Check out my work, Please! Just the prologue!

[Iwriteforfun]

So basically, I am not confident that my writing quality is good enough, so please tell me if my work reads well or not.
Also tell me if it is intriguing enough for a prologue.
Depending on the responses, I will continue posting more chapters by utilising valuable feedback.

The Endless Ascent

Alan is a nobody. A forgotten face in a world that barely noticed him. After a two-year stint in prison, he finds himself thrust into the Tower Endless, a brutal other world where he faces monstrous beasts. It's a chance to prove himself, to escape the life he's always known,...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[CharlesEBrown]

Get a "Page was taken by aliens" message. Makes it a bit tough to critique without access to time travel technology (unfortunately they refuse to give back my dematerialization circuit due to too much meddling... interfering SOBs...)

 

[ConansWitchBaby]

Can't see anything.

I should use the snip feature more often. This was smooth.
Don't get cold feet! Most of us have panic attacks posting our first story!

 

[Nolff]

So basically, I am not confident that my writing quality is good enough, so please tell me if my work reads well or not.
Also tell me if it is intriguing enough for a prologue.
Depending on the responses, I will continue posting more chapters by utilising valuable feedback.

The Endless Ascent

A convicted criminal, exiled to the Tower Endless, has to battle otherworldly beasts to survive. But what awaits him at the summit? Only one way to find out, to reach it!

www.scribblehub.com

You want some feedback, right?

Take mine with a grain of salt.

...

Where the f*ck is it?

 

[Nolff]

No like, seriously, I really am curious.

What kind of sorcery did you use??

I know several spells in this terrifying land of Scribble Hub, albeit some are mind-boggling, but I never see one that acts like an anti-memetic hazard.

 

[WinterTimeCrime]

I'm pretty sure everyone that clicked that link was just hacked.

 

[Iwriteforfun]

Guys! I know I am a dumb****, I ported it to another account, just wanted to write without a pen name
I know you all eagerly want to read a masterpiece (Yeah, I know a bad joke or two)

The Endless Ascent

Alan is a nobody. A forgotten face in a world that barely noticed him. After a two-year stint in prison, he finds himself thrust into the Tower Endless, a brutal other world where he faces monstrous beasts. It's a chance to prove himself, to escape the life he's always known,...

www.scribblehub.com

There are two chapters now. On the second chapter, I tried to use more natural English and flow and made sure the dialogue had character in it (Like you can recognise the person based on dialogue) So check that out too!.
Please roast the living **** out of me.

I'm pretty sure everyone that clicked that link was just hacked.

No like, seriously, I really am curious.

What kind of sorcery did you use??

I know several spells in this terrifying land of Scribble Hub, albeit some are mind-boggling, but I never see one that acts like an anti-memetic hazard.

You want some feedback, right?

Take mine with a grain of salt.

...

Where the f*ck is it?

View attachment 31263
Can't see anything.

I should use the snip feature more often. This was smooth.
Don't get cold feet! Most of us have panic attacks posting our first story!

Get a "Page was taken by aliens" message. Makes it a bit tough to critique without access to time travel technology (unfortunately they refuse to give back my dematerialization circuit due to too much meddling... interfering SOBs...)

 

[Nolff]

Guys! I know I am a dumb****, I ported it to another account, just wanted to write without a pen name
I know you all eagerly want to read a masterpiece (Yeah, I know a bad joke or two)

The Endless Ascent

Alan is a nobody. A forgotten face in a world that barely noticed him. After a two-year stint in prison, he finds himself thrust into the Tower Endless, a brutal other world where he faces monstrous beasts. It's a chance to prove himself, to escape the life he's always known,...

www.scribblehub.com

There are two chapters now. On the second chapter, I tried to use more natural English and flow and made sure the dialogue had character in it (Like you can recognise the person based on dialogue) So check that out too!.
Please roast the living **** out of me.

You goddamn right.

 

[Iwriteforfun]

You goddamn right.

Right about what? It being a masterpiece? I know, thank you!

 

[Nolff]

Right about what? It being a masterpiece? I know, thank you!

...

I take it back,

Right about what? It being a masterpiece? I know, thank you!

Left some comments on your story. Do check, it might help you.

 

[ConansWitchBaby]

As a webnovel: short and above average.

As a regular story: short and average.

The prologue is great. Gets what needs to be done and doesn't overstay its welcome.