Is this the right way to start a new novel.

[Deleted member 180663]

Yes this is a chapter and novel or story I have in my dreams or daydream about. So why not make it into a novel.
Novel:https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1296312/omniscient-novels-viewpoint/

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Chapter: 1:https://www.scribblehub.com/read/1296312-omniscient-novels-viewpoint/chapter/1309892/
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I want to know that is this interesting ans if there are any improvements.

This will more fun than my other novel Beyond Infinity.
Well in the terms of the starting volume.
Or volume 1.

 

[Deleted member 180663]

Yes this is a chapter and novel or story I have in my dreams or daydream about. So why not make it into a novel.
Novel:https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1296312/omniscient-novels-viewpoint/

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Chapter: 1:https://www.scribblehub.com/read/1296312-omniscient-novels-viewpoint/chapter/1309892/
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I want to know that is this interesting ans if there are any improvements.

This will more fun than my other novel Beyond Infinity.
Well in the terms of the starting volume.
Or volume 1.

But no one came so that's another one of my novel getting scrapped.

 

[Tatsuo]

How about writing a grimdark fantasy world? Would not it be more interesting?
Like a pair of rogue adventures
Here is a illustration

The one on the left could be a knife thrower.

adventures

Adventurers

 

[Deleted member 180663]

How about writing a grimdark fantasy world? Would not it be more interesting?
Like a pair of rogue adventures
Here is a illustration
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No. I assume you read the chapter so here's the thing.
The reader possessed the villain while the author possessed the protagonist and the protagonist possessed the illustrator in the modern world.

Lets think it more carefully, if you possessed your favorite novel and you become the villain of that novel.
You died while learning about the author's death who was your best freind.
While the author possessed the protagonist and has lost many things in his life and has no emotions left.
The protagonist is well is selfless and will do anything to stop evil, he is in the modern world. Yoi can guess how it will go.

While the system restricts them to speak and it is merged with a game world.

 

[Tatsuo]

No. I assume you read the chapter so here's the thing.
The reader possessed the villain while the author possessed the protagonist and the protagonist possessed the illustrator in the modern world.

Lets think it more carefully, if you possessed your favorite novel and you become the villain of that novel.
You died while learning about the author's death who was your best freind.
While the author possessed the protagonist and has lost many things in his life and has no emotions left.
The protagonist is well is selfless and will do anything to stop evil, he is in the modern world. Yoi can guess how it will go.

While the system restricts them to speak and it is merged with a game world.

ok

 

[CharlesEBrown]

Sounds a little like the direction Land of Laughs would have gone if it had a sequel (perhaps mercifully, it did not).
One of the coolest concepts for a novel I've seen - a promising writer is given a chance to write in the home of his personal hero, with an annual stipend, as long as he produces a set number of words a month. No restrictions. Only he finds the people in the town all somehow resemble the characters the hero, an author who died a decade earlier, wrote about, in kind of a darker version of "Oz" - and then finds out that the hero had the ability to make what he wrote come true, and the people in the town want him to continue their stories, and expand them, since they ARE the people from his "Land of Laughs"...
When they finally decide to force the issue and kill his girlfriend to prove he can even bring the dead back, he instead flees. They send assassins out to either kill him or bring him back...
But he's started a new story... a biography of the parents he never knew, parents who died exiting Viet Nam, after decades in military intelligence (where they met)... and their paid thugs cannot best a trained operative...