Magic and a psychotic dragon! What's wrong?

[Kidd_Wadsworth]

Okay people. Why aren't people reading my book? I mean REALLY, why aren't people reading my book. I've got a freakin insane dragon hunting a beautiful magical girl. What more could you want?

--Kidd

 

[RepresentingWrath]

Why should people read your book?

 

[Kidd_Wadsworth]

It's entertaining.

 

[RepresentingWrath]

It's entertaining.

This reason is so-so.

 

[Deleted member 54065]

You need gender bender smut. This is ScribbleHub, with a second name SmutHub.

Oh, and your cover needs to have an anime girl with big ti**ies.

 

[AuntieMaysLittleCousin]

My own advice? Short synopsis that doesn't try to hard on being fun, mix a teeny tiny bit of absurd humor, and promote your story with a freakin' huge cover in your signature, plus some cool phrases.
But don't try too hard to sell you book either, or you'll end up with the book your readers want to read, instead of the ones you want to write.

 

[Prince_Azmiran_Myrian]

I'm not reading because I'm too busy fixing some of my chapters. I'll start soon just please take the whip away!

 

[BearlyAlive]

You have neither isekai harem powerfantasy nor genderbender isekai harem powerfantasy! And you even have neither without smut! That's the only problem!
Make it so your MC gets reincarnated into a psycho dragon that kills everyone he doesn't fuck and readers will run down your doors. Even better if you turn it into male MC gets reincarnated into a female lesbian psycho dragon that kills everyone she doesn't fuck.

Please don't. Seriously. Don't!

It's more of a publicity problem. Talk about it, let others talk about it and if it's good people will come and stay on their own.

 

[CupcakeNinja]

You just gotta gitgud

 

[ThrillingHuman]

I can't even find it for once

 

[mitkopom]

Here is my reason why i wont read your story:
You killed the heroine in the fakin prologue?! So you expect me to read further while knowing her efforts to survive are futile? it will be most depressing read ever

 

[WinterTimeCrime]

Okay people. Why aren't people reading my book? I mean REALLY, why aren't people reading my book. I've got a freakin insane dragon hunting a beautiful magical girl. What more could you want?

--Kidd

People's minds are moving a mile a minute these days, so looks truly do count, especially online.

Your Title, Synopsis, and Cover Art are the first things people see, so make a good impression.

Death of Magic is okay, I guess. But personally, I wouldn't pick up a book with such an artless title, but that's just me. If I were the author, I'd try something like Dragonheart, Flame & Spell, or something cool or stunning man I don't know.

Your synopsis doesn't grab attention at all, either. No thought-provoking questions or interesting facts. Your summary is supposed to grip and tug me into turning to the next page... And you don't really leave anything for interpretation. Like, you basically explained why the dragon is hunting the girl (for food), the main characters

Before humans or magic, there were dragons. Casting looming shadows above the seas and earth, they ravished lands and ate any magical beings caught in their trail with raptorial intent. With magic ceasing to exist and the last of the magical beings falling with it, the world is tipped in an uncertain balance between drakes and sorcery. While discovering the secrets of the disappearing magics, will fate bind Saoirse with an unusual scaled companion?

That's just an example. Leaves it up for interpretation, not too much explanation, and a question at the end for readers to answer. We don't say what's going to happen, but we let the reader know that we know, that they know what's going to happen. You get me?

OR... Or... You can just forget putting any thought into it and slap a young miss on the cover art. Commissioned some covers for my books and my views went up instantly, and I don't even write porn. I promise you, these guys love looking at females, even if it isn't smut it's crazy.

Here is my reason why i wont read your story:
You killed the heroine in the fakin prologue?! So you expext me to read further while knowing her efforts to survive are futile?

And this better not be true. That's like pretensing sex by offering the sensation of orgasm at the start, then expecting me to get in the covers and do the work. Bitch, I already came. Why the fuck am I 'bout to fuck for, I already nutted??

 

[TheEldritchGod]

What more could you want?

Massively Magnificent Mellifluent Mounds of Mammalia!

 

[ACertainPassingUser]

The premise sounds too meh and normal for me. It sounds too bland. And its not excite me too much.

I mean, really, the premise said : the last dragon and the last magician fight to the end while the world is kinda fucked up horribly.

If I think about it, Reminds me of Lord of the Ring where Gandalf vs Balrog fight. Or maybe Kratos vs Greece gods who kept fighting despite the chaos ensues around them.

But it only said, another dragon and typical magician fight to the end. What's exciting about it ? It should be exciting but why it sounds boring ?

Well, I'm just another biased critique who like isekai protagonist to find interesting clash between our world idea and knowledge and the fantasy world.

Maybe put more exciting premise and add more tags ? Well, it's just bland advice. Idk how to actually make it more exciting. But it's your job, not mine.

 

[Kidd_Wadsworth]

Here is my reason why i wont read your story:
You killed the heroine in the fakin prologue?! So you expect me to read further while knowing her efforts to survive are futile? it will be most depressing read ever

But I didn't kill the heroine. She simply slid down the dragon's throat. Go on. . .give it a read. --Kidd

The premise sounds too meh and normal for me. It sounds too bland. And its not excite me too much.

