Feedback wanted on my first re made creation

[Mrxwiggles]

Any tips
Feedback or just straight up bombing of the story.

all criticism is wanted just don’t be too cruel.

Story is
A vampire prison Beneath blood and shadow.

 

[unlaumy]

A vampire prison beneath blood and shadow

Three years after the collapse of global superpowers and the rise of vampires as the dominant species, humanity has been reduced to slaves and pets. In a sprawling, nightmarish mansion ruled by The Nightshade Collective—a powerful coven of high-ranking vampires—Luke and his best friend Jake toil...

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^ the link for anyone, because OP seems yet allowed to send link.

 

[ElijahRyne]

Any tips
Feedback or just straight up bombing of the story.

all criticism is wanted just don’t be too cruel.

Story is
A vampire prison Beneath blood and shadow.

You should probably @ all the vampires here, if you want accurate feedback. Also there are a couple of free feedback threads here, just make sure it’s active, follow the op’s instructions, and post the link to your story.

 

[Mrxwiggles]

You should probably @ all the vampires here, if you want accurate feedback. Also there are a couple of free feedback threads here, just make sure it’s active, follow the op’s instructions, and post the link to your story.

Thank you