To write a narcissist character with personality

[Whitephantom]

To get to the needy greedy, im writing a pretty narcy character who's female, sadly for me i never met one (i think) and cant really grasp a way one who is a narcy would reply to everyday people if that makes sense. So basically i can write the background, but not the dialogue between the narcy and another to be fluid. Just need some suggestions on how to tackle this brain scrambler.


Heres the part im stuck on vocalizing having the main goal here to be a introduction on the character (Alexsis) show her personality
"
Raiza) “ Hey, how's ya doing? Anything hurt? Are you in any pain?”


His words were spoken in a calm and patient tone, contrasting with his usual boisterous nature. The group was taken aback by the unfamiliar sound of Raiza's voice, so different from his usual masculine tone. It reverberated with a femininity that felt out of place, leaving them unsettled just a tad.


(Righteous) "I'm fine, really! But how about you, Mother? It's clear that Soror did an exceptional job... Thank you, Soror," she expressed with compassion, bowing slightly. Soror couldn't help but smugly smile at the recognition he received from Righteous for his handiwork. Regina, however, couldn't conceal her jealousy, resenting that Soror had received praise before her in Righteous's eyes. Righteous's voice quivered with a mixture of exhaustion and suppressed sadness as she struggled to maintain her composure. Her weary eyes, once filled with vibrant energy, now carried the weight of her fatigue. The room fell silent, the air heavy with unspoken concern.


Regina, although the mood is sour her urgency in proving her worth was more then what Righteous know was needed to be proven, so she spoke her mind on the ordeal, wearing a veil of competition on her face.


(Regina) " Hey!! Don't leave me out of the picture! I was helping him with keeping mother's soul intact so that it wont break!


(Soror)" Humph, you left out Arenea! She helped me get the tools necessary to fix mother!" Soror snapped back. Regina growled lowly as her face contorted in anger knowing he was right for once.


(Arenea) "We-well-" Before she could even get her words out Alexsis beat her to the punch


(Alexsis) " Guys! Shut UP!! Your bickering over who saved mother is not of any importance here!"


(Heathien) "Right now none of you all should have ever even thought about such inferior motives, Regina! Heathien's words were stern, his voice low and commanding. "We were all working together to save Mother, not to prove ourselves. Have some humility and gratitude for the fact that we were able to save her."


Heathien gives a look towards Regina as if looking at a dog. But so does Regina back at both Alexsis and Heathien. Alexsis with a proud, condescending tone talked down on the four, mainly for her pleasure of looking down on Arenea for her own fun


(Alexsis)" You all shouldn't even be glad to boast about your achievements, specially you Regina, is it that you're trying to make mother your step stool to your ever growing pride? You even forgot that Arenea was there with you~" She said as a smile formed, not too big, not too little. Just a simple smile.


Regina scowled at it. It held pride bigger then what she was letting on"

(This is still in the editing stage too btw) To add more context behind whats happening, Raiza had a little accident almost dying in a big fight, being saved by his children, Soror, Regina, Righteous and Arenea mainly. Alexsis and Arenea has a older-younger sister type of relationship and id want to add Alexsis narcasstic personality hinting towards that relationship in the series. So like this is pretty much a character set up and a character dynamic set up too i guess. Just confused on how to and what to add dialogue wise for a narcy

 

[AnonUnlimited]

Narcissists are very manipulative. Try watching mean girls

 

[georgelee5786]

Narcissists are very manipulative. Try watching mean girls

I was thinking women in general/s

 

[RepresentingWrath]

Watch Heard vs Depp trial.

 

[Deleted member 84247]

Watch Heard vs Depp trial.

Seconded.

 

[Prince_Azmiran_Myrian]

They never take accountability and their selfish delusions know no bounds.

 

[Whitephantom]

I mean i get how they act, i somehow cant put that into a dialogue, basically i cant think of how to make the character say this and that, that could be used later on in the series if that makes sense

 

[ACFoster99]

Being extremely into their own looks is something you could put in.
Not a single person can come close to looking as beautiful as the narcissist character, everyone else just looks like a slob type of thing.

 

[Whitephantom]

Watch Heard vs Depp trial.

i tried and it was a great show to watch again, still couldnt relate it to my character for dialogue use tho

 

[Placeholder]

DARVO: Denial, then Accusation, Reversing Victim and Offender.

