The Hive 2.0(Free Feedback Thread)

[Glitched]

Welcome to The Hive
The Swarm Gives Its Greeting.​

I'm your resident Moth Mommy, Glitched, and I'm rather bored(again). The hive is filled with nothing but corpses and my insect children, so I figured I'd fill it with something entertaining to pass the time.

That's right, books! Your books. I'm giving you, the dirt beneath my feet, a chnace to prove yourself! Yay for you!

Send me a story and I'll read it until I feel like stopping. However, I will read at least a minimum of 7.5k words or 5 chapters, whichever comes first. Then I'll leave a short review with a ___ out of 10 star rating and then tell you why. Contrary to my other buried thread, I don't plan on toning my negativity down. This will be very, very brutal. Think of it as me grading your work against NY Bestsellers. If I read garbage, I am literally going to tell you its garbage and some more. That being said, I will more than likely give more helpful feedback the more displeased I am. All reviews will be dm'ed, unless you have the confidence or want to take a risk and let the public see it.

My only limits are BL and Harems, but everything else is acceptable. I just want to point out that Litrpgs are welcomed, but they will be rated on an even higher grading then normal. Mainly because I: Hate the genre, think that its overused, and most importantly, adds nothing to the story. I think the genre sounds good in practice, but more often then not it's used as a writing crutch. So I'd gladly give feedback, because there are barely any good litrpgs, even amongst the popular ones.

So, send me your stories! But be careful, if you know you can't stand getting stung then don't enter the hive. I cannot wait to see what you mortals have prepared for my lair....and my garbage disposal.

- Sincerely, Glitched

 

[greyblob]

another harem denier

 

[LoneQuack]

As long as your feedback helps me improve as a writer I'm all for it. Hope you like it or at least don't find it complete garbage. Also (although that might be self explanatory) If I have any question about your feedback I can dm you right?

Thread of Fate

Fate is a funny word. People love to play with its meaning and its applications. Some call it destiny, others call it inevitable, and a few tend to accompany it with worlds that give it direction. ‘Thread of Fate’ – ah, if fate were a thread, what would that mean? What...

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[Kureous]

First time being early to one of these . My story is in my signature (It's LitRPG)

 

[xuduxixi]

I have my flesh ready, go ahead.

I Became A Starter Beast

They say that life can suddenly turn interesting. For me that's true, of course it would if you got hit by a truck and just as you think that it's the end, you found yourself woken up in an unfamiliar place. I got reincarnated. Period. However, not in a way...

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[Rookieqw]

Thank you for your kind offer! Here is my story: https://www.scribblehub.com/read/1042505-hordedoom/chapter/1050298/

 

[RiaCorvidiva]

I will submit my story for your consideration: https://www.scribblehub.com/series/1037559/godslayer-lysette/

 

[KoyukiMegumi]

Oh, another! There are so many feedback threads! Hahah! Thank you for your time, friend!


The Shadows Within

Or

The Gate of Shadows

 

[AdOtherwise]

Welcome to The Hive
The Swarm Gives Its Greeting.​

I'm your resident Moth Mommy, Glitched, and I'm rather bored(again). The hive is filled with nothing but corpses and my insect children, so I figured I'd fill it with something entertaining to pass the time.

That's right, books! Your books. I'm giving you, the dirt beneath my feet, a chnace to prove yourself! Yay for you!

Send me a story and I'll read it until I feel like stopping. However, I will read at least a minimum of 7.5k words or 5 chapters, whichever comes first. Then I'll leave a short review with a ___ out of 10 star rating and then tell you why. Contrary to my other buried thread, I don't plan on toning my negativity down. This will be very, very brutal. Think of it as me grading your work against NY Bestsellers. If I read garbage, I am literally going to tell you its garbage and some more. That being said, I will more than likely give more helpful feedback the more displeased I am. All reviews will be dm'ed, unless you have the confidence or want to take a risk and let the public see it.

My only limits are BL and Harems, but everything else is acceptable. I just want to point out that Litrpgs are welcomed, but they will be rated on an even higher grading then normal. Mainly because I: Hate the genre, think that its overused, and most importantly, adds nothing to the story. I think the genre sounds good in practice, but more often then not it's used as a writing crutch. So I'd gladly give feedback, because there are barely any good litrpgs, even amongst the popular ones.

So, send me your stories! But be careful, if you know you can't stand getting stung then don't enter the hive. I cannot wait to see what you mortals have prepared for my lair....and my garbage disposal.

- Sincerely, Glitched

Lowly Ascent

Within a desolate realm, where discarded worlds were stitched together, a rupture tore open, releasing a small child into the fragmented expanse. Above him, the sky revealed three eerie moons, while an ominous black mass loomed ominously in their wake. Disoriented and engulfed by a putrid...

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[Glitched]

another harem denier

Yes I am. Not trying to read about perfectly average John pulling a cat girl, elf, and dragon in the same day who are all ok with Mc and the fact he has multiple wives because the plot normalizes polygamy. Not that it's wrong, but it's 100% unrealistic even if they are slaves.

 

[RepresentingCaution]

You can look at mine, but you must give it a 1-star review because it is reverse harem.

Kaiba’s Prostitute

When CEO Seto Kaiba propositions Joan, she expects a one-night stand, but he and his brother keep coming back for more. Now the Kaiba brothers want an heir from her and will pay any price to get it. How do Joan’s husband and boyfriend feel about her new profession?...

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[Glitched]

As long as your feedback helps me improve as a writer I'm all for it. Hope you like it or at least don't find it complete garbage. Also (although that might be self explanatory) If I have any question about your feedback I can dm you right?

Thread of Fate

Fate is a funny word. People love to play with its meaning and its applications. Some call it destiny, others call it inevitable, and a few tend to accompany it with worlds that give it direction. ‘Thread of Fate’ – ah, if fate were a thread, what would that mean? What...

www.scribblehub.com

Whoooo boy, that was a read. Sent.

 

[Verdant]

As of now, I am currently Re-Re editing my novel. Several days ago, someone mentioned how inconsistent my tense usage was. As of now, I am fixing that but after chapter 5 and before 14, there are still tense mistakes.

Aperol Spritz [HIATUS]

In the year 1846, humans made a deal with 4th dimensional beings to leave a dying and polluting earth by teleporting to an aquatic exo-planet named Portunus. Vast blue oceans with little land, blue grass, and life-killing robots that generate from the planet’s atmosphere is a constant. Luckily...

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[PBJ_Time]

Thank you in advance! I've been working on Google Docs draft after months of writing fanfics I didn't even enjoy on Wattpad and AO3. If you're into litRPGs, you might take interest in this since it doesn't really follow the same mechanics as other stories. It's more inspired by roguelikes like Vampire Survivors.

Beware the Horde

Synopsis Too raw to live, too far to die. Hajime expected the usual things upon being reborn into another world: dragons, magic, a skill system, or maybe even some “chosen hero” prophecy. Instead, he gets an open field and a million slimes surrounding him at every corner. Once the slimes ...

docs.google.com

 

[Glitched]

First time being early to one of these . My story is in my signature (It's LitRPG)

Oh boy. Cliches make me tick. Done.