Synopsis feedback. T_T

[ManwX]

Just wanted some feedback on my synopsis. If it's catchy or interesting or not. Im being daring and writing a horror/thriller story.

I woke up on a desolate vessel. The air is heavy with a musty smell that seems to seep into your skin. The walls are metallic, cracked, and weathered by years of neglect. The flickering fluorescent lights overhead cast a sickly off-white glow on everything. .A shiver runs down my spine. I had no memory of how I got here but the worst thing was I had this ominous feeling that I was not alone.

I wonder if its any good
edit.
okay so i understand you gys points. I have the original version but maybe it reveal a little to much. but ill just share it so you can give me some feedback.

After awakening on a mysterious spaceship in deep space, a man discovers he's been tasked with maintaining the ship's functions while unraveling the mystery of his situation. With no idea where the ship is headed or how he got there, he must fight to maintain his sanity in the isolation of space filled with an unease that he was not alone but far from it. As he performs his duties, he begins to uncover dark secrets about the ship's origins and purpose, leading him on a treacherous journey.

 

[greyblob]

this is the first paragraph of your novel not a synopsis

 

[georgelee5786]

this is the first paragraph of your novel not a synopsis

^

 

[RepresentingCaution]

A synopsis should include a question or three to entice the reader.

 

[Dearest_Violet]

You may want to put the name of the father in the line before, I got a little confused when reading about the name of a character introduced already.

Also I think its fine! Though I'm no expert in this genre.

 

[Yorth]

Just wanted some feedback on my synopsis. If it's catchy or interesting or not. Im being daring and writing a horror/thriller story.

I woke up on a desolate vessel. The air is heavy with a musty smell that seems to seep into your skin. The walls are metallic, cracked, and weathered by years of neglect. The flickering fluorescent lights overhead cast a sickly off-white glow on everything. .A shiver runs down my spine. I had no memory of how I got here but the worst thing was I had this ominous feeling that I was not alone.

I wonder if its any good

I don't mind it honestly, it's interesting!

 

[WinterTimeCrime]

For web novels, it'll slide.
For ScribbleHub, it'll side.
But for anywhere else, you'll need to write anything or anywhere else to introduce a setting, idea, or character. Your reader needs to be sure of at least some aspect of your book before they begin to read.

 

[ManwX]

this is the first paragraph of your novel not a synopsis

have another version but I don't know if it's good. It reveals too much info but here it is.

After awakening on a mysterious spaceship in deep space, a man discovers he's been tasked with maintaining the ship's functions while unraveling the mystery of his situation. With no idea where the ship is headed or how he got there, he must fight to maintain his sanity in the isolation of space filled with an unease that he was not alone but far from it. As he performs his duties, he begins to uncover dark secrets about the ship's origins and purpose, leading him on a treacherous journey.

For web novels, it'll slide.
For ScribbleHub, it'll side.
But for anywhere else, you'll need to write anything or anywhere else to introduce a setting, idea, or character. Your reader needs to be sure of at least some aspect of your book before they begin to read.

I have the original version. I didnt want to use it but can you just confirm if that is any good?

After awakening on a mysterious spaceship in deep space, a man discovers he's been tasked with maintaining the ship's functions while unraveling the mystery of his situation. With no idea where the ship is headed or how he got there, he must fight to maintain his sanity in the isolation of space filled with an unease that he was not alone but far from it. As he performs his duties, he begins to uncover dark secrets about the ship's origins and purpose, leading him on a treacherous journey

 

[greyblob]

have another version but I don't know if it's good. It reveals too much info but here it is.

After awakening on a mysterious spaceship in deep space, a man discovers he's been tasked with maintaining the ship's functions while unraveling the mystery of his situation. With no idea where the ship is headed or how he got there, he must fight to maintain his sanity in the isolation of space filled with an unease that he was not alone but far from it. As he performs his duties, he begins to uncover dark secrets about the ship's origins and purpose, leading him on a treacherous journey.

ye this is much closer to a synopsis. you don't have to reveal that much information if you dont want to. and you don't actually have to use a 'proper' synopsis. there are no rules here. i personally prefer the second one, others might disagree. pick what you think feels right

 

[WinterTimeCrime]

have another version but I don't know if it's good. It reveals too much info but here it is.

After awakening on a mysterious spaceship in deep space, a man discovers he's been tasked with maintaining the ship's functions while unraveling the mystery of his situation. With no idea where the ship is headed or how he got there, he must fight to maintain his sanity in the isolation of space filled with an unease that he was not alone but far from it. As he performs his duties, he begins to uncover dark secrets about the ship's origins and purpose, leading him on a treacherous journey.

I have the original version. I didnt want to use it but can you just confirm if that is any good?

After awakening on a mysterious spaceship in deep space, a man discovers he's been tasked with maintaining the ship's functions while unraveling the mystery of his situation. With no idea where the ship is headed or how he got there, he must fight to maintain his sanity in the isolation of space filled with an unease that he was not alone but far from it. As he performs his duties, he begins to uncover dark secrets about the ship's origins and purpose, leading him on a treacherous journey

The second one is quite nice—more of a synopsis than the prior one. As per the comment above, you're free to use either, but if you plan to post the story elsewhere you should use the polished synopsis.