 

[RepresentingWrath]

i tried and it was a great show to watch again, still couldnt relate it to my character for dialogue use tho

I didn't expect this. Can you perhaps elaborate on what are the exact problems you have? Without being afraid to spoil things. Are you struggling to make a foreshadowing?

 

[Whitephantom]

I didn't expect this. Can you perhaps elaborate on what are the exact problems you have? Without being afraid to spoil things. Are you struggling to make a foreshadowing?

yea so my problem is writing a narcissist character, not so much foreshadowing. Like how they act around other people, what they do in this said situation compared to a normal person, how they reply and react to certain things if that makes sense. So for the character in question I’m lightly introducing her character and her narcissistic side to her, I can link the dialogue and where I’m at currently

 

[Corty]

• Make her correct others constantly
• If anyone says something new she should explain she already knew that
• She has to do everything by herself and is not satisfied with others’ works
• If others have a conversation she has to interject and make it about herself somehow
• If anyone has an achievement she tries to one-up it with something
• If she gets ignored she gets upset more than she should
• Has to have the last word in any argument
• She can’t make wrong decisions and every mistake is others’ fault

That is what came to mind for now.

 

[RepresentingWrath]

yea so my problem is writing a narcissist character, not so much foreshadowing. Like how they act around other people, what they do in this said situation compared to a normal person, how they reply and react to certain things if that makes sense. So for the character in question I’m lightly introducing her character and her narcissistic side to her, I can link the dialogue and where I’m at currently

I'm not a good author, but you probably should link the dialogue for other authors who can give you good advice.

As for how to write a narcissist. Well, one of the easy ways is to make the narcissist always interrupt others in dialogues. Narcissist would always talk about themself, so they would say what they would do, how they would react, and so on. "If it was me" "You know, I used to do it" "I had lunch there, it's much better that that place" and similar stuff. They interrupt others to grab the attention, and say how they are better, or at least on the same level. Somewhat exaggerated, but I hope it will help you.

 

[Whitephantom]

I'm not a good author, but you probably should link the dialogue for other authors who can give you good advice.

As for how to write a narcissist. Well, one of the easy ways is to make the narcissist always interrupt others in dialogues. Narcissist would always talk about themself, so they would say what they would do, how they would react, and so on. "If it was me" "You know, I used to do it" "I had lunch there, it's much better that that place" and similar stuff. They interrupt others to grab the attention, and say how they are better, or at least on the same level. Somewhat exaggerated, but I hope it will help you.

yea it did, ill post the part im on in the title then

 

[TheMonotonePuppet]

To get to the needy greedy, im writing a pretty narcy character who's female, sadly for me i never met one (i think) and cant really grasp a way one who is a narcy would reply to everyday people if that makes sense. So basically i can write the background, but not the dialogue between the narcy and another to be fluid. Just need some suggestions on how to tackle this brain scrambler.

I don't know how to give advice, but I do want to try my hand at dialogue for that... hmmm... maybe like:

"You knocked into my experiment!" I shouted, embarrassed as all get out.
The girl in white clothes smiled amusedly at me, a cat-like, half-lidded stare just pressuring me into being even more flustered. She moved assuredly right up into my space, placing her hand on my shoulder.
Personal bubble, girl! You heard of it before?
"Don't worry. I already forgive you for setting near me," she said magnanimously, before frizzing up my carefully tended cornrows.
My eye twitched.
"It's a slight upon the world if you don't quickly clean your issues for me, so do so. Then wipe my shoes," she commanded as evidently as if she said the sky was blue.
"Girl... what the fuck, bitch? Who are you?" I exclaimed, looking at her with aghast askance.
Her face froze for a second, blinking for nearly ten seconds straight.
"I'm sorry. Could you repeat that question?" she asked with a befuddled tone.
"Who. Are. You?" I practically spelled out.
"I'm... me." She looked me up and down with a grimace of disbelief. Her head just shakes back and forth, her eyes squinting.
"Hahahahaha!" she chuckled deep from within her throat, literal tears of laughter falling from her light green eyes. "You are amusing. Who am I?" It appeared as if I had made her day with my apparently hilarious comedy.
My lips pulled back in a worried smile, more a baring of teeth than any shared amusement.
"Seriously though... who are you?"
"You can't be serious. I refuse to believe that a child so idiotic exists." she said, with veritable, back-breaking, tons of condescension weighing each and every syllable.
"You are literally a high school student just like me," I laugh out angrily.
"And? I am me. That should be enough to put me head and shoulders above you," she states simply, eyes still searching my face for any admiration of her.

