Astronomy themed

[Deleted member 180663]

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[CharlesEBrown]

I used to know a lot about space but have forgotten most of it due to disuse over the decades.

And there is ALWAYS room for improvement, for anyone. Always.

 

[Deleted member 172779]

I don't know anything about Space. Other than SpaceX Dragon Crew, SpaceX Starship launch, SLS, Space Shuttle, and Apollo 15. And few things about the moon, that actually have a gravitational pull so the oceans will wave. Mars? I only knew few rovers like; Curiosity, Opportunity, and Spirit; few things about mars have frozen water found in the craters.

International Space Station? That thing will be brought down to earth in 2030, since its already confirmed by NASA. Either way, they also planned to make a tourist traction by creating another Space Station.

Voyager 1 will lost connection by 2027, due to its nuclear fuel source depleted. I mean, its a 40 year old Space Craft that is still functional until today, the Spacecraft that is the oldest and oldest, still being active.

 

[Astrolust]

I used to know a lot about space but have forgotten most of it due to disuse over the decades.

And there is ALWAYS room for improvement, for anyone. Always.

Chuck you're a hot mess. Get it together buddy.

 

[Hans.Trondheim]

I am looking for reviews for my novels.
Any review will a appreciated.
I won't mind if it contains criticism or harsh in any way.
I am just looking ways to improve ok.

Novel:Chronicles of the cosmic paradox
Chapter 0:Twisted thoughts
Latest Chapter which is chapter 4 part 3:K.E.A.

If you post a review I'll be thankful.

What exactly do you want to know about your work?

Been reading it right now, though if you won't give me 'points' on where to look, it'll be difficult for me to give you a useful feedback. And I won't comment on the pacing, the narrative style and the events unless it was asked from me. I prefer to leave the writer to how he/she presents the novel.

 

[Deleted member 180663]

What exactly do you want to know about your work?

Been reading it right now, though if you won't give me 'points' on where to look, it'll be difficult for me to give you a useful feedback. And I won't comment on the pacing, the narrative style and the events unless it was asked from me. I prefer to leave the writer to how he/she presents the novel.

The style. The narrative. The amount of emotions it convey. If it makes you confused. If the writing is good. Dose make you read more?.
And finally is it complex and make you think what the hell is going on.

 

[Hans.Trondheim]

The style.

The style? I'd say it's fine. Quite wordy, but I get why you write this way. I cannot say the same for other, 'aggressive', readers. Sometimes prosey, which kinda takes away the immersion.

The narrative.

Narrative is also fine, though it can get confusing, especially to readers who want to immediately know what's going to happen and what are they reading about.

As for me, I just continued reading and formed my own ideas on what's happening, which turned out correct for most of the time.

I'd just request not to give readers obvious hints like: "this part is gory", in the middle of the chapter. If anything, warn them before the first paragraph. My reason is, it takes away the immersion.

The amount of emotions it convey.

I think this is the part where you excel. The tension, the heaviness of the situation is properly depicted, and felt by the reader.

If it makes you confused.

Some parts, yes, especially those game-like stuff. But most of the time, my questions are answered once I got deep into the chapters.

If the writing is good.

I'd say it is good.

Dose make you read more?.

I'll be honest, not my cup of tea. I only read because you're asking for feedback for days now.

And finally is it complex and make you think what the hell is going on.

Aye, story is complex, and it can get confusing. However, you have the knack to show seemingly unconnected stuff in one chapter, and bring it together in the next, which is also related to your writing style.

Edit: I'll add something about chapter length. See, some readers are quite fussy when it comes to chapter length, and they quickly turn away once they see long-ass chapters and walls of text (refer to my wordy comment above). Trust me, I know. My own work's chapters are 4k words long per chapter.

Average web novel reader can only do 1k-2k before boredom sets in.

 

[Deleted member 180663]

The style? I'd say it's fine. Quite wordy, but I get why you write this way. I cannot say the same for other, 'aggressive', readers. Sometimes prosey, which kinda takes away the immersion.


Narrative is also fine, though it can get confusing, especially to readers who want to immediately know what's going to happen and what are they reading about.

As for me, I just continued reading and formed my own ideas on what's happening, which turned out correct for most of the time.

I'd just request not to give readers obvious hints like: "this part is gory", in the middle of the chapter. If anything, warn them before the first paragraph. My reason is, it takes away the immersion.

I think this is the part where you excel. The tension, the heaviness of the situation is properly depicted, and felt by the reader.


Some parts, yes, especially those game-like stuff. But most of the time, my questions are answered once I got deep into the chapters.


I'd say it is good.


I'll be honest, not my cup of tea. I only read because you're asking for feedback for days now.


Aye, story is complex, and it can get confusing. However, you have the knack to show seemingly unconnected stuff in one chapter, and bring it together in the next, which is also related to your writing style.

Edit: I'll add something about chapter length. See, some readers are quite fussy when it comes to chapter length, and they quickly turn away once they see long-ass chapters. Trust me, I know. My own work's chapters are 4k words long per chapter.

Average web novel reader can only do 1k-2k.

Well i only add long chapter because its pain and i write on mobile so it takes more folders. And i am most of the time sleep deprived which is why i don't know what the hell i write.

I'll be honest, not my cup of tea. I only read because you're asking for feedback for days now.

Nice!And thanks for reading.
For the days part I'll stop because its a pain to write all of this.

 

[John_Owl]

Why does it seem that posting feedback threads to the feedback-specific forum has fallen out of favor?

 

[Deleted member 180663]

Why does it seem that posting feedback threads to the feedback-specific forum has fallen out of favor?

Idk, i just created a account a weak ago.

 

[John_Owl]

Idk, i just created a account a weak ago.

oh, it's nothing against you specifically. I've recently seen an uptick in people posting for feedback in every forum except the designated feedback one. It's just a bit off-putting at times.

What I'd recommend though is adding links to your signature then interacting with existing threads or posting for feedback in the forum labeled "Story Feedback". helps keep things organized ?

 

[Deleted member 180663]

oh, it's nothing against you specifically. I've recently seen an uptick in people posting for feedback in every forum except the designated feedback one. It's just a bit off-putting at times.

What I'd recommend though is adding links to your signature then interacting with existing threads or posting for feedback in the forum labeled "Story Feedback". helps keep things organized ?

Okay.