I mean, really, the premise said : the last dragon and the last magician fight to the end while the world is kinda fucked up horribly.

If I think about it, Reminds me of Lord of the Ring where Gandalf vs Balrog fight. Or maybe Kratos vs Greece gods who kept fighting despite the chaos ensues around them.

But it only said, another dragon and typical magician fight to the end. What's exciting about it ? It should be exciting but why it sounds boring ?

Well, I'm just another biased critique who like isekai protagonist to find interesting clash between our world idea and knowledge and the fantasy world.

Maybe put more exciting premise and add more tags ? Well, it's just bland advice. Idk how to actually make it more exciting. But it's your job, not mine.

Read the prologue. They don't fight it out in the end. This is not Lord of Rings. This is far more real. Go on. . .give it a read. --Kidd

People's minds are moving a mile a minute these days, so looks truly do count, especially online.

Your Title, Synopsis, and Cover Art are the first things people see, so make a good impression.

Death of Magic is okay, I guess. But personally, I wouldn't pick up a book with such an artless title, but that's just me. If I were the author, I'd try something like Dragonheart, Flame & Spell, or something cool or stunning man I don't know.

Your synopsis doesn't grab attention at all, either. No thought-provoking questions or interesting facts. Your summary is supposed to grip and tug me into turning to the next page... And you don't really leave anything for interpretation. Like, you basically explained why the dragon is hunting the girl (for food), the main characters

Before humans or magic, there were dragons. Casting looming shadows above the seas and earth, they ravished lands and ate any magical beings caught in their trail with raptorial intent. With magic ceasing to exist and the last of the magical beings falling with it, the world is tipped in an uncertain balance between drakes and sorcery. While discovering the secrets of the disappearing magics, will fate bind Saoirse with an unusual scaled companion?

That's just an example. Leaves it up for interpretation, not too much explanation, and a question at the end for readers to answer. We don't say what's going to happen, but we let the reader know that we know, that they know what's going to happen. You get me?

OR... Or... You can just forget putting any thought into it and slap a young miss on the cover art. Commissioned some covers for my books and my views went up instantly, and I don't even write porn. I promise you, these guys love looking at females, even if it isn't smut it's crazy.


And this better not be true. That's like pretensing sex by offering the sensation of orgasm at the start, then expecting me to get in the covers and do the work. Bitch, I already came. Why the fuck am I 'bout to fuck for, I already nutted??

Hmmm...interesting suggestion. You don't like the cover, and you don't like the story blurb. Got it. I'll work on those. Thanks, Kidd

I can't even find it for once

Can you click on the cover I've attached? I thought it should take you to the page. Let me know if it doesn't. That's a real problem. --Kidd

You just gotta gitgud

Did you read the prologue before you said that? --Kidd

This reason is so-so.

Really? Why would you read a story?

 

[rain-090]

Okay people. Why aren't people reading my book? I mean REALLY, why aren't people reading my book. I've got a freakin insane dragon hunting a beautiful magical girl. What more could you want?

--Kidd

Does it have an anime girl cover?

 

[Kidd_Wadsworth]

nope

 

[APieceOfRock]

Just a tip. A small inconsequential tip: Add more tags. Excluding the main tags (which is only 4 in your case), your story only have 5 tags. There can and should absolutely be more.

 

[Kidd_Wadsworth]

Will do

 

[AuntieMaysLittleCousin]

So in the end, I think I can sum everything up in this:

1-) Use an ingenious, original title. Don't overdo though, someone talked about Dragonheart blah blah blah, but in my experience people tend to like simple titles. Add a parenthesis in the title if you want to make it longer, something like: "Death of Magic (Or Why is that dragon still chasing me?!)" A bit of humor on it won't kill you, even if you're not writing a comedy. There are several styles, but short and simple, and comical with tags, are the ones that suit your situation the most.

2-) An eye-catching book cover. Not necessarily hot girls with revealing outfit, but something that makes you say "Hold on a sec, what's this?" (Also, in my personal opinion, I've seen so many book covers with hot boys-girls in this site I'm growing tired of the eye candy)

3-) Improve your signature. First of all, don't use the book's synopsis on it, just put on an image and something that very briefly describes the summary of your story. You can also add mysterious cool phrases, and the like.

4-) Without changing your style, spice up your story a bit. I can't do enough emphasis on the part where you keep writing with your own style because I've seen some stories fall in the "I'll just write whatever gets me more views and follows" cycle. Mine was one of them, until I rescued it with a rewrite. Even so, try to add little bits of comedy, romance or puzzles into it, something that makes people go "Hmm, it's about a dragon chasing a girl, but it's got plenty of content".

5-) Don't make a boring story. This one is separate from previous one because, even following the above advice, there are some redflags most people avoid (or is it just me?) Some of them? Extensive description of the scenario and actions to the point where you just feel like skipping the whole part. Fast dialogues without intermixed scenes. Pilling together one event after another without giving suspense a rest. These are just a few, you could find more asking around in this same forum

Well, that's it. I hope this was useful to you, as these are the rules I follow to write my stories (Though they are mostly comedies, I think it could still apply to non-related thematics). Hoping you get lots of more views

--Lil Cousin​