 

[greyblob]

To get to the needy greedy, im writing a pretty narcy character who's female, sadly for me i never met one (i think) and cant really grasp a way one who is a narcy would reply to everyday people if that makes sense. So basically i can write the background, but not the dialogue between the narcy and another to be fluid. Just need some suggestions on how to tackle this brain scrambler.


Heres the part im stuck on vocalizing having the main goal here to be a introduction on the character (Alexsis) show her personality
"
Raiza) “ Hey, how's ya doing? Anything hurt? Are you in any pain?”


His words were spoken in a calm and patient tone, contrasting with his usual boisterous nature. The group was taken aback by the unfamiliar sound of Raiza's voice, so different from his usual masculine tone. It reverberated with a femininity that felt out of place, leaving them unsettled just a tad.


(Righteous) "I'm fine, really! But how about you, Mother? It's clear that Soror did an exceptional job... Thank you, Soror," she expressed with compassion, bowing slightly. Soror couldn't help but smugly smile at the recognition he received from Righteous for his handiwork. Regina, however, couldn't conceal her jealousy, resenting that Soror had received praise before her in Righteous's eyes. Righteous's voice quivered with a mixture of exhaustion and suppressed sadness as she struggled to maintain her composure. Her weary eyes, once filled with vibrant energy, now carried the weight of her fatigue. The room fell silent, the air heavy with unspoken concern.


Regina, although the mood is sour her urgency in proving her worth was more then what Righteous know was needed to be proven, so she spoke her mind on the ordeal, wearing a veil of competition on her face.


(Regina) " Hey!! Don't leave me out of the picture! I was helping him with keeping mother's soul intact so that it wont break!


(Soror)" Humph, you left out Arenea! She helped me get the tools necessary to fix mother!" Soror snapped back. Regina growled lowly as her face contorted in anger knowing he was right for once.


(Arenea) "We-well-" Before she could even get her words out Alexsis beat her to the punch


(Alexsis) " Guys! Shut UP!! Your bickering over who saved mother is not of any importance here!"


(Heathien) "Right now none of you all should have ever even thought about such inferior motives, Regina! Heathien's words were stern, his voice low and commanding. "We were all working together to save Mother, not to prove ourselves. Have some humility and gratitude for the fact that we were able to save her."


Heathien gives a look towards Regina as if looking at a dog. But so does Regina back at both Alexsis and Heathien. Alexsis with a proud, condescending tone talked down on the four, mainly for her pleasure of looking down on Arenea for her own fun


(Alexsis)" You all shouldn't even be glad to boast about your achievements, specially you Regina, is it that you're trying to make mother your step stool to your ever growing pride? You even forgot that Arenea was there with you~" She said as a smile formed, not too big, not too little. Just a simple smile.


Regina scowled at it. It held pride bigger then what she was letting on"

(This is still in the editing stage too btw) To add more context behind whats happening, Raiza had a little accident almost dying in a big fight, being saved by his children, Soror, Regina, Righteous and Arenea mainly. Alexsis and Arenea has a older-younger sister type of relationship and id want to add Alexsis narcasstic personality hinting towards that relationship in the series. So like this is pretty much a character set up and a character dynamic set up too i guess. Just confused on how to and what to add dialogue wise for a narcy

you need to edit this if you want more feedback. i read it 4 times to understand it.

what you wrote is not bad. her yelling for everyone to shut up is a good start. it draws attention to herself.

I'd follows it up with something like "I was so worried about you." it makes the situation about her not the injured.

something like "look how red my eyes are" brings further attention to her and draws sympathy to her instead.

i dont know anymore about the context of the scene. maybe have her praise herself by demeaning others(?) "If only X didn't do Y and sat quitly like me".

the point is she has to be the center. she has to be seen and heard and she has to be better than someone else (not necessarily everyone).

