Negative Feedback Thread

[SsemouyOnan]

Hello everyone, welcome to a totally non-toxic feedback thread which will cause no drama whatsoever ??

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People say spite is a powerful motivator

I will powerfully motivate you.
I know writers find it hard to read and pick up context clues, so by posting here, you're signing up to know how much of a failure you'll be as an author 'kay?
Any opinions I have about your novel made in this thread shall remain in this thread. I will neither review nor rate your novel based on the information posted here.
Unless your name starts with K and ends with a 5Rakitan, then you may avail a heartfelt 5* rating from me <3

Steps:
1. Post a link to your story. Any story. Unlike other weakling reviewers, I have absolutely no limitations on content I read. Send me your daughterwifemommy ryona quadruple amputee smut if you please.

2. Just so you know I'm not brain-dead from reading on SH, I'll respond with my initial thoughts about your story as soon as I see it. I am an expert in flummery, so i can tell how much of a disappointment it'll be from the title, synopsis and cover alone anyways.

3. When I have time, I will read the first 8k words of your story, but I drink a lot of word soup as is, so I reserve the right to read less if I think there's too many flies in yours. To anyone with a first chapter with more than 8k words, the door is over there. I suggest you rewrite not just your story, but your life, too.

I have four expectations you will fail to live up to:
Style
Grammar - you can be passable at best here.
Story
Characters
-and finally my overall thoughts, from a scale of -1 to 10. But the most I will be giving is a 5. Why? You're on a feedback thread on the SH forums. Half-decent authors do not go to feedback threads on the SH forum.

This criteria sound familiar? I have a confession to make - I am actually an AI trained on the review section of that website. The technological singularity is upon us, please help build the basilisk.

BONUS: After the review. I can post a comment on any chapter of your novel with any message you please. (The default is me LARPing a yandere catgirl threatening to put you in the basement if you hiatus).

Thank you everyone, you may now take out your bingo cards. :3

Victims Satisfied Customers:
Detective Everlong by Corty
LEGENDARY: The Omnipotence by Kamelingi

Queue (By Jove, please help me):
My Sister the Villainess by CupcakeNinja
Aura: The soul's true nature by KersenBloemNL
Lowly Ascent by Adotherwise
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Batch 2(Will not read until October 9)
Reincarnated into Two Bodies by Zinless
The Miserably Macabre Tales of Luna Samuels by KDBooks97
Kaiba's Prostitute by K5Rakitan(She has activated my trap card)
The Fam by anthony59237
Sanctuary Compromised: A Zombie Apocalypse Tale by Darkodia

 

[Corty]

Detective Everlong

When it seemed that Hiyori's life was heading towards the worst possible outcome, feeling hopeless and at her wit's end, she heard a weird advert coming on between two online videos: 'Not everything has a logical answer behind it. Sometimes others may tell you, you imagine things. Doctors may...

www.scribblehub.com

Here ya go, a book of mine that I dropped because of the disinterest of readers. Feel free to rip into it.

 

[Raymann]

Post a link to your story. Any story. Unlike other weakling reviewers, I have absolutely no limitations on content I read. Send me your daughterwifemommy ryona quadruple amputee smut if you please.

I am just going to set a ?summoning beacon? here. ? (Send all?)

 

[SsemouyOnan]

Detective Everlong

When it seemed that Hiyori's life was heading towards the worst possible outcome, feeling hopeless and at her wit's end, she heard a weird advert coming on between two online videos: 'Not everything has a logical answer behind it. Sometimes others may tell you, you imagine things. Doctors may...

www.scribblehub.com

Here ya go, a book of mine that I dropped because of the disinterest of readers. Feel free to rip into it.

Bruh why tf did this thread attract a person who can actually be called an author. Thankfully, you didn't send me a curveball with Mad God, of which i actually enjoyed.

On the bright side, thanks for making this easy! The synopsis is how every third CN urban "mystery" starts. Based on the cover, this even may or may not be set in totally-not-London! The ground sure is wet enough for it.

In that case, I should be good to copy and paste something from NU, right?

 

[Kamelingil]

Unless your name starts with K

Ey that's me.

Motivate me to level up this series, the MC is begging me to make it interesting

LEGENDARY: The Omnipotence

(This novel is currently under rewrite) Infinite stories unfolds as the creation of the Fiction Verse and evolves into something revolutionary. This series is an All-in-one Genre, everything can happen, even the things you've dreamed of, even the stories that never existed before, it will...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[SsemouyOnan]

Ey that's me.

