Why do you think it's bad?
Sorry for taking too long to answer. Firstly, it's because all my other works are of poor quality. No matter if I always try to finish my stories, if the number of readers is low, it means that my writing is bad. It is an objective fact, but I struggle to put a finger on why it is bad. To me, the story is interesting; I am not bored with editing and proofreading it to the best of my abilities, and I am having fun writing it. But if I want to write for others, if I want to write a good story, I have to change.
From this thread alone, I now know that I screwed up by not explaining what the character looks like. There are problems with redundancy, and it is boring. It's no wonder readers don't read it. The story is objectively one of the worst on this site, but there is no harm in seeing it through to the end.
Nevertheless, I find the content to be generic, sorry for phrasing it like this.
Don't worry about it! It's much worse to hear that everything will be fine if you just believe in yourself and keep writing when you know it's not fine and are looking for answers to what exactly is wrong. There are dumb people, I am one, and the truth can help us improve. Or at least stop the agony of not knowing where you mess up.
Writing. Not the problem.
Asinine and rambling plot. Yes. Too much narration. Not enough personalisation.
Who is the MC? What is the point here? Who are the characters?
In the prologue, the MC recalls her attempt to escape the laboratory where she was created. Whitecoats are the researchers, and Orange Fiends are the guards. The MC calls them that because that is how she and the other products see them. The point of the prologue is to show why exactly Ravager (the MC of the prologue) screwed up the Wolf Tribe so much, to introduce the concept of superpowers, to explain why Ravager is not fully sane, and to give the barest explanation for Ravager's sudden flashes of quick understanding
So. Less narration, more plot, start with dialog, show what the characters look like. I hope I got it right.
Redundancy, perhaps?
I look for immediate and constant entertainment when reading a web novel, so the way you write makes me lose interest quite fast.
That is harder to understand. I do not doubt that you are correct, but for me, it is hard to spot such things. How do I train myself to spot redundancy?
