback. You can also pick both.

 

[Edenc2708]

I'm kinda bored, so I'm giving you the chance to get a free feedback/review for your work (grammar not included since I suck at it). Putting grammar aside, I'm a seasoned reader and have quite a bit of experience, meaning I should be able to give you some valuable pointers.



Requirements:

• 25k words max
• No GB/Yaoi/NTR or other cursed tags (GL is fine)
• No AI slop (light edits are fine, but I don't want that obvious AI undertone)

Just tell me if you want a review, or feedback. You can also pick both.

Try me sir.

Thank you so much, your feedback/review will make my day!

I Was Reincarnated Into Dice

A man is reborn as a sentient dice. A secret slumbers within him, and when it awakens, it casts everything he believed into doubt. He rolls random spells. Sometimes he heals. Sometimes he explodes. Sometimes he remembers things he shouldn’t. Bound to a girl he barely knows, haunted by...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[PageTurner]

If you have the time then check this out!

The Last Page

After losing her editing job to AI, Clara Monroe retreats to a quiet seaside town. A simple bet with a reclusive bookseller leads them both to rediscover the quiet fulfillment of finishing something that matters.

www.scribblehub.com

[4k words]
I desperately need feedback.