I found new rising star

[Deleted member 195362]

I found new novel named The adventures of Aldric by The_old_narrator.

bro the novel is fire Although there are some grammatical errors, they don't prevent me from immersing myself in the story and the world.

The power system is interesting with new concepts.

But what makes this novel interesting to me is the MC, in the chapter 1-3 i was thinking he is a boy that want to search his parent and he has a good heart but in the latest chapter we see that he far away from that, founding his parent its just a secondary goal to him.

When he first get his power named The emperor there was ability that can allow him to absorb his killed enemy power to increase his level and his first thought was to kill the one who teach him how to gain this power, And that was totally surprising thing to me as a reader.

The Adventures of Aldric

read the adventures of Aldric as he go in adventure to find his parent, on his way he will face...

www.scribblehub.com

I enjoyed the 7 chapters and i am waiting for the release of the next chapters.

 

[RepresentingWrath]

Lol.

 

[Alski]

Imagine making a second account just to comment on your own story.

 

[Deleted member 195362]

Imagine making a second account just to comment on your own story.

Is the life man ?????????

 

[Zinless]

At first, I found it a bit funny for someone to create an alt account just to support themselves.

Then I realized that's the entire plot of my novel.

 

[Justhetip...]

Is the life man ?????????

Dayum, no attempts at denial too.???

 

[Deleted member 195362]

At first, I found it a bit funny for someone to create an alt account just to support themselves.

Then I realized that's the entire plot of my novel.

Lol.

Dayum, no attempts at denial too.???

It was obvious man.?

 

[ShrimpShady]

Against my better judgment, I gave the first chapter a try. It certainly was a fascinating time. From the start, I knew I was in for a subversive masterpiece. It subverted every single storytelling convention. Even just the first line went against all pieces of conventional writing advice for a first line. Then the rest of the chapter went on to subvert how we expect dialogue to be formatted, how backstory is introduced, and it even boldly rebels against the idea of head-hopping being a bad thing. A postmodern tour de force.

 

[Deleted member 195328]

Against my better judgment, I gave the first chapter a try. It certainly was a fascinating time. From the start, I knew I was in for a subversive masterpiece. It subverted every single storytelling convention. Even just the first line went against all pieces of conventional writing advice for a first line. Then the rest of the chapter went on to subvert how we expect dialogue to be formatted, how backstory is introduced, and it even boldly rebels against the idea of head-hopping being a bad thing. A postmodern tour de force.

Thanks man, that mean a lot to me.

 

[AYM]

 

[Deleted member 195362]

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Lol.
I felt that way man.
????

 

[Seaspecter]

 

[Deleted member 195362]

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I'm not gay so the other picture actually fits me.
Lol ????

 

[Seaspecter]

I'm not gay so the other picture actually fits me.
Lol ????

But is it actually gay to check yourself out?

 

[Deleted member 195362]

But is it actually gay to check yourself out?

Bro wtf ?????

But is it actually gay to check yourself out?

This is called advertising for yourself. ?????

 

[AYM]

But is it actually gay to check yourself out?

Yes.
You heard it here, first.
Looking at yourself in the mirror is, aymdeed, a sign of Big Gae.

Ironically in this case Envy is the straightest because she doesn't have a reflection.

 

[Seaspecter]

Bro wtf ?????

This is called advertising for yourself. ?????

Just saying.

 

[Deleted member 195362]

Yes.
You heard it here, first.
Looking at yourself in the mirror is, aymdeed, a sign of Big Gae.

Ironically in this case Envy is the straightest because she doesn't have a reflection.

In fact, when you look at yourself in the mirror you are not gay, but if you feel lust towards another man, then you are gay. Isn’t that obvious
??

 

[MasterY001]

Okay, since everyone probably got all their jokes out, I'll take a sec to get real:

Promoting yourself isn't going to win you any readers. And when I tried to read your novel (which I did), I desperately tried to find some high notes. Aside from steady improvement between chapters, I got nothing.

Honest review: the plot is simplistic and unbelievable, the format is nigh-unreadable, action scenes are bland, and the dialogue is flat.

The most you'll achieve with this post is giving people a small laugh. If this was all you wanted, then more power to you. But if you really want good feedback, then for the love of God, get a spellchecker!

 

[Deleted member 195362]

Okay, since everyone probably got all their jokes out, I'll take a sec to get real:

Promoting yourself isn't going to win you any readers. And when I tried to read your novel (which I did), I desperately tried to find some high notes. Aside from steady improvement between chapters, I got nothing.

Honest review: the plot is simplistic and unbelievable, the format is nigh-unreadable, action scenes are bland, and the dialogue is flat.

The most you'll achieve with this post is giving people a small laugh. If this was all you wanted, then more power to you. But if you really want good feedback, then for the love of God, get a spellchecker!

I actually wanted some laughs because I already know where my weak points are and where I'm good so it was just for fun and thanks for reading.