 

[Whitephantom]

you need to edit this if you want more feedback. i read it 4 times to understand it.

what you wrote is not bad. her yelling for everyone to shut up is a good start. it draws attention to herself.

I'd follows it up with something like "I was so worried about you." it makes the situation about her not the injured.

something like "look how red my eyes are" brings further attention to her and draws sympathy to her instead.

i dont know anymore about the context of the scene. maybe have her praise herself by demeaning others(?) "If only X didn't do Y and sat quitly like me".

the point is she has to be the center. she has to be seen and heard and she has to be better than someone else (not necessarily everyone).

yeah ill be working on fixing it, but i was going that route where she would draw attention to herself kinda using the past event as a crutch

yeah ill be working on fixing it, but i was going that route where she would draw attention to herself kinda using the past event as a crutch

oh and can you tell me what exactly it was that u couldn't understand? (hopefully nothin major)

 

[greyblob]

yeah ill be working on fixing it, but i was going that route where she would draw attention to herself kinda using the past event as a crutch

oh and can you tell me what exactly it was that u couldn't understand? (hopefully nothin major)

i'll be blunt.. it's borderline unreadable. paragraphs are molded together. I don't know what starts where and who is saying what. as a rule of thumb try to keep every speaker in a separate paragraph. Example below. also thiss way you don't need the (speaker) brackets.

(Raiza) “Hey, how's ya doing? Anything hurt? Are you in any pain?” His words were spoken in a calm and patient tone, contrasting with his usual boisterous nature.

The group was taken aback by the unfamiliar sound of Raiza's voice, so different from his usual masculine tone. It reverberated with a femininity that felt out of place, leaving them unsettled just a tad.

(Righteous) "I'm fine, really! But how about you, Mother? It's clear that Soror did an exceptional job... Thank you, Soror," she expressed with compassion, bowing slightly.

Soror couldn't help but smugly smile at the recognition he received from Righteous for his handiwork. Regina, however, couldn't conceal her jealousy, resenting that Soror had received praise before her in Righteous's eyes.

Righteous's voice quivered with a mixture of exhaustion and suppressed sadness as she struggled to maintain her composure. Her weary eyes, once filled with vibrant energy, now carried the weight of her fatigue. The room fell silent, the air heavy with unspoken concern.

Regina, although the mood is sour her urgency in proving her worth was more then what Righteous know was needed to be proven, so she spoke her mind on the ordeal, wearing a veil of competition on her face. "Hey!! Don't leave me out of the picture! I was helping him with keeping mother's soul intact so that it wont break!"

(Soror) "Humph, you left out Arenea! She helped me get the tools necessary to fix mother!" Soror snapped back. Regina growled lowly as her face contorted in anger knowing he was right for once."

(Arenea) "We-well-" Before she could even get her words out Alexsis beat her to the punch

(Alexsis) " Guys! Shut UP!! Your bickering over who saved mother is not of any importance here!"

(Heathien) "Right now none of you all should have ever even thought about such inferior motives, Regina!" Heathien's words were stern, his voice low and commanding. "We were all working together to save Mother, not to prove ourselves. Have some humility and gratitude for the fact that we were able to save her."

He gives a look towards Regina as if looking at a dog. But so does Regina back at both Alexsis and Heathien.

Alexsis with a proud, condescending tone talked down on the four, mainly for her pleasure of looking down on Arenea for her own fun. (Alexsis)" You all shouldn't even be glad to boast about your achievements, specially you Regina, is it that you're trying to make mother your step stool to your ever growing pride? You even forgot that Arenea was there with you~" She said as a smile formed, not too big, not too little. Just a simple smile.

Regina scowled at it. It held pride bigger then what she was letting on.

 

[Whitephantom]

i'll be blunt.. it's borderline unreadable. paragraphs and molded together. I don't know what starts where and who is saying what. as a rule of thumb try to keep every speaker in a separate paragraph. Example below. also thiss way you don't need the (speaker) brackets.

ahhhhh ok, i thought what i was doing before was more ¨noob like¨ because i was keeping each speaker separate before, was trying something new in the edits, which i will note down not to do. And i used the brackets since using ---> : <--- didnt really look right to me visual wise, and besides using ---> : <---- what are some suggestions in mind i could use if not this ¨ : ¨