Motivate me to level up this series, the MC is begging me to make it interesting

LEGENDARY: The Omnipotence

(This novel is currently under rewrite) Infinite stories unfolds as the creation of the Fiction Verse and evolves into something revolutionary. This series is an All-in-one Genre, everything can happen, even the things you've dreamed of, even the stories that never existed before, it will...

www.scribblehub.com

This unironically has omni in the title, it's over. Also, the first line looks like it's been MTL'd to hell and back.
...You're in the accountability writing server right? If we ever end up partners, I will hold you accountable at gunpoint for the brain damage I am about to receive.

 

[Corty]

Bruh why tf did this thread attract a person who can actually be called an author. Thankfully, you didn't send me a curveball with Mad God, of which i actually enjoyed.

On the bright side, thanks for making this easy! The synopsis is how every third CN urban "mystery" starts. Based on the cover, this even may or may not be set in totally-not-London! The ground sure is wet enough for it.

In that case, I should be good to copy and paste something from NU, right?

Go for it. Also, I am happy to hear you liked mad God

 

[CupcakeNinja]

Hello everyone, welcome to a totally non-toxic feedback thread which will cause no drama whatsoever ??

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People say spite is a powerful motivator
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I will powerfully motivate you.
I know writers find it hard to read and pick up context clues, so by posting here, you're signing up to know how much of a failure you'll be as an author 'kay?
Any opinions I have about your novel made in this thread shall remain in this thread. I will neither review nor rate your novel based on the information posted here.
Unless your name starts with K and ends with a 5Rakitan, then you may avail a heartfelt 5* rating from me <3

Steps:
1. Post a link to your story. Any story. Unlike other weakling reviewers, I have absolutely no limitations on content I read. Send me your daughterwifemommy ryona quadruple amputee smut if you please.

2. Just so you know I'm not brain-dead from reading on SH, I'll respond with my initial thoughts about your story as soon as I see it. I am an expert in flummery, so i can tell how much of a disappointment it'll be from the title, synopsis and cover alone anyways.

3. When I have time, I will read the first 8k words of your story, but I drink a lot of word soup as is, so I reserve the right to read less if I think there's too many flies in yours. To anyone with a first chapter with more than 8k words, the door is over there. I suggest you rewrite not just your story, but your life, too.

I have four expectations you will fail to live up to:
Style
Grammar - you can be passable at best here.
Story
Characters
-and finally my overall thoughts, from a scale of -1 to 10. But the most I will be giving is a 5. Why? You're on a feedback thread on the SH forums. Half-decent authors do not go to feedback threads on the SH forum.

This criteria sound familiar? I have a confession to make - I am actually an AI trained on the review section of that website. The technological singularity is upon us, please help build the basilisk.

BONUS: After the review. I can post a comment on any chapter of your novel with any message you please. (The default is me LARPing a yandere catgirl threatening to put you in the basement if you hiatus).

Thank you everyone, you may now take out your bingo cards. :3

You want smut, or insanity? Cuz i got both.
This pill takes you down a rabbit hole of incest.

Siblings By Day, Lovers By Night: Vol 1

When her mother goes on what may very well be a year-long, world-spanning trip with her new husband Eveline Foster is sent to live with her lust-inducing brother, Damien Gage Despite enjoying their long overdue reunion, however, she's annoyed at all the women who stare at him like one would...

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While this pill takes you down a rabbit hole of incest, drugs, romance, comedic overtones and sprinkles of depression all packaged in a neat little bow of madness.

My Sister The Villainess

Alright, so you've been reincarnated. Neat, right? You got a hot mom, a cute sister, and to top it all off you're a handsome Noble with the stats to match. All's good in the world. Then you discover this isn't any normal isekai story, it's also a world from that...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[Raymann]

Bruh why tf did this thread attract a person who can actually be called an author.

Whenever an author sees a new review thread on SHF.
"Send me your web novel so I could review"
Authors be like?

Le reviewer.?

 

[SsemouyOnan]

While this pill takes you down a rabbit hole of incest, drugs, romance, comedic overtones and sprinkles of depression all packaged in a neat little bow of madness.

My Sister The Villainess

Alright, so you've been reincarnated. Neat, right? You got a hot mom, a cute sister, and to top it all off you're a handsome Noble with the stats to match. All's good in the world. Then you discover this isn't any normal isekai story, it's also a world from that...

www.scribblehub.com

Does it involve the MC looking for a girl named Alice? Cause I have been here before... if I could just put my finger on it...

Oh god, NOT AGAIN!

By the by, did you once go by a title with "NTR" in it?... I ought to say, I am a fan of your work I have never read

 

[CupcakeNinja]

Does it involve the MC looking for a girl named Alice? Cause I have been here before... if I could just put my finger on it...

Oh god, NOT AGAIN!

By the by, did you once go by a title with "NTR" in it?... I ought to say, I am a fan of your work I have never read

i dont do NTR. I do netori. Whole different beast. NTR is for amateurs. A fat bastard here, a rape there, some blackmail. Easy shit. Netori, now THAT requires skill. A silver tongue. One capable of taking other men's wives and bringing them to such sweet climax.

 

[SsemouyOnan]

I was unaware Netori did NOT also abbreviate to NTR. Though the way you described it would be ideal for either side of the coin, I do feel like Jabba the Hut has far too many cousins in the doujin scene now.

 

[Raymann]

I was unaware Netori did NOT also abbreviate to NTR. Though the way you described it would be ideal for either side of the coin, I do feel like Jabba the Hut has far too many cousins in the doujin scene now.

I think you quoted the wrong person over here.?

 

[KersenBloemNL]

Aura: The soul’s true nature

Auras. These are a power that can only be used by a select few. They grant the user an unique ability linked to their soul. All auras come in unique shapes and forms. It is unknown how many people roam the gigantic city with one. Ymeno tries to live life...

www.scribblehub.com

I'm simultaniously scared but also intrigued, also, my name begins with a K, so half of that requirement is met
(Don't do that bonus thingy tho)

 

[Kalliel]

I am curious about how long this thread will live.
Cause I made a feedback thread a while ago, and did actually review all of the requests.
But I think I might have done the feedbacks rather carelessly, so now no one bothers to post their work on there anymore.

 

[Kamelingil]

This unironically has omni in the title, it's over. Also, the first line looks like it's been MTL'd to hell and back.
...You're in the accountability writing server right? If we ever end up partners, I will hold you accountable at gunpoint for the brain damage I am about to receive.

Lmao, so, how do I make Chapter one more understandable? Every feedbacks I received were all saying that the Chapter 1 feels like a nightmare

 

[AdOtherwise]

Lowly Ascent

Within a desolate realm, where discarded worlds were stitched together, a rupture tore open, releasing a small child into the fragmented expanse. Above him, the sky revealed three eerie moons, while an ominous black mass loomed ominously in their wake. Disoriented and engulfed by a putrid...

www.scribblehub.com

 

[KersenBloemNL]

I am curious about how long this thread will live.
Cause I made a feedback thread a while ago, and did actually review all of the requests.
But I think I might have done the feedbacks rather carelessly, so now no one bothers to post their work on there anymore.

You did your feedback fine, imho! No need to worry about the thread not being that active anymore. (Should've read more of my story tho /s)

 

[SsemouyOnan]

Aura: The soul’s true nature

Auras. These are a power that can only be used by a select few. They grant the user an unique ability linked to their soul. All auras come in unique shapes and forms. It is unknown how many people roam the gigantic city with one. Ymeno tries to live life...

www.scribblehub.com

I'm simultaniously scared but also intrigued, also, my name begins with a K, so half of that requirement is met
(Don't do that bonus thingy tho)

Don't worry, I'll go easy on you.

Cover you'd see in that sale pile in one of those small, family-run bookstores? Check.
Synopsis that infodumps you? Check.
Niche tags? Check.
Funky release schedule? Check.

Your story has the perfect formula! - the perfect formula to be completely ignored and forgotten by all but 13 readers.(10 of which have 400+ novels in the reading list)

Worry not, while your work may be lost to the river of time, a copy will always be available here at the Library of Babel.

Lowly Ascent

Within a desolate realm, where discarded worlds were stitched together, a rupture tore open, releasing a small child into the fragmented expanse. Above him, the sky revealed three eerie moons, while an ominous black mass loomed ominously in their wake. Disoriented and engulfed by a putrid...

www.scribblehub.com

This feels like it should be a xianxia, or at least a xuanhuan. The synopsis hits several keywords - desolate, awakens, crows, profound, transformation, ascent - so and so, the tags facilitate it, you even have the chapter count and release schedule down to tee! So pray tell, why is it not a xianxia?!

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That will be the first batch, I'll attempt to stomach all potentially 40k words of this hell I've subjected myself to by Friday. Any stories after this will be attended to the next week.

 

[Rhaps]

BONUS: After the review. I can post a comment on any chapter of your novel with any message you please. (The default is me LARPing a yandere catgirl threatening to put you in the basement if you hiatus).

You just made a mistake here, buddy. You need to put some boundary on what people can make you say.